Blooming Thorn in Another World

by zedeine99

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Drama Fantasy Female Lead Gender Bender Magic Portal Fantasy / Isekai

In this world, heroes are summoned from another world because of the threat brought by the devils. Each of this heroes are granted with blessing from the Spirit Goddess and possesses extraordinary powers to fight and to repel the devils.

But among these summoned heroes, an irregular appeared. A little girl is among them. The little girl doesn't have the qualities to be one of the heroes nor have the power to be so. She only tries to settle a peaceful life inside the castle for her own convenience.

But in this world full of mystery, she will be drag outside to the world to witness the wonders and all the suffering and pain this world could offer.

In a world where she is under powered and suffers from having a frail and immature mentality, will she survive and prevail or will she break first and suffers a crushing defeat from this world's absurdness.

 

PS: This Novel contains Multiple POV and an almost rape scene (just a single chapter). Read at your own risk

 

Warning: Tagged 15+ for Gore, Violence, and Strong Language.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue Volume 1 ago
Chapter 1: A Little Girl Appears 1 ago
Chapter 2: A Little Girl Appears 2 ago
Chapter 3: A Little Girl Appears 3 ago
Chapter 4: A Little Girl Appears 4 ago
Chapter 5: Pee Incident 1 ago
Chapter 6: Pee Incident 2 ago
Chapter 7: Pee Incident 3 ago
Chapter 8: Pee Incident 4 ago
Chapter 9: Leisure Time 1 ago
Chapter 10: Leisure Time 2 ago
Chapter 11: Leisure Time 3 ago
Chapter 12: Leisure Time 4 ago
Chapter 13: Leisure Time 5 ago
Chapter 14: Ipomoea Nil and End of Daydream 1 ago
Chapter 15: Ipomoea Nil and End of Daydream 2 ago
Chapter 16: Ipomoea Nil and End of Daydream 3 ago
Chapter 17: Goddess of Destruction! ORYAAA! 1 ago
Chapter 18: Goddess of Destruction! ORYAAA! 2 ago
Chapter 19: Goddess of Destruction! ORYAAA! 3 ago
Chapter 20: Goddess of Destruction! ORYAAA! Part 4 ago
Chapter 21: Trails of that Flower (Extra) ago
Chapter 22: Susanoo and Priscilla VS. Nil 1 ago
Chapter 23: Susanoo and Priscilla VS. Nil 2 ago
Chapter 24: Susanoo and Priscilla VS. Nil 3 ago
Chapter 25: Islands of Thousand Fluffy Festivals! 1 ago
Chapter 26: Islands of Thousand Fluffy Festivals! 2 ago
Chapter 27: Islands of Thousand Fluffy Festivals! 3 ago
Chapter 28: Islands of Thousand Fluffy Festivals! 4 ago
Chapter 29: Islands of Thousand Fluffy Festivals! 5 ago
Chapter 30: Islands of Thousand Fluffy Festivals! 6 ago
Chapter 31: The Hearty Beast King (Extra) ago
Chapter 32: The White Dragon Sage and his Nostalgia 1 ago
Chapter 33: The White Dragon Sage and his Nostalgia 2 ago
Chapter 34: The White Dragon Sage and his Nostalgia 3 ago
Chapter 35: Noticing the Fragrance of that Flower 1 ago
Chapter 36: Noticing the Fragrance of that Flower 2 ago
Chapter 37: The Elven Forest is too Noisy! 1 ago
Chapter 38: The Elven Forest is too Noisy! 2 ago
Chapter 39: The Elven Forest is too Noisy! 3 ago
Chapter 40: The Elven Forest is too Noisy! 4 ago
Chapter 41: The Elven Forest is too Noisy! 5 ago
Chapter 42: The Elven Forest is too Noisy! 6 ago
Chapter 43: The Elven Capital! 1 ago
Chapter 44: The Elven Capital! 2 ago
Chapter 45: The Elven Capital! 3 ago
Chapter 46: The Elven Capital! 4 ago
Chapter 47: Liberator of the Battlefield and the Truth 1 ago
Chapter 48: Liberator of the Battlefield and the Truth 2 ago
Chapter 49: Liberator of the Battlefield and the Truth 3 ago
Chapter Extra 1: The Battle of Maids inside the Castle ago
Chapter 50: The Ruins of the Ether 1 ago
Chapter 51: The Ruins of the Ether 2 ago
Chapter 52: The Ruins of the Ether 3 ago
Chapter 53: The Ruins of the Ether 4 ago
Chapter Extra 2: The Teacher’s Romance ago
Chapter 54: Niflheim City 1 ago
Chapter 55: Niflheim City 2 ago
Chapter 56: Niflheim City 3 ago
Chapter 57: Niflheim City 4 ago
Chapter 58: Niflheim City 5 ago
Chapter 59: Niflheim City 6 ago
Chapter 60: Niflheim City 7 ago
Chapter Extra 3: The Challenge of Strength ago
Chapter 61: Team Idiot Versus Team Hellbeing 1 ago
Chapter 62: Team Idiot Versus Team Hellbeing 2 ago
Chapter 63: Team Idiot Versus Team Hellbeing 3 ago
Chapter 64: Team Idiot Versus Team Hellbeing 4 ago
Chapter 65: Hollowing of the Heart 1 ago
Chapter 66: Hollowing of the Heart 2 ago
Chapter 67: Hollowing of the Heart 3 ago
Chapter 68: Hollowing of the Heart 4 ago
Chapter 69: Hollowing of the Heart 5 ago
Chapter 70: Ipomoea Nil and Beginning of Nightmare 1 ago
Chapter 71: Ipomoea Nil and Beginning of Nightmare 2 ago
Epilogue ago
Chapter Extra 4: Bonds and Resolves 1 ago
Chapter Extra 4: Bonds and Resolves 2 ago
Volume 2 Prologue ago
Chapter 72: Starting Over 1 ago
Chapter 73: Starting Over 2 ago
Chapter 74: Starting Over 3 ago
Chapter 75: Starting Over 4 ago
Chapter 76: Sorry (1/4) ago
Chapter 77: Sorry (2/4) ago
Chapter 78: Sorry (3/4) ago
Chapter 79: Sorry (4/4) ago
Chapter 80: Earth Shattering Brawl (1/3) ago
Chapter 81: Earth Shattering Brawl (2/3) ago
Chapter 82: Earth Shattering Brawl (3/3) ago
Chapter 83: Improvements of the Little Girl (1/4) ago
Chapter 84: Improvements of the Little Girl (2/4) ago
Chapter 85: Improvements of the Little Girl (3/4) ago
Chapter 86: Improvements of the Little Girl (4/4) ago
Chapter 87: Cecille’s Woes ago
Chapter 88: Cecille’s Woes (2) ago
Chapter 89: Cecille’s Woes (3) ago
Chapter 90: Cecille’s Woes (4) ago
Chapter 91: Cecille’s Woes (End) ago
Chapter 92: Re-forging Identity (1) ago
Chapter 93: Re-forging Identity (2) ago
Chapter 94: Re-forging Identity (3) ago
Chapter 95: Re-forging Identity (4) ago
Chapter 96: Re-forging Identity (5) ago
Chapter 97: Re-forging Identity (6) ago
Chapter 98: Re-forging Identity (End) ago
Chapter 99: Punishing the Bad Little Girl (Single Chapter) ago
Chapter 100: Character Status ago
Chapter 101: Calm Dragon Tempest Art (1) ago
Chapter 102: Calm Dragon Tempest Art (2) ago
Chapter 103: Calm Dragon Tempest Art (3) ago
Chapter 104: Calm Dragon Tempest Art (End) ago
Chapter 105: What the King Wanted. ago
Chapter 106: What the King Wanted 2 ago
Chapter 107: Nivalis ago
Chapter 108: Nivalis 2 ago
Chapter 109: The Gift of the Mentor ago
Chapter 110: The Gift of the Mentor 2 ago
Chapter 111: The Gift of the Mentor 3 ago
Chapter Extra: Higanbana the Fearless 1 ago
Chapter Extra: Higanbana the Fearless 2 ago
Chapter 112: Camaraderie at the Demon Continent 1 ago
Chapter 113: Camaraderie at the Demon Continent 2 ago
Chapter 114: Camaraderie at the Demon Continent 3 ago
Chapter 115: Camaraderie at the Demon Continent 4 ago
Chapter 116: Camaraderie at the Demon Continent 5 ago
Chapter 117: Camaraderie at the Demon Continent 6 ago
Chapter 118: Camaraderie at the Demon Continent 7 ago
Chapter 119: Camaraderie at the Demon Continent 8 ago
Chapter 120: Camaraderie at the Demon Continent 9 ago
Chapter 121: Camaraderie at the Demon Continent 10 ago
Chapter 122: Camaraderie at the Demon Continent 11 ago
Chapter 123: Camaraderie at the Demon Continent 12 ago
Chapter 124: Camaraderie at the Demon Continent 13 ago
Chapter Extra: Venom of the Afflicted 1 ago
Chapter Extra: Venom of the Afflicted 2 ago
Chapter Extra: Venom of the Afflicted 3 ago
Chapter 125: Chaos at Dragon Capital Mujinn 1 ago
Chapter 126: Chaos at Dragon Capital Mujinn 2 ago
Chapter 127: Chaos at Dragon Capital Mujinn 3 ago
Chapter 128: Chaos at Dragon Capital Mujinn 4 ago
Chapter 129: Chaos at Dragon Capital Mujinn 5 ago
Chapter 130: Chaos at Dragon Capital Mujinn 6 ago
Chapter 131: Chaos at Dragon Capital Mujinn 7 ago
Chapter 132: Mutual Enemies: Ashfon Versus Nil 1 ago
Chapter 133: Mutual Enemies: Ashfon Versus Nil 2 ago
Chapter 134: Mutual Enemies: Ashfon Versus Nil 3 ago
Chapter 135: Mutual Enemies: Ashfon Versus Nil 4 ago
Chapter 136: Heavenly Blue 1 ago
Chapter 137: Heavenly Blue 2 ago
Chapter 138: Heavenly Blue 3 ago
Chapter 139: Heavenly Blue 4 ago
Chapter 140: Turning Point, Divine Possession! 1 ago
Chapter 141: Turning Point, Divine Possession! 2 ago
 Volume 2 Epilogue ago
Astlan's Ira Chapter 1 ago
Volume 3 Prologue ago
Chapter 142: Lost in Nowhere 1 ago
Chapter 143: Lost in Nowhere 2 ago
Chapter 144: Lost in Nowhere 3 ago
Chapter 145: Lost in Nowhere 4 ago
Chapter 146: Magma and Dragons and still Lost! 1 ago
Chapter 147: Magma and Dragons and still Lost! 2 ago
Chapter 148: Magma and Dragons and still Lost! 3 ago
Chapter 149: Magma and Dragons and still Lost! 4 ago
Chapter 150: Magma and Dragons and still Lost! 5 ago
Chapter 151: Magma and Dragons and still Lost! 6 ago
Chapter 152: Onwards, to the Lost Capital, Hujinn! 1 ago
Chapter 153: Onwards, to the Lost Capital, Hujinn! 2 ago
Chapter 154: Onwards, to the Lost Capital, Hujinn! 3 ago
Chapter 155: Onwards, to the Lost Capital, Hujinn! 4 ago
Chapter 156: Blessing upon the Stoic Girl 1 ago
Chapter 157: Blessing upon the Stoic Girl 2 ago
Chapter 158: Blessing upon the Stoic Girl 3 ago
Chapter 159: Blessing upon the Stoic Girl 4 ago
Chapter 160: Reason and Transition 1 ago
Chapter 161: Reason and Transition 2 ago
Chapter 162: Reason and Transition 3 ago
Chapter 163: Reason and Transition 4 ago
Chapter Extra: Siege at the Astlan Castle 1 ago
Chapter Extra: Siege at the Astlan Castle 2 ago
Chapter Extra: Hydrangea’s Normal Day ago
Chapter 164: The Pirate Game 1 ago
Chapter 165: The Pirate Game 2 ago
Chapter 166: The Pirate Game 3 ago
Chapter 167: The Pirate Game 4 ago
Chapter 168: The Pirate Game 5 ago
Chapter 169: The Pirate Game 6 ago
Chapter 170: The Pirate Game 7 ago
Chapter 171: Blessing upon the Trepidatious Girl 1 ago
Chapter 172: Blessing upon the Trepidatious Girl 2 ago
Chapter 173: Blessing upon the Trepidatious Girl 3 ago
Chapter 174: Blessing upon the Trepidatious Girl 4 ago
Chapter 175: He is so Angry 1 ago
Chapter 176: He is so Angry 2 ago
Chapter 177: He is so Angry 3 ago
Chapter 178: Pirate Fleet Federation Assembly 1 ago
Chapter 179: Pirate Fleet Federation Assembly 2 ago
Chapter 180: Pirate Fleet Federation Assembly 3 ago
Chapter 181: Pirate Fleet Federation Assembly 4 ago
Chapter 182: Pirate Fleet Federation Assembly 5 ago
Chapter 183: Pirate Fleet Federation Assembly 6 ago
Chapter 184: Pirate Fleet Federation Assembly 7 ago
Chapter 185: Pirate Fleet Federation Assembly 8 ago
Chapter Extra: Topaz 1 ago
Chapter Extra: Topaz 2 ago
Chapter Extra: Topaz 3 ago
Chapter Extra: Topaz 4 ago
Chapter Extra: Unseen Monster 1 ago
Chapter Extra: Unseen Monster 2 ago
Chapter 186: The Rainforest of Healing, Fairy Continent 1 ago
Chapter 187: The Rainforest of Healing, Fairy Continent 2 ago
Chapter 188: The Rainforest of Healing, Fairy Continent 3 ago
Chapter 189: The Rainforest of Healing, Fairy Continent 4 ago
Chapter 190: Profile ago
Chapter 191: The Mansion where the Flowers are Rioting 1 ago
Chapter 192: The Mansion where the Flowers are Rioting 2 ago
Chapter 193: The Mansion where the Flowers are Rioting 3 ago
Chapter 194: The Mansion where the Flowers are Rioting 4 ago
Chapter 195: The Mansion where the Flowers are Rioting 5 ago
Chapter 196: The Mansion where the Flowers are Rioting 6 ago
Chapter 197: The Mansion where the Flowers are Rioting 7 ago
Chapter 198: The Prideful Sun and the Everlasting Moon. ago
Chapter 199: The Prideful Sun and the Everlasting Moon 2 ago
Chapter 200: The Prideful Sun and the Everlasting Moon 3 ago
Chapter 201: The Warmth in the Middle of the Chilly Night 1 ago
Chapter 202: The Warmth in the Middle of the Chilly Night 2 ago
Chapter 203: The Warmth in the Middle of the Chilly Night 3 ago
Chapter 204: Divine Counter 1 ago
Chapter 205: Divine Counter 2 ago
Chapter 206: Divine Counter 3 ago
Chapter 207: Divine Counter 4 ago
Chapter 208: Divine Counter 5 ago
Chapter 209: Divine Counter 6 ago
Chapter Extra:  Aldeva City’s Crossroad 1 ago
Chapter Extra: Aldeva City’s Crossroad 2 ago
Chapter Extra: Aldeva City’s Crossroad 3 ago
Chapter Extra: Aldeva City’s Crossroad 4 ago
Intermission 1 ago
Chapter 210: Lotus Pain ago
Chapter 211: Lotus Pain 2 ago
Chapter 212: Lotus Pain 3 ago
Chapter 213: Wailing Souls 1 ago
Chapter 214: Wailing Souls 2 ago
Chapter 215: Wailing Souls 3 ago
Chapter 216: Wailing Souls 4 ago
Intermission 2 ago
Chapter 217: Young Hearts 1 ago
Chapter 218: Young Hearts 2 ago
Chapter 219: Young Hearts 3 ago
Chapter 220: Young Hearts 4 ago
Chapter 221: Root of the Problem 1 ago
Chapter 222: Root of the Problem 2 ago
Chapter 223: Root of the Problem 3 ago
Chapter 224: Root of the Problem 4 ago
Chapter 225: Root of the Problem 5 ago
Intermission 3 ago
Chapter 226: Flowers over Clouds 1 ago
Chapter 227: Flowers over Clouds 2 ago
Chapter 228: Flowers over Clouds 3 ago
Chapter 229: Flowers over Clouds 4 ago
Chapter 230: Cecille’s Woes are Worst than Ever 1 ago
Chapter 231: Cecille’s Woes are Worst than Ever 2 ago
Chapter 232: Cecille’s Woes are Worst than Ever 3 ago
Chapter 233: Cecille’s Woes are Worst than Ever 4 ago
Chapter 234: Intertwining Hearts 1 ago
Chapter 235: Intertwining Hearts 2 ago
Chapter 236: Intertwining Hearts 3 ago
Intermission 4 ago
Important Notice ago
Chapter 237: Plans of Attack 1 ago
Chapter 238: Plans of Attack 2 ago
Chapter 239: Plans of Attack 3 ago
Chapter 240: Plans of Attack 4 ago
Chapter 241: The Center Continent’s Raid 1 ago
Chapter 242: The Center Continent’s Raid 2 ago
Chapter 243: The Center Continent’s Raid 3 ago
Chapter 244: The Center Continent’s Raid 4 ago
Intermission 5 ago
Chapter 245: A World the Girl Wanted to See 1 ago
Chapter 246: A World the Girl Wanted to See 2 ago
Chapter 247: A World the Girl Wanted to See 3 ago
Chapter 248: A World the Girl Wanted to See 4 ago
Chapter 249: The Tragedy of the Man who Loves a Goddess 1 ago
Chapter 250: The Tragedy of the Man who Loves a Goddess 2 ago
Chapter 251: The Tragedy of the Man who Loves a Goddess 3 ago
Chapter 252: Breaking Through 1 ago
Chapter 253: Breaking Through 2 ago
Chapter 254: Breaking Through 3 ago
Chapter 255: Breaking Through 4 ago
Chapter 256: Breaking Through 5 ago
Chapter 257: Unfinished Ending 1 ago
Chapter 258: Unfinished Ending 2 ago
Chapter 259: Unfinished Ending 3 ago
Chapter 260: Unfinished Ending 4 ago
Chapter 261: The Girls Goes Beyond 1 ago
Chapter 262: The Girls Goes Beyond 2 ago
Volume 3 Epilogue ago
Chapter Extra: The Hellbeing Family 1 ago
Chapter Extra: The Hellbeing Family 2 ago
Chapter Extra: The Hellbeing Family 3 ago
Chapter Extra: The Hellbeing Family 4 ago
Volume 4 Prologue ago
Chapter 263: Etude Script 1 ago
Chapter 264: Etude Script 2 ago
Chapter 265: Etude Script 3 ago
Chapter 266: Etude Script 4 ago
Chapter 267: Etude Script 5 ago
Notice to the Public ago
Chapter 268: Etude Script 6 ago
Chapter 269: Etude Script 7 ago
Chapter 270: Beloved Reunion 1 ago
Chapter 271: Beloved Reunion 2 ago
Chapter 272: Beloved Reunion 3 ago
Chapter 273: Beloved Reunion 4 ago
Chapter 274: Beloved Reunion 5 ago
Chapter 275: Beloved Reunion 6 ago
Chapter 276: Beloved Reunion 7 ago
Chapter 277: Entourage 1 ago
Chapter 278: Entourage 2 ago
Chapter 279: Entourage 3 ago
Chapter 280: Entourage 4 ago
Chapter 281: Entourage 5 ago
Chapter 282: Entourage 6 ago
Chapter 283: Entourage 7 ago
Chapter 284: Entourage 8 ago
Chapter 285: Obsession 1 ago
Chapter 286: Obsession 2 ago
Chapter 287: Obsession 3 ago
Chapter 288: Obsession 4 ago
Chapter 289: Light my Fire 1 ago
Chapter 290: Light my Fire 2 ago
Chapter 291: Light my Fire 3 ago
Chapter 292: Light my Fire 4 ago
Chapter 293: A Little Bit Closer, A Little Bit Distant 1 ago
Chapter 294: A Little Bit Closer, A Little Bit Distant 2 ago
Chapter 295: A Little Bit Closer, A Little Bit Distant 3 ago
Chapter 296: A Little Bit Closer, A Little Bit Distant 4 ago
Chapter 297: A Little Bit Closer, A Little Bit Distant 5 ago
Chapter 298: A Little Bit Closer, A Little Bit Distant 6 ago
Chapter 299: A Little Bit Closer, A Little Bit Distant 7 ago
Chapter 300: The Path of Shiva 1 ago
Chapter 301: The Path of Shiva 2 ago
Chapter 302: The Path of Shiva 3 ago
Chapter 303: The Path of Shiva 4 ago
Chapter 304: The Path of Shiva 5 ago
Chapter 305: The Path of Shiva 6 ago
Chapter 306: The Path of Shiva 7 ago
Chapter 307: The Girl who Cried Sheep 1 ago
Chapter 308: The Girl who Cried Sheep 2 ago
Chapter 309: The Girl who Cried Sheep 3 ago
Chapter 310: The Girl who Cried Sheep 4 ago
Chapter 311: The Girl Who Cried Sheep 5 ago
Chapter 312: The Heights of Affection 1 ago
Chapter 313: The Heights of Affection 2 ago
Chapter 314: The Heights of Affection 3 ago
Chapter 315: The Heights of Affection 4 ago
Chapter 316: The Heights of Affection 5 ago
Chapter 317: The Heights of Affection 6 ago
Chapter Extra: The Rotten Fox Girl 1 ago
Chapter Extra: The Rotten Fox Girl 2 ago
Chapter Extra: The Rotten Fox Girl 3 ago
Chapter Extra: The Rotten Fox Girl 4 ago
Chapter Extra: The Rotten Fox Girl 5 ago
Chapter Extra: The Rotten Fox Girl 6 ago
Intermission 6 ago
Chapter 318: Her Unfading Curiosity 1 ago
Chapter 319: Her Unfading Curiosity 2 ago
Chapter 320: Her Unfading Curiosity 3 ago
Chapter 321: Her Unfading Curiosity 4 ago
Chapter 322: Encounter with the Mad Maidens 1 ago
Chapter 323: The Encounter with the Mad Maidens 2 ago
Chapter 324: The Encounter with the Mad Maidens 3 ago
Chapter 325: The Encounter with the Mad Maidens 4 ago
Chapter 326: The Encounter with the Mad Maidens 5 ago
Chapter 327: The Encounter with the Mad Maidens 6 ago
Chapter 328: Labyrinth of Avalon 1 ago
Chapter 329: Labyrinth of Avalon 2 ago
Chapter 330: Labyrinth of Avalon 3 ago
Chapter 331: Labyrinth of Avalon 4 ago
Chapter 332: Labyrinth of Avalon 5 ago
Chapter 333: Labyrinth of Avalon 6 ago
Chapter 334: Labyrinth of Avalon 7 ago
Chapter 335: Chivalry in the Smallest Form 1 ago
Chapter 336: Chivalry in the Smallest Form 2 ago
Chapter 337: Chivalry in the Smallest Form 3 ago
Chapter 338: Chivalry in the Smallest Form 4 ago
Chapter 339: Reminiscence and Shenanigans 1 ago
Chapter 340: Reminiscence and Shenanigans 2 ago
Chapter 341: Reminiscence and Shenanigans 3 ago
Notice of Resumption ago
Chapter 342: Stained Colored Downpour 1 ago
Chapter 343: Stained Colored Downpour 2 ago
Chapter 344: Stained Colored Downpour 3 ago
Chapter 345: Stained Colored Downpour 4 ago
Chapter Extra: Conspirators 1 ago
Chapter Extra: Conspirators 2 ago
Chapter 346: The King’s Last War 1 ago
Chapter 347: The King’s Last War 2 ago
Chapter 348: The King’s Last War 3 ago
Chapter 349: The King’s Last War 4 ago
Chapter 350: The King’s Last War 5 ago
Chapter 351: The King’s Last War 6 ago
Chapter 352: The King’s Last War 7 ago
Chapter ŷĵĠ: ŗ£ťĒřŹýōıĭ ŶÈĽùéž ago
Chapter 353: Rise, King of Camelot 1 ago
Chapter 354: Rise, King of Camelot 2 ago
Chapter 355: Rise, King of Camelot 3 ago
Chapter 356: Rise, King of Camelot 4 ago
Chapter 357: Rise, King of Camelot 5 ago
Chapter 358: Rise, King of Camelot 6 ago
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Durlek
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Erf... much issues with wrong words everywhere.

 Alright. First of all. I like the premise of the story. Person gets transported to another world and turns out to change gender and turn into a loli. Alright. Bonus points for sheer amusement of setting. Cudoes.

 

There is a clear downside I see right from the prologue… you instantly give the MC knowledge that he just “assumes” through no real context or events. This is lazy and can be conveyed as your story progresses instead of just going through a list so the reader understands the setting.

The "death" chapter is filled with so much unnecessary information I had to skip 90% of it. It was like reading a 5 year old's list of things I like and how his friends treat him. Entirely pointless and should be conveyed through actual interactions to situations and other characters. Not just go about stating things randomly with no real point.

Grammar has major issues. Certain words like “This” and “These” are misused often. In the prologue alone I spotted the issue twice if I am not mistaken. Plural forms are missing quite often or misused aswell. It is so bad I cringe every other sentence or so. This is the main reason this submission should not be rated over a 3.0.

Style I will have to criticize the extremely short chapters. And is written as if I am reading a literal translation from a Japanese web novel. That means it is quite often terribly written, with short descriptive sentences and lots of useless repetition.

Overall: Cannot recommend reading this story. Way too much cringe factor. That anyone has so little self respect for their own opinions to rate this above a 3.0 is surprising… but this is royalroadl… can’t really say its not expected.

Rota
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Below Average in my opinion

I understand it gained rapid popularity for fast and frequent updates. but that doesn;t mean I need to join the pack of people blindly tote-ing this as some sort of amazing story, which it isn't.

 

There is practically no plot to speak of, 34 chapters and I can't for the life of me tell where the MC is heading. The MC is also very lacking in depth. the start is barely even a "guy" (spirit/personality) who gets summoned into a large group of "hero's" with no purpose of her own.

she seems to get everything her way miraculously, either by pouting for it, or having some screwed up eureka moment when she decides to test an unknown skill she was told not to use, on a person she claims to be her friend. damn, if that's the treatment you get as a friend, I dread to think what would have happened if she actually had a family.

the king, supposedly has many titles (too many), is supposedly very strong and also supposedly cannot be lied to... yet she does just that at the beginning. and he just wraps himself around her little finger of his own will?

now... as a very particular fan of the gender bender genre... I ask you to remove the tag from your story. unless you plan to introduce a new character to take the role of trap/sexchanged. because what we see so far is a really shallow character who holds up a supposedly male identity for not even a few chapters before it is utterly gone from view and you are sure you are just reading about a typical female lead story, which you don't do any justice either from how you have set her up.

"but he was once a guy and is now a girl, so it has to have the tag." uh, no it doesn't. it's already debatable if she was ever a man because what is supposedly her body is alive and well and is quite healthy and evil in his free time. a small tweak in very few places could turn this into a story where the MC is forced to face off against their sibling or twin, and quite frankly, the story would be better for it.

 

the story has very little content per chapter, and so despite 34 chapters passing, we still know and have seen very little. most of the scroll height on the page is attributed to his rather forced formatting, of blocky text and blank line spacers. 34 chapters and we still know very little real information about the world setting, THAT IS RELAVENT. stuff important to the plot and worldbuilding is completely skipped over and just conveniently revealed as it is needed as if I had all been prepared ahead of time.

 

grammar is grammar. it just slightly worse than the average expected quality for the site, and a far cry from being flawless.

 

will not follow, would not recommend. your story lacks a focus and consistency to justify the amount of attention you have managed to luckily gather.

Amadeus
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Fun and enjoyable, but... ehh...

I'll break everything down before I start talking about the story in general, but this is a nice and fun thing to read, not much more though.

 

Style: It's all over the place. Generally, the structure and flow is pathetically weak. I have little more to say here, a full rewrite might be the only thing that can improve this.

 

Story: It's not perfect, not even close. Even so, I continue to read because it's pretty fun and I don't have to think, because it's evident that the author didn't either. 

 

Grammar: Atrocious at best. Poor sentence structure, swapping tenses mid-sentence even, extremely confusing sentences, subject importance errors, poor punctuation, the list goes on.

 

Character: This is what I really wanted to get to, because I'm just so excited to tell everyone reading about all of the characters! They just pop out of your screen and are incredibly filled with depth. I'm afraid I'll run out of space, but here are descriptions of the characters:
Asagao: The MC, reincarnated from a guy who was killed by terrorists that he knew there were 8 of after only seeing one. Likely telepathic, but never uses it, instead preferring to just rely on onii-chan for everything. Adorable damsel-in-distress with a desire to gain strength. Generic to a scary degree.

 

Ashfon: This guy is a unique character, you likely have never seen anyone like him before. He's fun and friendly, but when he gets mad, he's extremely dangerous. Lots of people lied to him, but he could tell, so he's jaded and closed off. Absolutely not a template king at all, whatsoever. Virgin, and doting older brother-type.

 

The Summoned Heroes: This group consists of:

Ikemen (Ikeman? You sure, author?) #1: Outgoing person who expresses concern for others' well-being. He's nice and good looking, and his character might be viewed as interesting by a cyclops, or anyone else without depth perception.

Gangsta Guy: Tries to act bad. He's a tsundere. 

Teacher Person: Rather young teacher, doesn't act her age or her profession at all. The only trait displayed at all by her is her immaturity.

Meido: Doesn't like dirty things, and is prone to violent outbursts.

Sleepy Hitman: Likes kids. Sociopath. Sleepy.

Miko: Twins, one is a trap. Literally nothing else.

None of the other characters from this group are even memorable enough to be recalled or noticed, and that's saying something when you look at how developed these ones are.

Moving on...

Edelweiss: Strong. Has boobs.

Lily: "Stiff" personality. Has boobs.

Violetta: Fell in love with a dragon. Went crazy. Got mad at a dragon. Refuses to kill said dragon. Now guards king. Scares said king, unless he is mad.

Ipomoea Nil: Alternate personality of MC, took MC's original body. Demon king, insane, tried to rape and murder MC, failed miserably just like he did back on Earth.

Head Maid: Strong. Fanatical. Likes cute things. Pulled a Yang and lost track of MC thanks to Chekhov's Stone.

Alstroemeria: Strong, could probably destroy world if she tried.. Book smart to the point of being a computer. Easily controlled. Naive. Rather aloof and juvenile. Existence is kept secret. Doesn't know how to hold back.

Cecille: Caretaker of Alstroe. Likes cute things?

Begol: Beast prince. Bad breath. Uses power to get what he wants. Bit over 100 years old, but still is a kid. 

Folga: Beast King. Would have banished his son, but didn't because his son got rekt. Likes cute things. 500 years old.

Higanbana: Small kitsune. Should be dead, but isn't. Cute thing, also likes cute things. Compatible with Divine Ascension. Magic user.

Izuna: Higan's mother. Respects Fon-fon. Strongest of the Beast King's generals.

White Dragon Sage: Has a weird name, probably from a generator. Old, dying slowly. His  life is tied to his seal on Violetta. Almost died to Alstroe. Is afraid of Alstroe. Teaching the MC and her slowly growing entourage to use magic effectively. 

 

If you think these are just cursory introductions, they aren't. These are comprehensive descriptions of the characters' personalities, tendencies, and preferences. I did my best to make them look as accurate to the writing as possible, and in the process dropped my rating for Character by almost half.

 

Overall, it's nice and it's fun. It's cute. However, it's like a building that was just crushed: dig through it for days and you still can't even fragments of a story. The characters are flatter than pancakes under 80 psi. Not a single thing about this story is original except for perhaps the language used to write it, because absolutely nobody but the author can speak it.

Saphyron
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Grammar kills this story

So the premise is promising, but the delivery is so very bad.

But worst of all is the grammar, I know that RR is filled with people that do not speak English as their main language, but that is not a good reason to forego grammar entirely. Fix the grammar and the story will slightly better.

Darkere
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Terrible but really kinda fun Story

This was a fun to read Story about a cute girl I guess? The author does the cute girl thing quite well and this is also the only reason I actually read it til now (Chapter 32).

Style: Terrible seriously look up how and when to use indents!! Im hoping this is a problem with the RRL editor though ... 

Make your writing more detailed thing are happening way to fast. Also chapter length is really short you are getting better at that though so props for that ;)

 

Story: Only reason I read it still leaves alot to be desired. Feels very japanese WN like. Sitting around without ambition yet still stumbling into one Event after the other.

Grammar: Meh!

Character: The main character is kinda hard to follow sometimes but still the most komplex character there is. Everone else has what I would describe as One-Liner-description.

How you expect anyone to remember 14 different Summoned Heroes is still a mystery to me especially as they were all Introduced within the same paragraph

Yuan
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Cute Female MC. Everything's good.

My first written review so I will try my best:

The story is really good, well written. I can see that the author knows what he's doing and it's nice.

We have a cute loli as MC (5/5).

Well for short it's my favorite kind of fiction.

In the lastest chapters (~209), the grammar is OK (At least for me) so there was an improvement since the beginning of the fiction. Don't let the ratings make you miss this story.

If you like stories with a female MC and a lot of adventures then go for it, you won't regret it.

And a few words for the author: Thank you for this fiction ! ~

slay_mithos
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Hard to get into, sadly

The premise sounds nice, the characters are alright, but the grammar and style makes it hard to get into the story and focus on it.

 

Blocks of text, odd indentation at the start of paragraphs, short chapters, some of which are saying the exact same thing from a slightly different perspective (PoV of the main character and then a few chapters later PoV of an other one, with barely any differences).

 

The whole thing screams of missed opportunities.

 

I am only up to chapter 9 for now, so things might get better later on, with the author learning from experience, but the first impression makes it harder to actually get into the story.

 

As for the opportunities, the world building seems different enough to be interesting, the characters sound like they are not mere tropes (for now), so it does have promises.

The retelling of parts from an other point of view  could also add a lot, if it actually enhanced the scene with descriptions and thoughts from the other character past a mere mention here and there.

 

The tone from the start seems to be fairly light hearted from the writing style, while mentioning slightly more serious things, but I personally like that style (too bad most of those turn into serious dramas about betrayal and all that though, like blue mage raised by dragons, the first part of that novel was really enjoyable to read).

 

Once I get the time, I'll push through the chapters to see how it develops, because of the interesting things and the potential, but the first chapters really are not good at hooking you into wanting to read more until you reach the last published chapter and are craving for more.

Kandoral
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Could have been good

The story could have been good, but sadly all the mistakes and the constant change of view make it boring. Half the story doesn't even follow our MC and is totally useless to the readers.

The first part was interesting, but pretty fast it gets boring and the reader doesn'T even want to know anymore what happens in the chapters

GriefTG
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It was good until it became a hypocrite to its own ideals

I honestly loved the first arc of this book it was great and well put together it was only until you put the mc into more dangerous situations that you started ruining it. I stopped reading it after chapter 128 but from the progress of the story from that amount of time i doubt it changed. In the authors words he didn't want to make an op mc but have her friends be op instead and thats fine I can appreciate that but THE AUTHOR TOOK THAT CONCEPT WAY TOO FAR. Making every other person OP besides the mc is stupid. When I stopped reading is when two characters who had literally been in two chapters got a power up and became way more powerful than the mc. You are making the same mistakes stories with powerful mc's make but make it oh so much more infuriating. If you had kept the story more slice-of-life it would have word beautifully out for you but you tried to incoporate lots of action that the mc could not take part in by having the side characters battle. It honestly made it so that the side characters were more so the main character than the mc herself. Now I don't know if its changed in the recent chapters but unless someone messages me and tells me that the mc is no longer an underpowered wimp compared to every other side character or the tone of the story changed back to a slice-of-life, I wont be reading it.

DrunkenDutch
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Trainwreck of a story

While the story is not my cup of tea, i couldn't help but keep reading.
I't starts out really cute and fluffy but good things simply do not last. 

  1. Anyone but the MC receives massive powerups
  2. 90% of the story is from the viewpoint of the sidekicks
  3. The MC becomes less and less relevant, sometimes it takes tens of chapters before Asagao get's any attention
  4. The sidecharacters are boring as fuck
  5. There are too many characters
  6. Cliche evil side Nill? check
  7. Cliche evil demons invading? check
  8. The plot is a mess
  9. grammar

Asagao is the best thing what happened to your story. Why the F*** would you stop writing about her? Nobody cares about the side characters, no matter how many boosts you give them. 

1.5 out of 5