Unbound Deathlord: Challenge

by edwardcastle

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Drama Fantasy Anti-Hero Lead LitRPG Magic Male Lead Strategy Virtual Reality
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

Due to Amazon's Kindle Unlimited rules, I had to pull most of the book content from RoyalRoad.

Only sample chapters remain.

To read a fiction that will never be removed from Royal Road, I recommend my other fiction: Immortal Mage.


The first two books of the series are out on Amazon:

Book 1: Unbound Deathlord: Challenge
Book 2: Unbound Deathlord: Obliteration 


Book 1: Challenge

When virtual reality becomes real enough that people feel as if they’re being transported to another world, Valia Online arrives.

A man running from his past joins the game to forget it all. Calling himself Jack Thorn, he chooses an undead race, Deathlord.

A mage by choice, and a swordsman by necessity, he soon finds out that he’ll need to use much more than magic and steel to survive; strategy, creativity, and carefully chosen words can often accomplish what simple attacks can’t.

As the game becomes too real and touches a part of him that he’d rather leave buried, he is faced with two questions:

Who is he, really?

And who should he become?

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bragghia
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I feel like your a bit of a redditer

I enjoyed your since of humor and use of random internet and story troupes.

catbearpenguin
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Gi gi gu. Well worth reading wuve more than turtles

OOOO amazing well written can wait for the next trimester. i mean chapter 

Azcheron
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Innovative Magic, Deep Characters and a compelling Plotline

Character interactions are ace. Plot and story are well planned and executed. Magic system is different than most others I have seen, but maintains a structured approach. Good fightscenes which are detailed and quite accurate. Style is refreshing and the humour is great. Overall I have to give it 5/5 

Grammer improved drastically after implementation of Grammerly, and you were't afraid to change mistakes which people noticed.

LordPrettyFlacko
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Yea I like this story a lot. The only thing that needs improvement is the grammar. I wonder how long is gonna take for the MC to reach the surface. (If he ever does :))

Hammarsten
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story is funny, and intense. great read so far, and i need more 

Magoo
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I did not care for the game mechanics or the descriptions of quests, items, combat, etc. I stopped reading after a few chapters mainly do to those reasons.

 

Style: I didn't care for it myself. It's about average for the site.

 

Story: I think it needed more of the MC's backstory up front. Checking out of reality due to the MC having issues is not that great of a starter for me.

 

Grammar: About average for the site. Typos, spelling mistakes, missing or incorrect words for the intended meaning.

 

Character: Didn't like the MC. Whiny rich kid has issues? Don't we all...

 

 

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Umbargrey
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Likable but indicating towards cliché and OP MC in the near future.

Likable MC and quite funny at times. He feels protected by plot armour and grows quickly to have more potential and power than many others. I never got so far as to see his magnificent plot armour in full glory and OPness to the max but I can guess it. I may be wrong but... veeery unlikely in my own oppinion. OP MC is simply not my thing, I find it cliché.

ncross11
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Why isn't this on Amazon?

This story is fantastic and the author should definately be getting paid for it. I can't wait for more!

kofu
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One of the best light novels so far

I really like this approach of the author. I think is an alternative to the overused storys so far..

Keep it coming!