Evolution of a Ball of Light

by Vambient

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Mystery LitRPG Male Lead Supernatural
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

Glowing... It's way too bright! Join Steve and his helper as they find their evolution path in a danger-filled world! Filled with mystical beings, sticky situations, and craziness of all kinds! This is the New World. Let's begin our adventure!

Book 1: Complete - EDITING FOR PUBLICATION

Book 2: In progress

WARNING: Rated 18+ for Gore, Swearing, and Violence. P.S If you liked the read, feel free to leave a rating, comment, favorite, or follow!


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Ramen
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Interesting start with extremely slow pace and short chapter, but update daily.

Currently chapter 34, but MC has yet to select his race.

The author takes introduction way too far.

Better binge reading after couple of weeks, or so.

Wait until there are more than 100 chapters, maybe MC no more Raceless by then, maybe not.

Hey, based on the title… maybe MC will never be more than ball of light.

I hope not.

 

RAMEN

ThAtPaRt
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really gives me a way to pass the time, hopefully you continue this for the whole summer, cause I have nothing to do LOL. keep up the good work vambient.

wirzgeek
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This little light of mine, ...

Well, as for the people whining about the story being slow, it's really not. In an evolution story, the plot shouldn't solely be evolving, but have some other things going on. Also, some good concepts that are new. It's a fun read.

Danetello
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Please for the love of ...

Please don't do a harem.Thank you.                                                                                                                                                                                          

xion03
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To be honest, the rating I gave this novel  is a little inflated, because of the quality of other novels I've recently  read on royal road. In comparison to them, this one is a masterpiece!

Review is up to the current  chapter, 34. 

The novel is  written in first person and the style is very fluid. I pretty much marathoned it and never felt my immersion break apart. Everything felt fitting 

The grammer is overall really good. There are some nitpick that occasionally pop up ( several alots for example)  but they're not detracting at all. And they're really rare - or at least I didn't notice them frequently. 

The characters are pretty nice. The protagonist and his sidekick are pretty interesting and I'm honestly looking forward to his first evolution. The introduced children are pretty interesting as well, though they could be written with a little more depth. Hopefully they'll join the protagonist on his journey later, as they have a lot of potential. 

SkeithKing
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I love this story, the only think I can even complain about it is the few grammar mistakes but they are to minor to even matter at all.

 

The style of writing with the flow of the story works rather well with this character, I really love how the Characters interact with each other, I mean no one want to piss off a god(like) being (to them) and get smited  and this people act just like that.

 

Keep up the good work.

Observer
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Why hate harem? ( there isn't even a tinge of Romance yet )

Well, whatever floats your boat.

 

Harem or not, I quite like the idea behind the story. Will the MC even evolve?

 

Evolution is quite a game changer, the premise of the story will flow into whatever form he takes. The pacing is a little bit slow IMO but still smooth.

 

As of ch. 38, there’s still no Romance. So why are people so hung up about getting a harem?

nahojjjen
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A good progression story

Review as of chapter 29:

Reminds me somewhat of re:monster (most evolution stories do), but the pacing is very different. The grammar is good, the story is so far still quite interesting.

The tale seems to be  still somewhat in the beginning, so there is not much deep character-backstory, but some characters are getting fleshed out. I hope to see more interesting characters getting introduced in the future.

Small spoiler zone:

The story might take a drastic turn depending on what will evolution mc picks, but so far he seems quite powerful, although it's pretty entertaining so far. The world is currently only shallowly described, with major races and countries laid out, but I like that, since major political factions has not been relevant to the story so far, and it's still open for some change.

 

So far there is no harem, and hopefully it will stay that way.

CrossXero
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Enjoying it so far but just a little slow

Its a good read where story slowly progresses as the MC gets fleshed out and hopefully OP.

BookWorm84
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Intriguing and well executed

Please finish this book. 

 

Its be a very enjoyable read so far.

 

Good dialogue, plot, poise, and pace of discovery.

 

Well done.