The world of Verre is a strange and wonderful place filled with strange, bewitching landscapes, hidden planes and daunting dangers. In the midst of this wonder and beauty is a harmonic anarchy. Earth and heaven lie opposed and mankind wars with itself as well as the fearsome beasts they live alongside. It is the right setting for myths and legends. Empires and kingdoms, heroes and villains, all rise and fall. Men, women and daemons compete on this stage seeking godhood, making names for themselves and establishing legacies of their own.
Born into one of these legacies is Valerian Steelborn of the House of Cragsveil. Blessed with keen acumen and remarkable abilities he steps into a world he expects a lot out of and it, him. How far would he go and what legacy would he leave behind?
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Let me start by saying that this story is very well thought out, you can feel the dedication the author has put into it. Thats why I made sure to at least finish Book 1 and read about half of Book 2 before posting this here, but in the end it just isn't for me.
Lets start with the good, most of which is comprised of a well thought out world, humane characters, and a good power system.
But the way it was delivered... thats where the problems starts.
Anyone who ever attempted to write a story should know the "Show don't tell" concept, and boi this story suffers because of it
The perspective in which the story is told, coupled with one too many imfodumps killed my motivation to read this story. There's no emotion, we are just told about the MC exploits way too often, and the parts were there is some "showing" aren't able to get around the massive quantity of imfodumps, killing the pacing of the story.
And all of that coupled with an MC that is OP from the start, and is purposefully aloof and good at everything, made him really difficult to relate for me, even with the attempts to bring him down a notch with the whole Clan drama cus he's a cripple mumbo jumbo thing, specially because the way its written killed any connection I could've formed with the character.
tl;dr - amazing! you won't be dissapointed
Overall/Story - As far as cultivation stories go, this one is a gem. Slow paced, and not a constant mish-mash of 'Mt. Tai' and spoiled masters. It keeps an amazing border of making the MC an OP individual, without taking him so far beyond that there is no real challenge. All in All, I'd recommend it to anyone who likes cultivation or fantasy genres. Great world building, Great character interaction, something I'm excited to see on my bookmarks list.
Grammar & Style - The grammar and spelling could use work, occasionally words are left out of sentences. The punctuation is kinda off at times, I'm not entirely sure why the quotations marks always seem to be missing. Despite that, its easily understood regardless. The style however is great, the story telling ability and placement of info-dumps is appropriate, and even across the chapters rather than so much at the beginning.
Character - Great marks here, though many of the characters may seem unrelateable at times, since we are very spoiled at very basic archetypes in most stories. They are genuinely fleshed out characters, with their own pursuits and ideas, and not just MC background characters. It might change (as of book2) when he leaves behind his family, and the characters come and go. However, in the initial stages of his 'school/academy' arc, the character building has already begun. It's obvious the author puts in an extreme amount of work on this point.
As of BKII, C27 (July10,2017)
Update; Book IV Chapter14
tl;dr still excited to see this in my bookmarks!
The previous review is still fairly accurate.
-- Updated the Grammar score to 4.5, the occasional missing quotation still remains, and is still confusing.
-- As for the character score it remains at 5, as the characters during the military school arc were well built, and fleshed out for the duration of the Book.
I do remember commenting something at the end of that Arc/book3; That the insight chapter into all the characters(of the squad) at the end of the Arc, right before we would be missing/losing them for quite a while. Potentially not seeing any of them again, was rather out of place in the timing of it. It does not detract from the overall story though.
The revisiting of the Characters in the beginning of Book4 back at his home, is spot on, and the Author hasn't deviated from their original characters at all.
--For Story&Style: The same great storytelling via characters, and piece-mealed lore is good. We really do get to see the character grow in knowledge of the world, and himself by actual interactions he has with the world, and its inhabitants. The story revealed during his journey so far is rich in lore, deep family legacies, and held up by the fantastic characterizations people have.
Back at home for the first part of book4, which is nice to revisit a few familiar faces, and expand on his own families/legacies lore and find improvements there. Which I find highly enjoyable, too frequently in Wuxia/Xianxia fictions does the MC find fortuitous (plot-armor) to upgrade his legacy/bloodline etc, for no reason other than being the MC. To have him return home, and find the answers(and more questions) exactly where it truly should be feels 'right'. I applaud the Author heavily on this right here.
Overall; Still a great story, Book3 had great action sequences, and some good insight into the warfare and battle styles we are likely to see in the world abroad.
So, this story makes me think of "Invisible Dragon" (it is one of forbidden korean texts), but with cultivation...
Like how the author remind us again and again how his 8th year old brat main character is so much awesome.
Like how he succeed everything he does and its so much awesome.
Like how the tiniest of things tilts the main character or like his grandfather, like some elder saying his gramps got no talent whatsoever or w/e...
I like just kept reading thinking about all these positive reviews and was like...well where's the good part man...where is it...it's probably in a few chapters...and well sigh...you know the rest, I feel like I got trolled again... I just didn't bother to continue after the end of BK I.
At least "Invisible Dragon" was so bad that it was actually funny to some extent...
In short, from the many positive comments, some peaple obviously liked this novel and I encourage the author to continue for his fan base, however it's obviously not something everyone will like I guess.
The writing is ok but the author realy needs to get over how awesome the mc is. There's constant mention of this all over the novel where people keep prasing the mc like he's the best thing that's ever happened to the kingdom. But the funny thing is he's not awesome at all, most of his deciscions are just stupid and reckless and he treats those lower than him like garbage (family guards, his grandfather). Basicaly he's a spoiled brat whose every stupid reckless decision gets rewarded instead of punished. And the crazy powerups that just falls onto his lap without him doing anything to earn them makes the power system hiariously broken. So yeah this one's a pass for me.
Let's get this straight, the writing talent displayed is on par with many professional works. It also has a main character who behaves rather uniquely instead of simply copying another character. Grammar, word choice, and style are abundant.
However, this novel commits the same sins as the Chinese web novels it takes structure from. The main character who acts like he's in trouble when he's not. Holding back and hiding strength while pretending to be in peril to make the audience feel a sense of tension. Yet if you don't get caught up in the author's pace and think about it you'll see the power reveals coming and the battles become dull. Having to skip through 75% before anything of importance happens, because everyone is holding back and acting out a farce to play up drama that doesn't exist.
Another flaw inherited is the genius cultivator who happens to have a heaven-defying talent yet constantly runs into opponents slightly below him, then matched with him then magically a stronger opponent.
The tournament arc in book two makes all these flaws the focus of the story and the magical pull of a character who can beat the MC to teach him a lesson is just unbearable and feels so forced I've dropped the story. The author has amazing talent in composing words but like so many other stories the plot defies logic to force the goal the author wishes to achieve. I'm sure it's hard to always have a story flow naturally but I'm unable to enjoy stories where the author is willing to throw away all previous world building for a plot point.
ok first review im doing but heres what i think about this story without spoiling too much honestly i like it the author tells the reader(us) a lot we know the back story of the family, mc for me is likable he is intuitive but at the same time doesn't act like a know it all from reading books in a library all day by himself.
close family is fleshed out we know why his uncles are so close to the grandpa and by grandpa lives away from the main family compound at the same time the author is telling us this theres an air of mystery like who is the mc's mom what legacy/background does she have that the mc inherited, what happened in the past that resulted in mc being raised by his grandparents, grandpa is nerfed from birth due to a legacy he has what is it and whats the history about it .
these are just my thoughts if i hooked you in maybe give the first few chapters a read to see if you like it and thank you for wasting the precious few minutes you have on this earth to read this review
This story is fantastic. The characters jump out at you and you feel their plights. Grammar is spot-on. Another good thing about the story is that the author takes time to fix mistakes after they've been pointed out.
This story is slow-going. If you are looking for a MC that takes a potion or is given powers by a god and becomes OP, this is not the story for you. If you are looking for an intelligent story with characters that make real decisions with real consequences, this is for you.
I highly recommend this story and will be following it closely.
Simply put... my all time favorite original novel. I love everything about it especially the mc. I like how he is doing his best to get stronger to take care of his family and doing it for himself and not for the cold hearted clan. One of the best things about this never is that there is no freakin harem it. I'm sick of harems.I also like the no romance and only focusing on getting stronger. Thanks for writing this book and hope to God u never drop it.
As of now i have ended book 1.
A very slow start and a bit cliche but i thank the writter that there has been no Harem or ridiculous love interest so far.
Story is entertaining, picks up after a while. i found it funny and insteresting enough say the first book is good to go.
thankfully i have not been bombarded with young masters who dont know how tall is mount tai or the difference between heaven and earth, even though it is easternly you can see that it has a western look so all is good with the world. The characters have their own "personalities" so its fun how the grampa is cunning and politically correct, the grandma is more direct but witha sort of honor for the kill (wich i love) the valet i think was a new addition that i can see saw development while the story progressed, and sadly other characters i find have not been important enough yet. the master is then only named as reference and richard i believe was his name suffers the same treatment. all in all a goo story. i wont give it 5 start 'cause i think you are lacking something sadly i know not what that could be, also, i think that you took the cliche for family status and made a good choice.
MC turn from a sort of wise and smart mc into a hotblooded prick, annoying but sort of in line with the plot.
After the first tournament MC participaes in. story crawls to a painfull stop, i wont drop it yet cause i kind of like it. but its annoyingly obvius that the story goes nowhere for about 20 chapters. kind of sad for it to have no advancement. sure mc trains but everything is some sort of filler for when he goes to school. i had some sort of hype, now this ended as s story to read while i am bored.
A very good story. Don't take the less than perfect score as a defect. The grammar can be fixed and just because the style isn't perfectly to my tastes does not make this story bad. This story is very good. I devoured it and was very disappointed when I caught up to the latest chapter. Great world building, amazing characters and great explanations. The philosophical aspects are truly interesting and I am sure you will continue to improve both the story and as a writer. This novel is worth trying.