The Demon King's Seventeenth Wife is Scary

by Lunnear

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Comedy Drama Fantasy Romance Female Lead Harem Martial Arts Multiple Lead Characters Supernatural Wuxia
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Tao Jinghua [Crystal Flower], the deadliest and scariest Assassin to ever walk the earth, unknowingly, give up her life to save a city that is being purged. What she never know was how she died.... or so she thought. She herself didn't die, however, in her last minutes of helping a Taoist believer to safety, she accidentally swallowed a pearl and black out. When she wakes up, she found herself in the body of another existence with the same name and gender but different in look girl who is the 29 daughter of a Pottery family. Okay, fine. I don't need to live in a rich family to be happy. Okay, fine. I don't need people to say that I am not pretty. Huh? Wait, what? Is my fiancee dead? What? Could I cultivate to be immortal shall I wished it? What? You want me to marry the Fifth Princess?! Are you sure it's a princess and not a prince? What? The Demon King want me as his wife? Wait a second, first of all, who the hell are you, people?!!! Genres: Xianxia/Xuanhuan, Romance, Action, Drama, Martial Arts, Supernatural/Fantasy, Comedy

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Lord Joyde
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Interesting enough, to say the least.

Style - Is perfectly normal, nothing really new or old. Just normal writing, though I suppose that can also be a good thing! 3/5

Story - its definitely interesting and easy to get into even if you aren't Chinese, although some of the character names are hard to read and tend to be confusing. I can't say that the story is quick/slow paced because well there isn't enough chapters yet but we seem to be getting onto the good part. What I find rather excessive is the amount of new siblings our MC seems to have. Other than that, this is pretty good!

Grammar - Not the best in the Universe. Sentences are mostly correct but the Author does not seem to fully comprehend tenses. Other than that, there isn't any real spots where you grind to a halt or have to re-read something in order to fully understand what was written.

Character - Our MC is the rather typical "I'm totally not OP but really, I am OP" type, but unlike most novels this one's female which alone is an interesting point to the story! There is a lot of martial art styles/skills involved in making up her figure which can be quite easily summed up as a total Femme Fatale. Don't get me wrong, I approve of this! <3

As for the other characters... they kinda feel one-dimensional, other than her youngest brother who seems fairly fleshed out in contrast. The others can be summed up as - "Ain't no girl tellin' me what to do", "Overprotective brother complex" and "Just guy".

 

Overall - I think this story has loads of potential and I will be sure to keep a close eye onto its progress. Good  luck to you, Lunnear! And happy typing!

 

Jesst
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wallvillea
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i just found this story.....

i like it!!

 

it is dropped ???

 

I hope it's not....please ...yell

Yewen
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Good idea, but poor execution though.

Honestly, you have a good idea and I would like you to continue, but the grammar is poor. You spell your sentences correctly, but you often use the wrong tense and that makes reading confusing. Keep up the work though.

chonchonm
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I Love it.

Please don't drop this.

Just saying so many is dropped in royalroad.

(っ- ‸ – ς)

kitrakai
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which is the name of the NL in Chinese Demon King Seventeenth wife ?????

Luneder
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Great Story But Grammer Needs A Little Work

Really need to proof read this stuff. There is a lot of words with incorrect past or present tense along with missing plural use such as you keep using singular "Immortal" instead of plural "Immortals" when referring to the group type.

 

You have the right words just not the grammatically correct versions of the words. It kind of reminds me of google translate when it takes a different language and turns it into English. Quite a few translators use it to quickly change the words to English then rework the sentence structure to proper English grammar structure but almost always forget to change the word plurals and tenses. If you are using some kind of program to check grammar and spelling make sure it has the correct setting some of them have more than one grammar setting.

Shuxin
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 There's a little bit of grammar erroe, but past that, it's a great story!

I can't wait for the next update!