Awaken Online

by da3strikes

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Fantasy Sci-fi Anti-Hero Lead Cyberpunk Magic Male Lead Strategy Virtual Reality

Frustrated and angry with his life, Jason begins playing a first-of-its-kind virtual reality game and inadvertently finds himself on the path to becoming the game’s villain. As he continues playing, he also starts to suspect that the game is much more than it appears. Book one is available on Amazon here.


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boringworld
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Well if you cannot read it here, then why keep it here?

Sayl-san
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Bloody Briliant this is.

First of i read the whole thing so far in one sitting and was completely sucked in by the story. Perhaps that is because i can put myself into this character fairly well but above all the story is well written. The Mc is intelligent and plans out his moves with neat precision.

 I will refrain from spoiling any of the story, but i have to say its a new aspact of virtual reality gaming that i have not seen anywhere else. Although somethings are indeed similar to more well known stories such as Legendary Moonlight Sculptor.

I really enjoyed the read and i think others who read this will enjoy it as well, the author seems to be releasing chapters at a rapid rate, I can only pray he keeps it up!

Zimal
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This is a site where amateur authors write for free. If the author want to become a full pro and move elsewhere, good for him. But here, letting a few chapters for advertising and a link to a paying site is similar to spiting in the readers's faces.

What prevent any author writing elsewhere to post a few chapters here as advertising with a link to his other site like this one is doing? Or any author a little popular to do the same? There need to be a clear distinction of what you can read or not here.

 

I am not posting this review because I am against authors getting paid, I buy quite a few myself, nor because I am salty for something I am reading to suddenly become paying, since I couldn't even start it to begin with. I don't doubt the storie is good, with how positive the reviews are. I am just wondering why the mods didn't revome it, sice sadly it doesn't seem have its place here anymore.

Or maybe make a new section for these kind stories that you can't read here anymore, so that while browsing, you browse things you can actually read here.

CynicJester
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RRL is not an ad platform

If you want to advertise your work, please do so. On one of the many dedicated sites and services available instead of clogging up the lists with work that is no longer available here.

 

Good books though, just not the place for them any more.

The Bus Lurker
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Long chapters.

 

Hp is like change new world, so a decapitation is an insta kill, a lvl 1 could theoretically kill a lvl 130, etc. Skills are learned by doing, and not insta learned, stats can be gained through doing and not solely leveling. In my opinion this is the best type of virtual reality fiction.

 

Good grammar.

 

Goal, our goal is escape, revenge, and fun of course.

 

Overall 4/5 not enough character development as of yet, but I expect to see that change over the coming chapters. Give it a try, I think the author has commitment.

Haythan
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Great story, fast uploads, good quality and long chapters. What else could you ask for?

Keep up the good work!!!

Tolack
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Evil never looked so good. In fact, it looks Amazing and Disgusting.

While Jason in game is definitely no saint (I mean, he does some awe-inspiring shit), but his gaming experience started right after years of torment added up and the last straw broke the camel’s back. What that means is that (with some guidance from a ‘friendly?’ diety) he went into the game with a drastic need to vent, and vent he did. 

 

Currently, we’re now getting to see what he’s going to do now that he’s vented and has to deal with the consequences of his actions. I can definitely say I’m looking forward to it! 

 

Now, if you’re wondering why I say ‘it looks Amazing and Disgusting’, that’s because that’s one way of describing his awe-inspiring act. It also describes the antagonist – it’s amazing that he get’s away with his bullshit and said bullshit is disgusting. 

 

If you’re also wondering why I docked a star from character; character development in this story is good, don’t get me wrong. But this story only has 28 chapters out so far and it’s chokabloc full of action! There’s nothing wrong with that at all! In fact, the more I write this, the more I feel like giving it 5 stars too (and that’s why story has 5 stars instead of 4) but all this exciting action and detailed characters means there are other characters we lack detailed knowledge about. I feel that once there’s a calm moment (ohmahgawd is that even possible anytime soon?) we need more good stuff about your characters – NPC and human. [Aka, once you have 50~60 chapters up, I could probably give character 5 stars without a doubt, probably because your PoV change at the start of each chapter allows us extra perception or just pure enjoyment from seeing the reactions of others.] 

 

To potential readers; if you remember that [Mature] tags exist for a reason, and you’re still willing to read this story, then you’re going to have a blast.

 

                                                                                                                                                                                    

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Book One (of a planned trilogy) is complete (ignoring planned editing). As a (new?) fan, I’m hyped for more. What I have read has excited me so very much that I’m looking forward to the next installment without a doubt. There is so much more to explore in both the game world and ‘real life plots’, the book has a proper ‘book one’ ending (aka an arc ends while a cliffhanger for book two appears), and the story quality is without a doubt good.

 

*WARNING*  EXTRA HEAVILY BIASED OPINION BELOW! READ AT YOUR OWN RISK!

[In fact, if da3strikes could find a way to make his ‘additional main characters/important side characters’ more “addictive” , then I’d be able to compare the quality of this story to The Iron Teeth and HTADOADB. Currently though? If I had to compare the excitement I feel for this story to another, I’d compare it to the hype I have for Tidal Lock. As for a story I’m hoping it will match? Savage Divinity!]

flakes
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This piece has a lot of potential.  There is a lot of detail, the characters are interesting and well fleshed out, the VR system has some interesting quirks and I actually want to know what happens next.

catbearpenguin
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As an Evil Penguin Overlord of Earth and all realms below the 6th hell, i love it and would welocme him to my evil empire at any time 

Arwain
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Nice story and concept so far

Actually the first story that made me want to write a “review”.

 

Very good concept and grammar. MC is not really “OP” because he follows the rules of this peculiar VRMMO world.

Just a piece of advice.. if he is able to achieve power in this way, he shouldn’t be the only one. It’s not like he’s the only player in the world who’s smart, or able to notice the tricks that allow him to take down stronger opponents.

 

Anyway, keep un the good work!