The Rude Time Stopper

by Sudar

Year 2048 A story about a boy with the ability to control time not in the way of traveling through time but using time itself for his advantage has mature content and swearing included a lot.

I edited the previous chapters on this site ! https://kakemonoko.wordpress.com/
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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 1 Closer ago
Chapter 2 A Strange Escape ?! ago
Chapter 3 Stop And Start ago
Chapter 4 Ignorance Can Be Bliss And Fleshy Goes A Miss ago
Chapter 5 Icy Cuffs And Fire Balls ago
Chapter 6 Final Run ! ago
Chapter 7 Things About Magic And Time Logic ago
Chapter 7.5 Two Parts Of A Story ago
Chapter 8 Misunderstanding ago
Chapter 9 Introduction ago
Chapter 10 Experiment ago
Chapter 10.4 The Clavicula ! ago
Chapter 11 Too Many Questions ! ago
Chapter 12 One Step Closer Ten Steps Behind ago
Chapter 13 To The Home Run ! ago
Chapter 14 The Green Eyed Shadow ago
Chapter 15 Broken Broom ago
Chapter 16 Broom Rewind ago
Chapter 17 A Life Decision For Someone Loved ago
Chapter 18 The Gate ago
Chapter 19 A Promise ago
Chapter 20 An Unpleasant Encounter ago
Chapter 21 Inhuman ago
Chapter 22 The Vampires ago
Chapters Editing ago
Chapter 23 Horns ? ago
Chapter 24 Sera The Dragoness ago
Chapter 25 The Mage ago
Chapter 26 Arrogance ago
Chapter 27 Stella's Lesson ago
Chapter 27.5 Stella's Determination ago
Chapter 28 Final Step ago
Chapter 29 The Agreement ago
Chapter 30 Mr.Headache ago
Chapter 31 The Requirements ago
Chapter 32 Hellhound ago
Chapter 33 Nervousness To The New Level ago
Chapter 34 Aphrodisiac ago
Chapter 35 Dawn Of The Pure Blood ago
Chapter 36 Surprise Motherfuka ! ago
Chapter 37 Heat ago
Chapter 38 A Threat ago
Searching for a free editor ago
Chapter 39 Day Over ago
Chapter 40 New Day ago
Chapter 41 A Duel For A Secret ago
Chapter 41.5 Through Darkness Into The Light Part 1 ago
Chapter 42 The Not So Lonely Dragon ago
Chapter 43 The Dwarven Way To Hold A Secret ago
Chapter 44 Revengeful Dragoness ago
Chapter 45 Ready ! ago
Chapter 46 Fight ! ago
Chapter 47 Winner ! Or Loser ? ago
Chapter 47.5 Through Darkness Into Light Part 2 ago
Chapter 48 Chronos The God Of Time ago
Chapter 49 Gratitude From The Angel Of Death ago
Chapter 50 The Burning Bird ago
Chapter 51 Protect And Serve ago
Chapter 51.5 Through Darkness Into Light Part 3 ago
Chapter 52 Sense Demon's ago
Chapter 53 A Clue ago
Chapter 54 Unstoppable ago
Chapter 55 The "Witch Doctor" ago
Chapter 56 The Central ago
Chapter 57 The Broken Brotherhood ago
Chapter 57.5 Through Darkness Into Light Part 4 ago
Chapter 58 Painful Smile ago
Chapter 59 The Power Of The Badge ago
Question for the readers ago
Chapter 60 I Will Make It Happen So Please ago
Chapter 61 Hearth Fire Hestia ago
Chapter 62 Early Enough ago
Chapter 63 Its Harder To Understand Yourself Then Others ago
Chapter 64 Ice And Nova ago
Chapter 65 I Kill People I Guess ? ago
Chapter 65.5 Through Darkness Into Light Part 5 Final ago
Chapter 66 Spooky ! ago
Chapter 67 The Little Necromancer ago
Chapter 68 Smile Of Joy ago
Chapter 69 Embrace Yourself ago
Chapter 70 Archangel ago
Chapter 71 The Fallen ago
Chapter 72 I Don't Take "No" As An Answer ago
Chapter 73 Thats All I Wanted To Know ago
Chapter 74 Me Too ago
Chapter 75 Tear In Thyself ago
Chapter 76 It Isn't Almost It Is ago
Chapter 77 People Like You ago
Chapter 78 Still Illegal ago
Chapter 79 Rusty Dagger ago
Chapter 80 I Don't Care ago
Chapter 81 Partial End Of The Request ago
Chapter 82 The Same End ago
Chapter 83 Heated Debate ago
Chapter 84 Guest In Black ago
Chapter 85 Indirect Meanings ago
Chapter 86 Long Story Short ago
Chapter 86.5 Carry Not Harness ago
Chapter 87 Complicated ago
Chapter 88 The Feeling Inside Your Box ago
Chapter 89 Unexpected ago
Chapter 90 Raise Your Hands ago
Chapter 91 Not Again ago
Chapter 92 How About Coffee ? ago
Chapter 93 Reunion ago
Chapter 94 The Answers We Seek ago
Chapter 95 A Stroke ago
Chapter 96 Shame ago
Chapter 97 Toilet Problems ago
Chapter 98 Yes,My Lord ago
Chapter 99 Shadow ago
Chapter 100 Array Master ago
Chapter 101 Hiding ago
Chapter 102 On The Tail ago
Chapter 103 Responsibility ago
Chapter 104 Dustin ago
Chapter 105 Birthday ago
Chapter 106 First Impression ago
Chapter 107 Storming ago
Chapter 108 Explosive ago
Chapter 109 Sprinkle Baby ! ago
Chapter 110 Offers And Goodbyes ago
Chapter 111 Finish Dance ago
Chapter 112 Observer ago
Chapter 113 Worgen Price ago
Chapter 113.5 Intuition ago
Chapter 114 The One Who Owes ago
Chapter 115 Play Low ago
Chapter 116 A Friend In Need Is A Friend Indeed ago
Chapter 117 Good Luck ago
Chapter 118 You Want Me Or Not ? ago
Chapter 119 Patronage ago
Chapter 120 Imperial Festive ago
Chapter 121 Drugs ? No Problem ! ago
Chapter 122 The Gruesome Book ago
Chapter 123 Trouble ago
Chapter 124 She Is My Wife ago
Chapter 125 Gray Cloud ago
Chapter 126 Walrick The Peacemaker ago
Chapter 127 The Hateful Boy And The Crazy Woman ago
Chapter 128 Charge ! ago
Chapter 129 I Don't Care,Go Home ago
Chapter 130 Deep Wounds ago
Chapter 131 Storm Runner ago
Chapter 132 How Can You Kill ? ago
Chapter 133 Sociopath Boy Makes Friends With Crazy Woman ago
Chapter 134 The Staged Crash ago
Chapter 135 Conviction ago
Chapter 136 The Stabbing ago
Chapter 137 I Won't Cry I Swear ! ago
Chapter 138 Split Image ago
Chapter 139 Into The Capital And The Aquamarine Mage ago
Chapter 140 Royal Chase ago
Chapter 141 Bloody Scream ago
Chapter 142 Do What Has To Be Done ago
Chapter 143 The First Empress And The Forgiven Knights ago
Chapter 144 The Second Empress And The Thugs ago
Chapter 145 Surprise From The Skies ago
Chapter 146 You're Welcome ago
Chapter 147 Silent Run ago
Chapter 148 I Only Cry For You ago
Chapter 149 Visit In A Night Gown ago
Chapter 150 Someone Worth Living For ago
Chapter 151 This Is What I Want To Do ago
Chapter 152 Good Morning ago
Chapter 153 Amber Eyes,Golden Dragon ago

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Ousshaki184
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Great story, great idea, all great except grammar, and comma, please please please use comma, the whole sentence change meaning just because you placed comma in the wrong place, but when there's a chapter with no single comma, then that's a disaster

Iramohs
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Good Story Shitty Grammar

I've seen too many stories on RRL that would be great with proper editing. Sadly this is another one.

FluffyFlower
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i d give it a 4 stars if it had some proper punctuation. . . it gets really confusing

robi
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100 words in one sentence without punctuation

Get a proofreader or editor or whatever. Story as is, is unreadable. I would rate this higher, but annoyance i get when i have 100 words in one sentence without punctuation and somewhat bad grammar, and then having to spend extra time to decipher the meaning of the paragraph is too damn high (and i usually read GT). Use shorter sentences and in longer ones use comma. Also change color of the font in first 2 chapters...

 

I haven't read far into the story (only 14 chapters), but the story seems like it has potential.

Characters aren't developed this far into the story, so i won't be judging them.

 

I read to enjoy, and reading this isn't enjoyable. If author gets PR who will fix his mistakes i would be willing to change the rating, but for now i am dropping it.

kaharianqi
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Its like reading a Machine Translated Light Novel

The grammar is so poor... Wew!                                                                                                                    

Hitogami
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I like it keep going! and don't worry about the Suspicious guy "Kamikaze" hes probably just a terrorist anyways
DLAngel
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Great story. Needs work

 Great story, but grammar needs sooo much work. You need to heavily edit your chapters. You need to work on your punctuation, capital letters and you sentence structure needs some work as well (not all of them ofcourse). Most of the longer paragraphs and dialogues have little to know punctuation, not even commas. Names are commonly left without capital letters and some sentences needs to have the way they're written re worked. There some some misspelt words as well (can't remember them all that well). Basically, I love everything in this book but the grammar.

 

 

FirstDragon
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I'm all for stream of consciousness writing but this grammar failure is ridiculous

I just finished reading the first chapter and while I see potential for both intriguing characters and creative writing style, all this potential is buried under poor grammar with a near total absence of commas or periods .

 The sad part is that apparently this author is aware of this weakness and has made little effort to fix it. Such behavior - in my opinion - is disrespectful to his potential readers who are taking time out of their lives to (try to) share in what he produces. In a way it is also disrespectful to himself as an author - if you are a good cook and making dinner for guests, would you slack off and do a half assed job? Especially if it only would take a bit more work to do a good job?

AziroFF
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the potential is ruined by the grammar

the poor grammar ruins story's potential....shame

farfarello25
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the ff is good.
the plot is interesting and really addictive. main character is slightly OP, but rather well constructed. sometimes his interaction with the world is inconsistent.
small amount of words in each of the chapters make world quite shallow.

the author should find a proofreader.