New chance in fantasy

by Mickids

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Fantasy Romance Harem Magic Male Lead Reincarnation Strong Lead

As he died too soon, a man is sent in an other world to complete his life. By the will of the god of luck no less, he has now a new chance....in a fantasy world. Some would say it is a nightmare to be sent away from everything you know, for him...it is a dream coming true. (apologies to all of you if my English isn't perfect, it is not my natal language. Living in Belgium, I am far more fluent in french, but I'll do my best. Feel free to review, good comments are always appreciated.)

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Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue: Where am I ? ago
Chapter 1: this is how it ends. ago
chapter 2: First victim, unwanted victim. ago
chapter 3: the Havenbag ago
Chapter 4: The fairy in the cauldron. ago
Chapter 5: Let me help... ago
Chapter 6: equipment time. ago
Chapter 7: The imp clan. ago
Chapter 8: Gold and jewels ago
Chapter 9: Hats, scrolls and aura. ago
Chapter 10: the friends, the corpse and the butchers. ago
chapter 11: A new adventure begins. ago
chapter 12: The ring, the bridge and the spiders. ago
Chapter 13: Hello everyone... ago
Chapter 14: the rat, the panda and the meal. ago
Chapter 15: Fighting a semi-orc ago
chapter 16: the princess's lesson. ago
chapter 17: What can you offer? ago
chapter 18: The master and the panda girl ago
chapter 19: what's got eight legs, eight eyes, and have a nightmarish size? ago
chapter 20: the panda is hunting. ago
Chapter 21: little spider, dead spider. ago
chapter 22: Goodbye dungeon. ago
Chapter 23: The claws, the fork and the broom. ago
chapter 24: At Arold's house. ago
Chapter 25: The unwelcome visitors ago
Chapter 26: choice for an enemy, deal for a friend. ago
Chapter 27: House, rings and honey sweets. ago
little infos for my dear readers^^ ago
Chapter 28: Bocow, Bobull and butterfly. (Warning Mature) ago
Chapter 29: It's time to go ago
Chapter 30: When the dead come out of their tombs ago
Chapter 31: Just in time ago
Chapter 32: After the fights ago
Chapter 33: new spell, new quest. ago
Chapter 34: Binvo ago
Chapter 35: Saving a friend. ago
Chapter 36: Welcome home ago
Chapter 37: Treason and trial. ago
Chapter 38: It's good to see you again. ago
Chapter 39: Out of my way... ago
Chapter 40: Lin-Lin evolved ago
Chapter 41: A soldier named Paron and coloured cats. ago
Chapter 42: I remember this. ago
Chapter 43: The Flower Treasure Chest. ago
Chapter 44: The upper salon. ago
Chapter 45: Let's start recruiting. ago
Chapter 46: The day before tomorrow. ago
Chapter 47: Blood on the Central Place ago
Annoucement: I DO NOT FORGET YOU GUYS^^!!! ago
Chapter 48: Rewards and losses ago
Chapter 49: I'll make mages out of you! ago
news ago
Chapter 50: Vampires, darkness and light. ago

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lucaswolf
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hey things are great with story so far hope you continue updating, its sucks to have to wait sometimes when you get enthralled in a story, hopefully you can send us readers more of your story and thanks for the read so far

catalinnr
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The idea is good but....there are big inconsistencies.

*uptated* i'm done , i don't even need to read to know the sequence of events or what tropes will be put in them

 35 chapters in and i feel that the only reason the author made the prologue is for convenience.What i mean is:

-Max is lvl 399,has dragon scales and "godly blood" that can make anyone evolve yet  he is in no way different than a normal human : average sense of smell, hearing,taste ,let alone night vision or amplified vision, just a slightly better vision and worst yet,he never used a spell to try and enhance them at least

-an inventory filled with anything that will be useful in the story

-the magic  is never used past some walls or fireballs ,oh and bridges.I mean really? As a fantasy fan ,you came in a fantasy world ,learn all those spells and you make no attempt to use each and every one of them at least once?and after that ,you don't try to recreate spells from the games you played or make some of your own?I get that teleportation and revive are hard concepts to recreate but come on : body strenghtening,enhancement(for vision,hearing etc),mental mapping,a large area scan,healing,golem making,pet summoning,necromancy,sealing,magic gun,magic wings,mana steal and spell break(silence) should be doable after a few tries given the acumulated experience of casting the other spells and the knowledge left by the dragon.

Multi-casting was never used even though there were so many times it was needed....the zombie extermination could barely be considered one.

This is by far the biggest plot hole and character inconsistency!

He learned healing yet he is using potions and salves?Is he a sadist?

-he learned the spells from scrolls so.... why not give some to Lin-Lin and Octavia? again i think he is a hypocritical sadist.

-there are more ,but less pressing like how Max told Octavia that her legs are only an illusion yet she lagged behind during the rescue of Binvo.

Now.... i get that they are respectful and all that (yep fantasy allright,you don't see this kind of people like.....ever) but Master every sentence is so repetitive like chief or Lord Maximilian or the girls's names or any other title or name.Try cutting some of them ,you are too formal, it makes situations like for exemple Binvo being in danger feel like they are not giving two shits if he dies or not till they arive.

The story is good but the longer you keep this plot holes ,the bigger they will get over time . For exemple : why make them rush to the capital if you'll make them drop by every possible village in the way? have them make camp for a couple of days and test magic far away from any village.

 

Will update every 10-15 chapters if changes were made.

AomineZaky
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Proofreading is Definitely Needed

 This sort of reminds me of my issue with StrongestGardener, albeit being more cliche. I read the first few chapters and I dare say this has a shitload of potential. I get the fact that English may not be your first language and I commend your efforts but yeah, it's still lacking. the story is brilliant, the style is great the characters are amazing and i really want this story to reach the TopWeekly list as it has the potential. It's really hard to do that however if it has grammar and spelling issues, which is abundant in your story so far. I'll keep this on hold as i wish to read this once it has been proofread i hope you do so soon. i really enjoyed the chapters i read, however, should it have better grammar and less spelling errors, i assure you, even more people will enjoy it.

Thank you for letting me read this and i hope you will continue writing as the story is great. 

TheGreatOne
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Possibly the most satisfying story on RRL

The grammar is actual trash and should probably be fixed to rake in more readers to actually continue reading the story.

That said, the grammar wasn't that much of a problem for me because the story was way too hooking and awesome. It may well be the best OP MC story I have ever read.

The writing style gets awkward sometimes, hence the half star off, but generally the story is well-written and easy to read(if you ignore the grammar of course).

The MC is one of the most relatable MCs I have ever read about, but I took a half star off because most of the other characters could be more fleshed out.

Also, the insanely sadisticly crazily humungusaurusly gigantically long chapters are an added bonus. You could expect to take many a hour reading this, and enjoy every one of it.

bladejester
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 hope there is a next book, i loved it. laughed my ass off at the funny parts, almost shed a tear at the heart warming stuff and loved the entire story, i saw some shitposters in the comments but they can go to hell. you are a good writer and i cant wait fot more

Carn
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Most people say the story is slow,but that's because they don't want detail, they just want a four page book in which mc gains op abilities page 1, page 2 gets a harem, page 3 defeats demon army, page 4 just says the end, IF YOU DONT WANT DETAIL THEN DONT READ THE STORY,

Also I have noticed people say there are inconsistencies in the story because the words sometimes don't make sense as well as people complaining about bad grammar

1. USE COMMON SENSE AND CONTEXT CLUES TO FIGURE OUT WHAT THE AUTHOR MEANS

2. CUT THE AUTHIR SINE SLACK! HE/SHE ISNT SOMEONE WHO SPEAKS ENGLISH AS THEIR FIRST LANGUAGE 

3. THE AUTHOR STATES IN THE BEGGING OF THE STORY THAT THEY WILL HAVE GRAMMAR ISSUES AS WELL AS STATING THEY ARE BELGIAN 

BUT this is a very good story for those people who enjoy a good story and aren't going to be a total jerk just because of some grammar issues

 

@MicKids keep up the good work :D

 

EleventhRelic
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great story, greater potential

Whilst the general theme of this tale has been done before many times, there is a freshness to Max that draws you into the story. 

The first couple of chapters are i abiet cliche and done before, but as it progresses and max is joined by Lin-lin, Octavia and Binvo it grows in richness and potential. 

Whilst english is not the authors first language it is not hurt by this in the slightest, i wish i could write a second tongue so well! 

 

Heartly recommend!

manpapper
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 I first read to chapter 34 and wait sometimes before some others chapter comes out.

This story is one of the few where i don't have to read from the start to remember it well.

I can only say keep up the great work and thanks for the the fiction.

renimon20
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No matter what anyone says I like it :)

TTT144
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Great story!  Easily the best one I have read on Royal Road! 

It is consistently gripping to read, written well with very few errors, doesn't leave the reader wondering how/why something happened, it has a well thought out world, and its characters are well developed each with their own personality. 

Definitely read this story!