The Cursed Dragon

by Ad_thebest

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imafallen
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I have read this before.... (spoilers for the first few chapters be warned)

There is a difference between being inspired by a novel and copying the sequence of events completely. There is nothing wrong with being influenced by a story you like and applying that to your own work, but it should be your own work. The core of the  first few chapters is the exact same as what happens in Reincarnation: First Monster with minor differences, like him intervening in a rape and the timing of when he decides to kill bandits.

This felt more like copying and pasting First Monster and claiming it as your own. To me it does not matter that your story will be different later in, because the beginning killed this novel for me, along with other more minor issues such as length and pacing.

 

If the influence of First Monster had been much subtler, or had some key differences, i think that it would have turned out well. For example, Having the MC help out the female adventurers, or giving some other reason for their interest in the Mc. Or making it a wild beast wave instead of copy pasting the goblin attack.  

OPMeatbunLover
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let me summarize it .. an over 80k? or 8k? year old dragon that has mind or memory extraction powers but asks the enemies anyway for the information so they always gets away .. and he supposedly is very powerful and prideful but he lets anyone point their sword at him but let them go .. he easily bows his head to a human king and he barely uses his powers .. he also easily as in "EASILY" let a lower dragon steal his immortality when he supposedly "transcended higher dragons" so stupid grr so infuriating to read and those 3 idiot girls adventurers .. i hate how raizel did not just kill them off and now we have wasted chapters about them

LastPenisInTheWorld
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Like the concept  but the story bit too fast i think and for grammar need bit improvement for te style is good but same like grammar need bit of improvement

AomineZaky
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Not as bad as the reviews make it out to be

Sure enough the first few chapters had similarities to other stories, but almost nothing nowadays is 100% original. The story itself is pretty good for a first time. I am actually looking forward to reading more when more chapters are uploaded.

 

Style: Your style of writing is your weakest point. No matter how interesting a story is, if the presentation is not there, readers will stop reading. I'll narrow it down to two main issues - description and pacing. Description, you need to better flesh out the situation and describe whats happening as well as the environment. Placing a link to a picture ( no matter how epic the picture may be :3 ) is just avoiding the issue. Pacing refers to how long a situation goes for and how fast something occurs. This issue is not nearly as bad the description issue, albeit still bad. That being said, by adding more description to a given situation, the problem of pacing is normally dealt with. So add more and better descriptions.

 

Story: I really am enjoying the story itself. Sure enough, its not anime-worthy yet, but i can't see that happening with some tweaks here and there to the story. In your comments and reviews, sure enough there are a few haters but that's present for almost every story. Keep going however you want the story to go as we, the readers, are just riding along with you.

 

Grammar: A bit of an issue in the first few chapters, but the problems decrease as the story progresses. However the problem that's present in EVERY chapter is the issue of comma usage '' , ''. Sure enough, people who are adept in English can understand it fine, but that is not the case for every one on this site. 

 

Character: Consistency. A problem faced by every writer, but it's not that bad an issue as it is present in the majority of stories on this site. Now that there is an actual plot being fleshed out, make sure you stay consistent. Keep them in character and let them act how they would act in that situation without going against how you made them to be in the first place. Just let the story flow and you're good to go.

 

Overall: Yeah, i like it. minor issues here and there, but its a web novel. i didn't pay for it so i have no right to burn anyone or anything on this site. But, some constructive criticism is always good as there always room for improvement. Keep up the good work and i hope to keep on reading you stories, author-san :3 

Kandoral
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We have a dragon with powers he never uses

So the story is about an immortal cursed dragon with powers like mind reading (or mind extraction?)

He faces enemies, or rather he is played by enemies all the time, but never even considers using his power to get the information he needs, no he asks them all the time, just so they can get away. That is not only annoying AF but ruins the whole story

 

DO NOT RECOMMEND, don't even bother reading it

akasuna123
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I like fictions with op characters and dragon mc's . I won't like it the girl edna suddenly confesses to the mc and he accepts. She is just a weak human, raizel should give her some task like creating a kingdom or besting him.

B_Redames
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Worth a shot after the copied chapters

The first some chapters ( i think from 3 to 5 ) are copied with some minor changed here and there but the ending to those is entirely different .

 

If you can sit out through that then the curret arc ( from 7 chapter ) i think is pretty good and original 

It's nowhere near perfect the grammar is a bit awkward at times but it is worth a read when you consider it is the author's first time and the story is good .

 

so yea i am willing to give it a shot since the author seems to be improving .

 

 

 

adiwsp
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story qith great potential

This story has a great potential on it, yeah maybe if you read the synopsis or first few chapter it will look like a template story but honestly we already have tons of story that have same genre so it's no wonder there are similarity, this story is not an invention but a thing to read for our fun as a reader. If you willing to read this story until the end i believe your see the true worth of this story. And don't be fooled by bad review this story is really good and fun. Unless you are professor in literature and try to examine this work professionally then of course yo will find the minus point of this story, bus as a reader this story is great