Another hero Tale: Nephilim
by Layzboi
On a walk home, Nathan Lowell trips and falls into another world. When he wakes, a fairy tells him he's The Hero of Legend. With nothing else to do, Nathan decides to travel this world and little by little, discover the selfish and unwarranted expectations that come with his title.
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Just saying, you should mention the protagonist is a Trap on the first chapter or in the summary. Some people's tastes are different and even though it doesn't affect me. I know a friend who couldn't stop complaining about this.
Pretty good
So the story has bad grammer and the most beta MC i read about. Him being a male but looks like a female is cheap humor. The story is slow paced, but the cast of characters aren't one dimensional. To improve, i'll have MC start killing people and stop being so trusting. I can't stand how he's telling everyone his secrets. If he realizes from a revenge plot, like from those slavers or gets ratted out by the guild master, that he's being too optimistic, then he should wake up from his passive delusion and change how he approaches things. Like thinking the slavers would say thank you for not killing them and decide to keep the whole thing to themselves because if they were killed, in the middle of nowhere to keep his identity secret, some how the slavers guild will find out and send swarms of grunts. See how smart he was to keep them alive and trust they won't ambush him later? Not really. This is an example how his EQ affects his thought process. Oh look this fox girl is leading me into a trap. Might as well follow her, don't want her to be suspicious. She was forced to do it? Lead me into a stronghold of bandits with out back up. What, you lead me into another trap? I know I look like a female, but I'm a male. 'proceeds to beat head bandit.' "You're arura tells me, you're from. Earth." I am and i hope you pinky promise to not tell anyone that i'm a hero too. 'proceeds to forgive her after subtle blackmail'. Pretty much the MC is low EQ and naive.
Rate: 3.00
Concept is unoriginal, story is good.
In all seriousness the concept is one seen all over, though this is not to say that I dislike it.
I believe your take on it is one few manage to actually succeed in doing.
HOWEVER, you literally BUTCHERED the grammar, some of the words you use are replaced with others. Like, were you writing on your phone with autocorrect on? It actually makes it harder to read what was written and has the reader make do with other words they think would fit in the situation.