Ula (read description.)

by kor.exe

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Fantasy Romance Harem Martial Arts School Life Supernatural
Ula, a planet where the continent of Ein resides. This giant continent is the home of various races such as the Humans, Dragons, Demons and Elves, a world where the strongest are the most respected under the heavens.
Zepp Alkery becomes a student of a school which refers to itself as the greatest school in existence, why is this? It may have to do with the fact that the school is run by the one of the strongest mages on the continent, a man who goes by the name 'The Master'.

*Contains hints of Wuxia*

-- THIS FICTION HAS BEEN DROPPED (READ THE LAST POST FOR MORE INFO) --
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Glayus
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is a bit OP and lacking of action.

the relationships between characters seem false because it's been a whole year without meeting yet it seems that they have been together for a lifetime.

The story is interesting but it can be developed more
you could have done so that the protagonist returned to school regularly from training and develop more the relationships with classmates
getting kicked out of school after two days is stupid.

I hope that developments more history which is interesting because it is unpredictable

 

Docnox
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Its good but could be better

Im going to be a lil harsh here because this story seems to have alot of potential.  Your overall plot so far is fine i like it, but the bringing it to life is rather poor. Imma try and make this simple. Its like a 70s tv show training montage with bad actors. Yes alot happened but it was rushed and barely detailed. Yes there are fully backstoried characters with developing relationships but they dont feel genuine.  Thier feeling come acrossed as fanatical or fake or seemingly forced. It feels like alot is missing from the story and i just cant connect with the characters at all.  

LordSaucy
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 Alright, I don't  have much  to say about your style either negative or positive. I don't mind the way you write but you seem to get a bit 'preachy' sometimes over less interesting details while glossing over the more flashy stuff.  The story so far (I am up to chapter ten to decide my opinion of your story) starts off slow, chapter one and two, speeds up to a nice pace, chapter three yo seven, the just kinda skips like you were trying to get him out of school. You could have added a bit more to it that would have added a bit to the sort of dry characters so far. I haven't really seen any spelling or grammar errors that have caught my eye, keep up the good work. Your characters though...... so far your characters are bland and dull with few quirks or flaws that make them interesting. I believe you sort of wasted the school arc to flesh out your characters personalities. uhhh that is all I can think of right now. I hope it helps a tiny bit.

Gibster
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Exciting beginning.  Great promise

I always like beginning of stories where the MC begins to get powerful.  This sort of reminded me of Stellar Transformations.  Very well done.  Keep it up.  Gave 4 1/2 because of the getting strong to protect my loved ones trope.  It didn't really feel genuine.  

 

Great start.  Looking forward to more.

Dragonium
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it's good to see a good fanfiction with orginal story'm looking forward to see more love it to his race, affinity, and mana is? possibilities
hatefulsavage
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could of been pretty good

Had its up’s and downs and overall it was pretty good and the author laid good foundation for future stuff. Sadly enough they decided to quit writing this which is kind of a blue ball but whatever. Was surprised to see this in the active top 50 because it is not active and hasn’t been for a long time since the author quit. I know they are making something else but I have little faith in it seeing as how this was stopped atwhat seemed like an exciting part of the story. The author lost all credibility in my eyes and I would say for people thinking about reading it to remember its going to stop in a cliff hanger with many things unanswered and will most likely never be continued since the author dropped it so I’d suggest looking somewhere else for a novel personally

chazzi
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Story background not too bad, a little basic.

 

Grammar could use some work but is readable.

 

Mc seems to progress at a reasonable rate.

 

Personally im quite enjoying the story so far, Keep up the good work!

Lolouch
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Story is good, might need improvement in some areas, and needs more chapterrrrrrssss!!!!!

   The story is good, but I want moreeeeee chapterrrrrrssss!!!!!!!

Franco
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Really enjoy the story 

I am looking forward to the next chapter!

fidel5
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Good story, but you can improve the characters.