Unbound Deathlord: Challenge

by edwardcastle

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Drama Fantasy Anti-Hero Lead LitRPG Magic Male Lead Strategy Virtual Reality
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

Due to Amazon's Kindle Unlimited rules, I had to pull most of the book content from RoyalRoad.

Only sample chapters remain.

To read a fiction that will never be removed from Royal Road, I recommend my other fiction: Immortal Mage.


The first two books of the series are out on Amazon:

Book 1: Unbound Deathlord: Challenge
Book 2: Unbound Deathlord: Obliteration 


Book 1: Challenge

When virtual reality becomes real enough that people feel as if they’re being transported to another world, Valia Online arrives.

A man running from his past joins the game to forget it all. Calling himself Jack Thorn, he chooses an undead race, Deathlord.

A mage by choice, and a swordsman by necessity, he soon finds out that he’ll need to use much more than magic and steel to survive; strategy, creativity, and carefully chosen words can often accomplish what simple attacks can’t.

As the game becomes too real and touches a part of him that he’d rather leave buried, he is faced with two questions:

Who is he, really?

And who should he become?

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bulltrollape
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well thought out plot with an good character progression speed, realistic characters and situations 

Steve Moss
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Well thought out, interesting environment, clever protagonist (even if he is irritating).

Warlock515
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It's a good and interesting story. I realle like it and hope you keep writing more author-san!

Dimsum
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One of the better stories on my reading list.  Slow right now but I'm sure its because its in the beginning stages.  I would like more loots! He's the legendary spotter...

xion03
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review is up to chapter 23

 

A truly enjoyable read!

 

i'm not a native nor do i have any deeper knowledge about writing in general, so i'm not really able to say anything in depth about the writing style. there are some flashbacks here and there, but they're well placed. I'm actually unsure wherever there where any POVs other than the MC, suffice to say i don't remember any. if there were any, they weren't memorable enough :p

 

The story is very promising. its just the right amount of humor and seriousness for me. he has a clear and realistically achievable goal at the moment (survive and win the challenge).  This goal isn't completely unrealistic as a lot of other VR-Novel games imagine (i.e. "only one person can win world-wide and he'll become a millionaire").

 

There are some minor errors over the chapters. sadly, my nexus 7 started to act up around chapter 5, so i gave up pointing them out. the author reacts really quick, so i encourage potential readers to mention them in each chapter. he's sure to fix them quickly :)

 

I'm removing one star from the character rating only because there are no real side-characters. The MC is pretty well done - he has character, history and his problems. but there is currently no other character in play thats even remotely as interesting as the MC (and i don't mean a romatic interest with that. i just can't imagine a healthy and interesting relationship with a person as damaged as our MC :p ). I think it would've to be a NPC, somebody the MC doesn't actually take completely serious because with his history, i can't imagine the MC treating another human  fairly.

Solfyr
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Pretty damn enjoyable

Main character is eccentric and the nuggets of his past make me want to see more, I like the pacing and am hoping to have more chapter.

jplauy
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A very good story whit a diferent aproach some how to the litrpg genere

 Good frequency of update, good grammar skills and very good narration, all combined to give the reader a very enjoyable time with this story.

Pal5O
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It's a solid little story and I have been enjoying the daily updates. Thanks for the effort and please keep it coming. 

Dannyboy3210
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Having read a few light novels where the main character is undead, this one stands out with a main character who is NOT just a sociopathic murder-hobo. Sure, he's got flaws, but he's trying to the best of his ability and persevering.

I'm also seeing a lot less clichés than I'm used to, which is refreshing.

phuang2001
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Good entry into the LitRPG

A very good story.  MC is an ass but that means the writing is good when you start to feel emotions.  I am very excited to explore and follow this story.  Well worth the read.