Kairos & the Snowdrifts

Kairos & the Snowdrifts

by Alan Tang

Kairos Astroire & the Snowdrifts is now available on Amazon: eBook | Paperback! Featuring 591 pages that are lovingly edited for a more enjoyable read.

 

For chapters, 1-21 here are the edited version: https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/12125/kairos-the-snowdrifts-edited

 

NOTE: The chapters in this book is still in its first draft.

Which means, it has not been fully edited especially at the beginning.

Release Schedule: One to two days.

This is a cultivation novel.


Saint Empire, a land of permanent spring that is as dangerous as it is beautiful.

Born in a time of turmoil, Kairos was a young village boy that could be found anywhere. He had unremarkable talents but was enrolled in Saint Cadets Academy where the weak can only be trampled upon. However, everything changed when he discovered an unbelievable inheritance in an old musty manuscript.

Doors that were meant to be closed were blown apart, never to be shut again, and he gained an unmatched ability to create cultivation arts. It was something that none in the three realms and three worlds had ever witnessed before.

Aided with his newly unlocked potential, he decided to form the Snowdrifts and create a little place of peace for those he held dear.

However, during their academy’s mock battle training, their flimsy haven was torn apart by the greed of men, and an ancient foe they thought long dead rise once again.

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Aspirer
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Read to 175 at time of review.

 Haven't read Xianxia in a while, but I am enjoying this so far. It has the typical OP MC with OP friends, but I often like that aspect of these kinds of stories. It's what I tend to expect when I read them so I find it easy to enjoy the unlikely story that follows.

I don't consider this a detraction of the genre, which is why I didn't deduct any stars in my rating of the story. I actually consider it the standard, so perhaps if the MC wasn't OP and the center of some unlikely attention, I would have possibly rated the story worse. It's a thumbs up from me so far.

Many grammar issues. And tense issues. The words 'has' and 'had' are sorely lacking, as the word 'have' is used almost every time and is used incorrectly about 90% of the time. I was able to ignore the bad grammar and word usage when it appeared due to the story itself being pretty good. 

This story is fun to read. Anything beyond what I have written so far I will keep to myself.  

Looking forward to future releases,

 

~Aspirer.

P.S. I got used to it, but I HATE the fact that you used those character names of his friends. Although I saw the funny side to it, I almost stopped reading the story due to that alone. Glad I didn't, but for me, those names are a HUGE negative to your otherwise good story. So was calling the desert 'Sahara'. ... I mean, seriously? Some originality goes a long way.

 

th30dor
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Terrible prose, terrible English, terrible names

Atrocious story. The names are horrible. The MC casually invents cultivation methods like they are candy. The English is poor, and the prose is worse than google translated manuals.

 

I keep trying to continue reading, but I can't. It's that bad. 

Iramohs
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The entire story revolves around a group of 12 year olds who discover an OP book and start cultivating a mysterious power. Sounds ok up to there right? But the story is derailed by a complete lack on planning on the part of the author. No thought seems to have been put into the overall plot. The entire cultivation/fighting system is bullshit. Having 4 or 5 different powers all present in the same world sounds cool but makes the entire story a mess. The lack of originality is an omni-present issue. Character names are straight copied from other works(Alucard, really?) or based on novel concepts(Calculus). As soon as the MC and friends got OP animal companions for no reason than "just because" I stopped reading. The story has become a charicature of everything wrong about current web novels. If that's what the author intended then he's doing a damn fine job. Otherwise, I'd put this story in the trash bin along with 90% of other RoyalRoad "novels."

TroJian
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I don't really dislike this history, in truth, i loved it. But after 14 chapters i simply can't overcome this and continue reading. Maybe on a later date i will come back and finish, but not now. Spoiler*:

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It just bugs me, how can a group of kids, 12 years old, with 6month worth experience  on the school (military academy? ) be so experienced on their unique roles, be it fighting, scouting, planting traps and baiting enemies, when 10days earlier they were just nobodies who could not even put a fight against anyone? Nobody on their 300 12 years old group knew their infamy of being lower then J rank, and puff. A five man group(five? dont remember very well, the characters have the same depth as my study table[at least until chap 14!]) suddently appears and they are all specialists on their on roles! And to not forget, with 6 months worth training with themselves and losing some battles against other teams. 

The other thing that bugs me: ' Alan Walker...(some other famous names)... Calculus, Alucard...'  It not brings humour to the history, just brings one thought to my mind: 'Is the author trolling us and planning to kill them all on a later date?' i thought the same reading 'Warlock of the Magus World' and all the troll names disappeared from the history. but seriously, on this one they are all alive and overcoming their age mentality of 12. It leaves a bad taste reading... A really bad taste.

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Just to finish, by what i saw of the other reviews, if you dont mind those 2... no, just the first disturbing topic on the spoiler, this might be a really great history( i just stoped at chapter 14 so i can't really say, the style just seemed to be so good but...).

So... My main language is not english, forgive my any erros spotted.

Kandoral
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Is it just me or has the story gone down the sink?

the beginning of the story had alot of potential. It was interesting, mysterious, fun to read. But after the "beings" who made "breakthroughs" harder were introduced this story has gone down pretty fast. Storywise it is boring, characters got boring, development is non existent and one crap plot after the other pops up

TensaiSaru
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My review summed up in one word: Meh

It was quite enjoyable in the start, but then it just died on me at when the MC and his friends got super op animal companions.

lovelesr
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Had good potential but...

I first stared with the revised edition then came over to the first drafts because I liked how the story looked. But after reading through most of the second volume I have given up.

The author clearly has taken the style of Chinese web-novels of having long drawn out arc and that would be okay but the author doesn't have the chapter count nor the release schedule to match it.

Both the mock exam arc and the find Jones arc not only feel too long but are badly paced. Even the black forest arc could've been cut down a bit.

The worse part for me though is the level jumping. Don't get me wrong having an MC that can fight above his level is okay as long as it isn't to a ridiculous level. Kairos fighting and beating a SSS is not okay. 

Then there is the character development. There is none. With over 200 chapters but not a single piece of true character development is bad.

Dragonsword
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This is a great cultivation series that has appropriate relationships for the characters based upon what age they are. Each character has a unique fighting style. Many of the combat scenes are shown both with a serious air and a comedic air to them at the same time. It also shows an economic and political struggles in this tale as well. There is even some business building done. This series covers many issues and does each of them in an enjoyable way. 

BloodAbysS
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A good read, keep it up !

 although not at the level of professional writing,  this novel is enjoyable. The progression of the writing skill are felt, so beware of the older chapters.

Thanks to the author

Shebby
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Kairos & the Snowdrifts

The details are just about right, leaving you a good understanding. THe characters are pretty good as well. The idea with "Dao" is quite original. Overall, if you had a bit more polishing from famous chinese novel writers and you would be set. my opinion though, no offense.