The martial path of death and destruction.
Now, the only way out.
Back to where monsters, gods, devils and ÞÞÞÞÞÞÞÞ bring forth their calamities.
A superior apocalypse is about to arrive.
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As I read the first chapter I fell in love with this book, lol, you hardly find good, well written, time loop stories out there but this one has it. The characters have depth and personality which is rare for a cultivation novel, they are understandable and even relatable in some cases. The world itself is done just right, you are given information but not too much information, it leaves you with an idea and a need to know more. Overall, I'm enjoying this and look forward for more exciting and interesting content.
Thus far, the story has followed a young boy, Neave, raised in a cultivator sect, who undergoes a hellish time-loop experience that leaves him very powerful and a little unhinged. However, as suggested by the synopsis, the loop is more prelude than actual story. This makes an early review somewhat difficult.
The time-loop arc is well-executed. Neave undergoes fairly drastic character changes, but they are spread out over a dozen chapters and read as a natural, even inevitable consequence of his circumstances. The action scenes are exciting. While Neave ends up a little crazy, he isn't sociopathic or anything, which is a far too common trope among TR stories.
Only a few chapters have been written outside the loop so far, but they are promising. Various secondary characters have gotten glimmers of backstory and development even these few action-packed chapters, and it seems the author has given some thought to the wider world. Neave is very powerful but not overwhelmingly so, giving opportunities for meaningful conflicts.
If you enjoyed The Menocht Loop (before the MC fucked off of the mortal plane and the story went to shit), then this story seems to have a similar structure, depth, and high quality of writing. I recommend it if you enjoy any RR cultivation stories, although if you're in it solely for the time-loop then you'll be disappointed.
The first chapter was a pain to read because the author just doesn't understand proper tense use. This gets better in the following chapters but never entirely goes away.
And then the characters goes to hell in chapter three and the entire things slows to a crawl, utterly destroying any pacing the story had because the author feels the need to give far too many details on far too many loops the character goes through.
And on top of that you've got a thoroughly unlikeable main character. You kno wthe type, the unsefferable know it all with an over inflated sense of their own worth because they're "smarter" than everyone else.
The MC is supposedly 11 but really acts more like a 16 years old. That shows the author does not have a good grasp of how people behave, on top of that the MC is made into a very particular brand of Mary sue, the type where horrible things happens to them just so they can show off how strong willed and better they are than other people.
TLDR: unlikeable character, horrendously paced and in dire need of an editor.
I'll start out by saying I haven't read something this good in a long time. I was thinking of giving the story a less than perfect overall score because the story spent more than a few chapters where the only character was the protagonist but the story is just too good othewise.
While it did detract from the story, I couldn't bring myself to remove anything from the character or story score because I think this was an intentional move on the author's part. Not only did that part of the story serve as a buildup for future events, it also served to develop the protagonist as a character.
Not only that, I'm impressed enough at how much character development and plot events happened within the span of such few chapters that five stars feels like too little for the character and story score.
Although worldbuilding doesn't have a score I'd like to give it an honorary mention. This story manages to strike the balance between revealing enough about the world for the reader keep making guesses about what's going to be revealed next while still leaving a lot unanswered.
In terms of grammar and style I didn't notice anything off. Really I'm not the best judge on those sort of things but I can say there's nothing glaring.
For anyone thinking about reading the story but aren't completely sure I'll just say that if you like the progression fantasy genre you will absolutely like this story.
Fun , To much Fun .
Mc is a Whinny mortal . Yet he found a book make him experience death million times but open him endless possibilities. Also this should how a Loop Novel be written : Trials, Error , Error, Error ×3,14 ...Success ,F*cking Harder Trials...
Although many Keep complain about mc personality (like his EarthCore like Early Stubborness) , I thought that was okay for me.
Others characters (Except the Father) is mostly obscured due to little screen time. Ps: Father Shines and very Well Written, im glad for that So the Others.
The cultivation path here seem diff and that a Plus.
So It up to u to enjoy this wonderful piece your self . I hope this wacky review of mine help. TFTC !!!!🌋🌋🌋🔥⚡️💧❄️
I would give this author 5 stars for his worldbuilding, character development, and insight into the psychology of what its truly like to suffer a mind shattering ordeal. But I will not give him those points because he committed what I consider to be classic sins of all LITRPG stories.
Sin number 1: He made the protagonist edgy and wiser than everyone around him.
Sin number 2: He made the protagonist female weak and pining for Mr edgelord.
High-school me would have eaten this book up and asked for seconds, but I'm in my thirties and I need more meat on the bone. This is no shade on the author. Honestly it's doing a wonderful job for what it is, but if your like me, looking for another book that stirs the heart and mind as well as delights the inner child; this writer needs more experience before he can tell that story. My message to the author would be: You are a wonderful writer with a great deal of promise. You think very deeply about many aspects of character development and I see in you a future writer of great caliber and success. This story wasn't for me but as your storytelling develops, I look forward to seeing what you produce.
It's still early for me to review a fiction, but since there are no other reviews I figure I should put one out there.
As of this review, we're 9 chapters in and have made it to the arc promised in the description - the 'hellish loop'. I think we might even be getting close to the end of the loops, but it's hard to say. That depends on Neave succeeding at what he's trying this time.
The interactions at the sect before Neave was trapped made sense; they were well-written and the people were understandable. The time he's been trapped has also been well-written and understandable, showcasing the environment, the challenge, and Neave's various issues and attempts to overcome it. It keeps moving and doesn't feel stale.
I'm personally looking forward to seeing how Neave handles things after he gets back out; that's going to be a make-or-break point for the story. He's been changed by his time stuck alone, but what does that really mean when he's back with people?
i mean mad in a literal sense, the main character is quite insane. still a great story so far, thanks to a very well done time-looping arc, as well as some very intense and gritty battles. i'm not too sure where the story goes from here back in cultivatorland, which honestly makes it all the more engaging. plot progression is good. no issues with syntax or grammer. overall, worth reading.
The story keeps you interested. Several characters have been setup in addition to our protaganist, hinting at the possibility of many interesting stories with reocurring characters ahead.
As for our main character, he gets into plenty of fights. Honestly, a bit too many for my taste, but I'm confident that many fans of the genre won't be bothered by that at all. I'm curious to see if he has already achieved the final form of his personality, or if he will grow/heal into something else. The title points the obvious, but that doesn't mean that this story won't end up with our hero no longer being the 'Jester of the Apocalypse'!
The story is great, the loop is satisfying and the characters are well written and reasonable.
But the thing I didnt expect was the comedy. Or should I say I did expect it but then it seemed like it wasn't trying to be one. But every once in a while there's a decent joke that genuinely made me laugh out loud. The humor really isn't the focus of the story, but it seems like funny things just happen naturally to the main character. Fitting with the theme of the book.
The other thing that really impressed me were the detailed fights. I hope the author keeps putting in the same amount of effort into the fights in the future as well.
Be warned though, the story does not shy away from gory and self harm stuff. It isn't too bad in my opinion and it doesn't feel forced either. In fact, given the theme of the book it is almost to be expected.
Another thing I see a lot of people mentioning is the grammar, but as far as I've seen if the story had grammar issues, the author has fixed them at some point. The prose isnt masterful though, even if there is actual poetry in the book. That personally doesnt bother me however.
Overall good progression fantasy, love it.