Pearl of cold (Old version)

by Frostman

Human 21 year old Matt lives in a modern world, were magic is an integrated part of society, and intelligent humanoids such as orcs, elfs, argonians, and so forth, live their everyday life, minding their own business. Matt is finally moving away from his parents, but instead of moving into his appartment he suddenly finds himself moved to a very diffrent place.

A place in wich is the least of his worries 

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This story is really interesting and unique, the characters introduced so far have not been 2d and generic but have some personality. The MC so far is likeable which is good.

The story is fairly well paced so far and seems to be heading in a good direction. The fights are also well written.

The only problem I have is the spelling and gramma mistakes....something easily solved by a proof reader or double checking.

Other than that,  this story so far has a lot of potential.