Noah Brown had a gift for fighting. Unfortunately punching things didn't pay the bills, at least until he died and an Eldritch god found his soul. The encounter led him to a new world, summoned by bloody cultists, with nothing but the shirt on his back, and a strange item in his system menu.
[???] : A source of infinite potential.
Perhaps he'd finally get to put his gifts to good use.
The MC will become quite OP, so if you don't like that, this isn't the story for you. The story was inspired by He Who Fights With Monsters and Azarinth Healer, but I also take some mechanics from other LitRPGs I really enjoyed.
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This is my first review so I don't know how to start and what to say.
Let's start with the good. The writing is very solid. Like top notch. I would have not notice that the author isn't an english native. Prose flows well and grammar is solid from what I can tell.
That being said, you will see if you like the story after completely reading chapter one and two. So go ahead and try it out.
What I do struggle with, is some of the claims the author makes. The following is taken from the synopsis.
"The MC will eventually become quite OP, so if you don't like that, this isn't the story for you. That said, his progress to becoming OP will be gradual, and he won't instantly have access to game breaking cheats."
I will now add a few chapter 1 spoilers, to set the scene.
Our main character has an item bound to him through some means, that some ancient void god being entity wants. So far so good. I guess you need something to make your character be special. So far no complains.
But now the void god wants the seal. And mind you, the character we've had no exposure to, just says no.
And this might be me, but if some infinitely powerful entity were to approach me, I feel like I couldn't resist.
It's not explicitly mentioned as far as I can remember, but it reads like our boy Noah should be on the opposing end of some mind magic here. Maybe that's not the case, but this is what it feel like.
And our boy just says no.
Maybe it feels off to me, because the author said not immediately op. Maybe it's because the scene is a bit absurd, weird odd. I don't know.
That being said. I was ready to move on. Like the scene is not bad or anything. Just not my cup of tea. Especially when I came into the story with the premise of the MC not being immediately op.
Either way. Not a deal breaker.
Second chapter is giving me major HWFWM vibes. Again, not a bad thing if you like the story. I personally wasn't a huge fan of the story, besides of Jason's character which was surprisingly light (mind you, I've only read book 1).
On the topic of the second chapter, we get introduced to the LitRPG system properly. And NOICE. Cool system. I'm intriqued.
But wait. What's that. Not only does the MC get a the mysterious seal from chapter one, but he also gets two more very powerful Perks.
While his fate marked attribute is divine quality, I don't mind that too much, as it is mostly a tool to further drive the story and explain absurd situations the character no doubt will end up with.
So let's let this one slide.
Next up, Voidborne, the name sake of the story. It's not entirely clear what it does to me. Void creatures have to listen to Noah's command now? Maybe? But can resist? Not entirely sure, the phrasing is a bit ambigous. But maybe those that resist are now hostile to Noah, or feel hostile, or Noah has to be hostile towards them?
You be the judge of that.
Anyway. Another indicator of the character being powerful, early on.
But wait, there is more. Of course we lack a powerscale thus far. But one can imagine that most characters immediately after transmigration/reincarnation aren't super powerful or anything. Usually they would start of the bottom of the ladder, right?
Well, Noah refused (not literally but the way it is written) to adhere to any powerscale and kills a level 27 opponent as a level 1 or 0 (can't remember).
While he had help, I would argue that this entire situation was not clear enough to feel justified. Also, I think Noah had a sword inside him at some point during the fight but managed to pull it out and kill someone else with it.
Anyway story moves on and I like a lot of stuff in chapter three and four.
But what is this. Surely our character isn't insanely overpowered by chapter nine. Or... could it be?
This story has a ranking system, which we know fairly little about, but given that
Anyway, in chapter 9 our level 15 MC kills a monster level 120 or so. And I don't know this goes pretty directly against the authors promise of no immediate op mc.
All that being said. I'm a fairly critical reader, and if you are not, you should definitely read this story. For me it just ticks too many boxes that I don't like or find unplausible.
Now, author. If this review is not to your liking or anything feel free to hit me up. I think you've got a very solid story going for people who are more into the power progression fantasy domain than me, so I feel like this review won't matter to a lot of people interested in the story. If you want I can take it down again, but you should probably remove the last part of the description.
While the premise is very much textbook isekai, the story does try to not be as fully constrained by it.
So far, we've seen a number of things that I would not expect in this type of book, no grammar issues, some spelling mistakes (due to how fast the author is writing) and an overall engaging start.
Definitely looking forward to how it comes along.
I like the story so far, but it really bugs me that he has perks, abilities, and skills. Why are skills and abilities separate? It seems unnecessary and peeves me too much even though it is just a tiny aspect.
Other than that I'm enjoying the story so far, reminds me a bit of HWFWM like another reviewer mentioned.
The initial start is similar to He Who Fights with Monsters. MC is isekaid from Earth to a new world. He arrives in a lair of evil cultists. He has a game interface, along with an inventory and quest system.
But there's more going on. The MC has a mysterious past. Specifically, the events that led to his death (and isekai'ing) seem pretty important, like life or death of planet Earth important. He doesn't remember how he died, though--and how a seal with "infinite potential" got merged with his soul. A seal that eldritch and godly entities are very interested in.
The world he isekais to seems pretty standard fantasy world so far but has its own unique aspects. It'll be fun seeing the MC master his abilities and grow.
The MC is a weeb (it's not obnoxiously overdone, though--MC just makes some obvious weeb and gamer references) who seems to have combat experience/martial arts background. He takes to killing and fighting monstrosities like a fish to water. Very mysterious. It's hinted that he has a natural affinity for this kind of stuff, almost like Jake's natural instincts in Primal Hunter.
The style is clean and the story feels pretty well edited. Only a few tiny typos or odd sentences.
If this story updates consistently and isn't dropped, I think it could turn into something really awesome. Definitely one to watch.
Not my cup of tea, similar to HWFWM, in terms that the protag has problems with killing and seems to get some PTSD ( five chaps in)
Not that every MC needs to be a murder hobo, but dealing with the consequences of killing and emotional development in chap 5 is unnecessary imo.
Earth reverences feel forced and conversation with Amelia feels weird, couldn't tell why.
Interesting concept, nothing new, nothing bad and excellent grammar.
Not for me, but I'm sure lots of people will come to like it
Pro's: I like the idea behind this story. The plot and pacing are good. The quality of the writing is good with a few caveats. The hero has a strong personality and you are interested in what happens to him. The world such as it is so far seems well imagined and the enemies are all something different, not just the usual orcs and goblins and stuff like that.
Con's: The author seems to have English as a second language so there are alot of weird phrases like "I put on a piece of armor" instead of "a set of armor". There are ALOT of typo's and missing words, so if that bothers you be aware. About once a chapter the hero does something or doesn't do something that is incredibly odd, like he gathers coins from dead enemies but then goes to town and never seems to spend of any of them.
All in all though I think this is a pretty good story so far and it shows potential. The central conflict that the hero has found himself in is unique enough to be interesting and you do care about what is happening, which is the main thing you want in a book. I would like to maybe see the author do a second quality pass on some of these chapters at some point because 90% of the mistakes are very minor ones and easily corrected but there are alot of them and it does impact the readabilty somewhat.
If you enjoy a MC that tries to buck the system, exploit loopholes, and refuses settling for the binary paths proposed to him, while still trying to do the right thing, you are at the right story.
Right now, the MC is going to be a good character or if the circumstances will push him to do evil convenient things for the cause he's chosen but he's already creating his own way even when he should be unable to do anything but plod along the trodden paths.
Style: It is pretty good. There is nothing at all wrong with it. Not much to say, it is just very decent.
Grammar: So far flawless and very understandable writing style
Story: Excellent. Since it is still early on you'll find quite a lot of the usual isekai tropes but the bad warning signs are avoided or actively countered (no harem in sight, Mc is not perfect, the setting was not awaiting a chosen one while pathetically circling the drain)
Character: The persistent characters are getting more and more details. The main character seems to have a moral system and not even a binary one, he's also pretty headstrong but can listen to arguments. He does not lose his head in dangerous situations and is willing to risk a lot of danger he decides it is worth it. He can think handle being thrown into a completely new place and fighting for his life even when he does not know what is going on but has lost time being bewildered by things he had no background for. He does not get convenient unexplained knowledge to decipher all the context but is not a completely blank slate despite his missing memories.
all in all: enjoying it, do recomment.
The main issue I saw was a really common one, and one that could just by my personal bias, or personal preference in characters. And that is, that in a lot of story's people tend to trust each other much quicker than they normally would in real life, and again this could just be my pessimistic life view sneaking in. They also tend to develop friendships faster than average, and this could be a way to make the plot move faster and if it is ill shut up about it. but there are also some stories who do the exact opposite such as a character who cannot and will not trust anyone, which can happen in real life as well but it can lead to less convincing characters and character development. This is a very minor case of the first one, where I believe relationships between characters grew faster then would be realistic. But that's just my opinion and you do what you feel is right. There is also the minor issue that I saw in chapter 2 where it said "But those that oppose it, will feel hostile in your presence." Is a strange wording, because it can imply that they fell hostility, or they become hostile in the MC's presence, which I view as an important distinction, and is something that generally gave me pause. Though it is overall it is a minuscule issue. Overall this is a really great story, and I hope you keep up the good work. :)
To preface this review, I really like these kinds of stories and I'm not the most critical reader in general.
This is a reincarnation story about a stubborn man thrown into a situation wildly above any metaphorical paygrade he could've ever had prior their demise. Luckily, he manages to take his new situation in stride.
I personally love Noah's magic and the potential applications it has in the future, as well as the kind of directions he will lead the plot towards. In this short amount of chapters he has already made several decisions that are in no way conducive to a peaceful life. Not the greatest for him but us readers will certainly not be bored.
This story won't be everyone's cup of tea despite its quality. Just give it a try, you'll be able to tell if you like the taste of not.
Right off the bat the novel is good and I like the way the story is going right now, but with the last 2 recent chapters I feel like the the enemies that the MC have to fight are a bit too much. Now I get that the MC will have to fight very powerful powers, but I it happening too soon when he only measures up to about an E rank. I also am not sure about some of the things he said in Chapter 16. He says that he will basically fight all injustice that he sees, that's good and all, but maybe I'm just more inclined to an MC that is an anti-hero; someone who won't outright harm people but will also not go out of his way looking for evil to be fought. This all just might be me misunderstanding the author and MC, but still I think the story is great and you should give it a go.