Agent of the Realm?

by Andur

Original COMPLETED Action Comedy Drama Fantasy Psychological Romance Martial Arts School Life Supernatural
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I am Seria, the goddess of life and death. I was fathered by Chaos and born by Order. I am the first ambassador who leaves the realm of Dedessia to make contact with the other realms. Dedessia is a harsh place, a place in which even immortals, demons and gods struggle to survive. Nonetheless we carved a path for ourselves and created a great kingdom. Something to be proud of. I am their representative and the first to make contact with the other realms. Can you imagine my surprise when they greet me with a fireball to the face? Me, the one who governs life and death!? Well, my wrath should be the least of their fears. They should hope that my parents never pay them a visit. But until that happens I'll play a little... ——————————————————————————————— Author’s Comment: I was asked about reading my work on other sites. The answer is simple: Currently I am not active in any other networks than royalroadl.com. Only here, I correct mistakes and errors. If you read it anywhere else and have to pay for it, or have to deal with an annoying amount of advertisement, You Are Being Betrayed. You would do good if you make other people in that network aware of it. This is a free project of mine for the purpose of having fun. And if people try to make money with it you shouldn’t bother visiting their website. The only one whom I actually allowed to have my work on his website is Armaell who invested the time to compile them into pdf. (http://armaell-library.net/author/andur)

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Chapter Name Release Date
1. ~Greetings.~ ago
2. ~On the streets.~ ago
3. ~Identity.~ ago
4. ~Bored agent.~ ago
5. ~Home sweet home.~ ago
6. ~Ball.~ ago
7. ~Guests.~ ago
8. ~Search.~ ago
9. ~Found.~ ago
10. ~Prisontime.~ ago
11. ~Ranking hour.~ ago
12. ~First Lesson.~ ago
13. ~Stalker.~ ago
14. ~Practice field.~ ago
15. ~Search.~ ago
16. ~Old and New.~ ago
17. ~More cards.~ ago
18. ~Contacts.~ ago
19. ~In motion.~ ago
20. ~Home, messy home.~ ago
21. ~Famous.~ ago
22. ~How far.~ ago
23. ~Discoveries.~ ago
24. ~Stealing flowers.~ ago
25. ~Visit.~ ago
26. ~Flowers and food.~ ago
27. ~Bogded.~ ago
28. ~Too big.~ ago
29. ~Issues.~ ago
30. ~Quarrel.~ ago
31. ~Declaration.~ ago
32. ~Whisked away.~ ago
33. ~Timeout.~ ago
34. ~Overtime.~ ago
35. ~Wild life.~ ago
36. ~The Queen.~ ago
37. ~King.~ ago
38. ~Sneak attack.~ ago
39. ~Much to do.~ ago
40. ~Results.~ ago
41. ~One more time.~ ago
42. ~Sightseeing.~ ago
43. ~Experiment.~ ago
44. ~Return.~ ago
45. ~Missed.~ ago
46. ~Who.~ ago
47. ~Arrival.~ ago
48. ~On a counter.~ ago
49. ~Citadel.~ ago
50. ~Charge.~ ago
51. ~Crashed.~ ago
52. ~On the verge.~ ago
53. ~Slipped away.~ ago
54. ~Return.~ ago
55. ~Queue up.~ ago
56. ~Search.~ ago
57. ~Clueless.~ ago
58. ~Poison.~ ago
59. ~Intelligence.~ ago
60. ~Counsellor.~ ago
61. ~Welcome ago
62. ~Friends.~ ago
63. ~Three.~ ago
64. ~Strategy.~ ago
65. ~Trouble.~ ago
66. ~Locked room.~ ago
67. ~Education.~ ago
68. ~Information.~ ago
69. ~Observe.~ ago
70. ~Messed up.~ ago
71 ~Personal.~ ago
72. ~New.~ ago
73. ~D.ad.~ ago
74. ~Stolen.~ ago
75. ~Crawl.~ ago
76. ~Observe.~ ago
77. ~Fighting dirty.~ ago
78. ~Split.~ ago
79. ~Alone in the end?~ ago
80. ~Epilogue~ // And new project ago
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Luneder
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Another great one by Andur

I have read Beyond but not the others so this is the second one I am reading from Andur I am loving how the MC is female instead of male while keeping the quality just as good since gender swapping tends to back fire because of the different personalities. It probably helps that Andur is looking at the reaction of not only the MC but also the supporting characters, a lot of authors tend to only take the MC point of view so the support end up shallow with only a yes or no personality or a minor information/conversation echo role.

Vantila
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All your stories are super good, and what they are conected is the best

Evrin
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Been a fan of Andur's stuff, and this doesn't disappoint

The title basically says it for me. I'm a fan of all the inter-related stories, and recommend it and it's kin to anyone new to the site

Schmi
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Guys this may be a spoiler so don't read if you haven't read the first book.... 

 

Okay on page 704 of the pdf of the first book, "Until Death?" that you can download for free from armaells library, it says: 

 

"The void zones are just the first sign that the number of observers is becoming too low.  I ask myself what the undefined state looks like.   Will it go *poof* and everything ceases to be?  Or will the universe dissolve into a big void zone with strange undefined physical laws..."  

(Angrod, when explaining how he spliced Enyo's soul with that of a snake and stuffed her into that second tail/whip thing)

 

This poses the question.  If Dedessia is a strange realm that goes on forever, and the universe has gone through a kind of reset, and there are seemingly no mortal souls, did the calamity come back and eat all the mortals?  Or did Angrod reset the universe and the mortals just didn't make it? 

Like dude, what crazy-ass experiment did Angrod do to kill everybody for once and for all?  Did he finalize his red destruction magic?  

Who is Angrod, really? 

dante0
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I find that you’re one of the better authors on RR, and that really anything I say will have been said before in one of your other works. So I’ll just be mentioning some things that stand out and some ways I think you can improve.

 

First off there’s the mixing up of character names Celestial/Stella/Sariel. It’s happened in every one of your works, and it’s really immersion breaking when it does.

 

Second, it’s not really bad, but all of your works are really similar. Whether it be the characters, or the world around them(namely their interaction with the world). If you want to improve I’d suggest trying different character personalities, environments, morals, events, goals, and aspirations, etc. Maybe try out some other writing style you aren’t familiar with too.

 

Third, after reading your works I tend to notice the general vagueness in everything. Ex: Magic system, world in general, character personality,  other people and so on. It’s not to the degree where it’s bad, but after reading your stories it starts to stand out because of the similarities between your works. This could be fixed by changing up your style and experimenting with other modes of writing, or changing your subject matter, or by going into detail and explaining what is necessary. It may take more chapters, but it would improve your work.

 

I’ll also mention that in Beyond?  I felt the characters where somewhat vague. that may have to do with all the multiple POV’s or the amount of interaction we saw between the characters. Alot of interaction was implied behind the scenes, but it would still be nice to see some of it to better establish more character depth. I think that the way you write now would be perfect for the side characters in a story. They’d have depth, but not too much to make them a protagonist.

 

TL;DR I’d like to see more character depth through interaction, and more detail in your work in general.

 

 

In the end, if you’re writing for fun then just keep doing what you’re doing, but if you want to improve then you need to start experimenting with your work trying out different characters, writing styles, environments ( Worlds, maybe a non-magic world?), etc. Regardless, I enjoy reading your stories and look forward to see what else you’ll write.

 

Thank you.

Volos
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A Solid Continuation of the Ander Universe

A solid and enjoyable yarn.  The grammar is excellent for the site, and the interaction between characters aids the plot progression.

My main critique is that I don't think it could stand well as an independant work, but perhaps it was not designed to do so.  I also felt a little disappointment with the development of parenting as aspect of the main characters.

At first I was quite excited at the issue being addressed (so often it is completely ignored, leading me to assume that most of the authors on the site don't have children), but I still think the surface has just barely been scratched on the subject.  Still I'm quite happy that it received the attention that it did, and I think that's is a sign of the overall consideration given to complete world building in Ander's work.