The Dungeon Hive

by Ghostman

Original COMPLETED Action Adventure Comedy Fantasy

Fantasy Begins: Book 1 of the Dungeon Hive Trilogy, Dungeon Flames: #2 of the Dungeon Hive Trilogy, and Spread of the Dungeons: III of the Dungeon Hive Trilogy are now available on You can find it at the following links; Book_1, Book_2, Book_3

One thing I noticed about most dungeon stories is that most races mistakenly believe that dungeons have a hive-mind and I go, “That make sense.” Considering the various powers and how big dungeons can get, wouldn’t it make more sense for them to have a hive-mind? So this is it; my take of the world’s first dungeon and the hive that controls it. Watch as it stumbles, fall, survive, strive and…procreate? Watch as it changed the world of Ioplon…for better and for worse.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue- The Mistake ago
Part 1- The Hive ago
Part 2- The Bear ago
Part 3- The Confusion ago
Part 4- The Wolves ago
Part 5- The Skills ago
Part 6- The Tunnels ago
Part 7- The "You-Who-Are-Not-Bear" ago
Part 8- The Fight ago
Part 9- The Idiots ago
Part 10- The Smoke ago
Part 11- The Feeding ago
Part 12- The Newcomer ago
Part 13- The Hybrids ago
Part 14- The Blasphemy ago
Part 15- The Defeat ago
Part 16- The “Rescue” ago
Part 17- The Creator ago
End of Book 1- Q & A (Please feel free to leave any questions or comments you want) ago
Part 18- The Wolfgirl ago
Part 19- The Bat ago
Part 20- The Bottles ago
Part 21- The Argument ago
Part 22- The Yucky ago
Part 23- The Speaker ago
Part 24- The Fundamentals ago
Part 25- The Monsters ago
Part 26- The Effects ago
Part 27- The Feast ago
Part 28- The Boredom ago
Part 29- The Clan ago
Part 30- The Classes ago
Part 31- The Rats ago
Part 32- The Name ago
Part 33- The Return ago
Part 34- The BOOM! ago
Part 35- The Attack ago
Part 36- The Wings ago
Update- Past & Near Future ago
Part 37- The Walk ago
Part 38- The Forest ago
Part 39- The Heraldry ago
Part 40- The Dogs ago
Part 41- The Solution ago
Part 42- The Shaking ago
Part 43- The Grand ago
Part 44- The Wipe ago
Part 45- The Wait ago
Part 46- The Traps ago
Part 47- The Geniuses ago
Part 48- The Betrayal ago
Part 49- The Reveal ago
Part 50- The Dragon ago
Finale- The Porkasus ago
Epilogue- The Farewell ago
The Dungeon Hive- Volume 2 ago
Fantasy Begins- Book Cover ago
New Version of 'Fantasy Begins' Available ago
Going Wide ago
'Fantasy Begins'- 50% off on Smashwords! ago
Spread of the Dungeons: III of the Dungeon Hive Trilogy ago

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Everything the Author promises.

Unlike most Novels about Dungeons this Story is not about a Individual but instead about a newly created hivemind of spirits wich love to argue and haphazardly create creatures.

Aside from the rather unique spin on the concept the story convinves with good pacing, entertaining Dialogue between the spirits and a fair bit of humor.

The Writing is also thoroughly enjoayble. While starting off (intentionally) primitive the Hive soon begins to use more complex sentences and gains some understanding of more complex concepts.

The only critique I have would be the lack of notable characters.The sidecharacters have their fair share of personality but there is little opportunity to explore it.

The hive also has a ton of quirky spirits but we never get to know them beyond that.

However too much of that might just overburden the story and I enjoy it as a lighthearted story.

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A hidden gem with very good ideas!

I looked at this because i was interested in the title and wondered if you could pull it off. I was surprised to read that you pulled off the hive mind aspect quite well. Overall I enjoyed the story a lot and I am looking forward to more chapters!


Style:  I don't really know what I'm talking about in this area but I can at least say that the only awkward sentences that I've noticed are primarily due to grammar issues.


Story: I love the direction you are taking this and can't wait to see what's next.


Grammar: While there is the occasional mistake there is nothing too glaring and while it could be improved I see no problem with the current quality.


Character: This (In my opinion) is the biggest problem with the story. There are no characters besides the hive mind! This could be remedied by using some alternate POV's in the future but my personal recommendation is to flesh out the hive mind more. What I mean by this is to make certain aspects of the hive mind more prominent.

By introducing certain spirits and giving them names (which I have already seen you do with You-Who-Are-Not-A-Bear) the problem with that example is I don't get a feeling that you will reintroduce that character and you haven't done it more. You could then have them play a more prominent part in the hive mind's activities in the story.

Another possibility is to give certain types of spirits a different personality for example death spirits could be obsessed with killing while life spirits abhor the concept.

Of course if you choose to go down this route then you will have to start adding dialogue tags (a dialogue tag identifies the speaker).

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Fantastic dungeon story

Loving this story so far, I really like the world you seem to be setting up, and that your dungeon seems to be in the early fantasy era.

Yuhao Lightning
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I Can't Stay Awake Reading This, I Just Woke Up

 Sorry, but the writing style doesn't give the story enough traction to keep readers keep reading this. TBH the story, grammar and characters is normal as can be when it comes to fantasy swords and magic. I can't give you a good advice because I'm not in the mood to write an extensive review. All I can say is that the writing style is very very boring. I hope you won't take offense.

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This Story Deserves More Support and Readers

I am very bad with reviews but I'll try my best and first time writing one in RRL:wink

Style: I dunno what this means so... but I'll rate it 5 anyway.embarassed

Story: For the story, being a dungeon setting and having an archaic civilization as a world setting there would be much more room for improvements and the development of the plot so I have high expectations on that regard.

Grammar: So far I have not found any major or could remember any mistakes.

Character: They are what you'd expect from something of a council type of body governing over it's creatures with no apparent leaders within the Hive Mind so it provides more room for arguement and more time to weigh the pros and cons so it allows more flexibility on character development

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An interesting start with many possibilities 

nothing to make me dislike the story 

it's a decent story (I don't pay attention to details)


I'm at part 7

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A Sustainable dungeon story done right

one of the best paced dungeon novels I have read Things are strong but not overpowered and  are not growing in power at a reasonable rate

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I love the idea of a young fantasy world that we can observe while it's develop

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Hura, another awesome story!

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I laughed my ass off reading this

This is realy good yell