Journey of the Immortal Grandmaster

Journey of the Immortal Grandmaster

by This_one_

Who is able to resist the allure of the cultivation world? The world where individuals can fly on their swords, crush mountains with a wave of the hand, dry up seas with another, and most importantly, have a chance to reach immortality?

Han Lingyun was certainly not planning on refusing the outstretched hand he had been offered. His conviction had only strengthened after the young boy had regained his previous life’s memories as a famous mathematician. The pain of death was still etched deeply in his soul, the futility of a mortal’s body.
But now Han Lingyun had found his hope to satiate his constant thirst for knowledge, his desire to uncover the laws of the world, his fascination for the universe.


Follow Han Lingyun as he embarks on a mythical journey to reach immortality. One step at a time, he leverages his brilliant mind while staying true to his cautious and calculative nature in order to weave his way through the many pitfalls of this unforgiving world.

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76 Chapters
Chapter Name Release Date
1- Old Man ago
2- Death and Life ago
3- Coming of age ceremony ago
4- Trial ago
5- Problem ago
6- Major and Minor ago
7- Martial Art ago
8- Choice ago
9- Cultivation Method ago
10- First Lesson ago
11- Cultivation ago
12- New Lifestyle ago
13- Answers ago
14- Unexpected surprise ago
15- High Market ago
16- Gains ago
17- Second Stage ago
18- Ranking Competition ago
19- Duels ago
20- Rise to fame? ago
21- Competition at the top ago
22- Mission Hall ago
23- Business ago
24- Cub’s Den ago
25- Edera Array Meet ago
26- Interest from high up ago
27- Efforts and Repetition ago
28- Plans and Deliberations ago
29- New rankings ago
30- Unavoidable trouble ago
31- Leaving the mess behind ago
32- Exchanging favors ago
33- Harvest   ago
34- Facing the beast ago
35- New rules ago
36- Consequences ago
37- Meeting ago
38- Shu Line ago
39- Ties ago
40- Rite of passage ago
41- Request ago
42- Willpower ago
43- Qi condensation ago
44- Mission ago
45- Kill ago
46- Family ago
47- Agreement ago
48- 1 vs 1 ago
49- Rematch ago
50- Full circle ago
51- New year, new rankings ago
52- The power of qi condensation ago
53- Water ago
54- Runic structure ago
55- A battle of wits ago
56- Teacher and Disciple ago
57- Hunt ago
58- Martial Heart ago
59- Waterfall ago
60- hello world ago
61- Design ago
62- Assessment ago
63- Updates ago
64- The Wood Element ago
65- Second year ago
66- Sun Cultivation Alliance ago
67- Sects ago
68- Auction ago
69- Human Behavior ago
70- Bouquet Final ago
71- A Black Rainbow ago
72- Stars Align ago
73- Teaming up ago
74- Dark Moon Combination ago
75- Provisional Ranking ago
76- Nasty Surprise ago

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Turtle Cloud
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Disappointing Subject Matter

Reviewed at: 23- Business

First off, I love math. When I first read the synopsis, I really wanted to like this story.

Unfortunately, there's not much to like about it; it really is just your average Cultivation story with some very basic offhand algebra thrown in. Now, don't get me wrong, the Cultivation story by itself is rather entertaining and decent enough to stand on its own. But that's not why I started reading the story, and it's really not enough for me to continue reading the story.

Secondly, the MC's only notable quality is being less of a "famous mathematician", and more of a little weasel.

We are told that the MC is a genius, loves math, and really wants to learn more about fundamental laws of the universe, yeah?
What we are shown is a child with a handful of college-level math courses and a strong desire for money and power. His 'genius' was answering a couple of simple and well-known riddles and above average memory, his 'love of math' was scamming a good-natured Elder who likes him (with the most infamous "simple-question-hard-proof" pair of the millenium) and setting up a morally grey resale business potentially burning bridges for a pittance, and his 'desire for knowledge' is just side-tracked in favor of cultivation with the excuses of "longevity" and "strength to survive".
Keep in mind, he's a 10 year-old in a powerful and very well-managed sect.

He's not gonna die of old age any time soon and currently has no reason to think his life is in imminent danger.

Mike Henry
Overall

It seems wierd that 10 to 11 year olds would be given bandit hunting missions, murdering each other, and overall being mini adults with adult problems. I know that this is a cultivation world and they are cultivators and not children, but something still seems odd to me. Overall I still like the story

Reifi
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Has potential but desperate need of edit/proofread

Reviewed at: 74- Dark Moon Combination

Cultivation stories are almost always fun to read. The author has a solid conception of their world and direction in which they want to take the story. Their cultivation system and general world building is certainly at this stage of the story the most well thought out and realised part of the story. However, as much as I don't want to disparage an obvious ESL writer, the author needs to have someone assist them with grammar/syntax. There are countless scenes in this series that are brought down by poor and awkward word choices that don't flow naturally alongside weird dialog and explanations. 

 

The style and story are the strongest parts of the work thus far. Both have great room for improvement but manage to paint a picture that is interesting. The characters are fairly shallow and the weird choice to start everyone at such a young age stretches the readers immersion for how murderous and cunning they are. I won't expand further on grammar as I alreadly touched on it above. I wish the author all the best in continuing the series. It's plain they have a talent for writing that they can steadily improve upon. I think they would definitely benefit from a slower release schedule where they could spend more time on making sure everything is at a satisfactory level. 

DoktorPrimat
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A great reincarnated in a cultivatior world story

Reviewed at: 70- Bouquet Final

I truly enjoy your story, and your cultivation-system is progressing nicely, and the story os flowing wonderfully. A few spelling errors here and there, but nothing that breaks the reading spell.  The only thing that iffs me a tad is just how.... grown-up the 11 year old children are acting. They seem 5-7 years older mentally than they are, and apparently also look some 5 years older physically than their age would suggest. That throws me for a loop every time it's mentioned.

Beside that I like that the MC isn't shown as a OP munchkin that gets the heavens fortune and trips over a secret cultivator treasure stash and all that nonsense, but seems intelligent, yet still curious. I enjoy thr MC's thoughts on certain aspects of cultivation, such as what the spirit root actually is, and what qi is. A bit og science in the magic world is always a nice outlook.

The story is definitely worth a read if you enjoy cultivation and advancement stories with a well written world and a colourful description. The characters are well thought out and have a life besides interacting with the MC, and the story has an overall well-thought out feel to it.

Looking forward to more!

-Dok

Rodan
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Cultivation story but with some smattering of math to make the MC seem smarter than the typical cultivation MC. A bit of a twist is the sects 800 newest ten year old children recruited live out a poor rendition of 'Lord of the Flies' by William Golding, while the sect elders watch from afar allowing children to kill each other.

Most of the story focuses on the MC cultivating and exposition dumps that tend to restate the same thing over and over again. The MC is reincarnated after a "fateful meeting" with a "mysterious old man". As a 10 years old anti-social (he has no friends what-so-ever) child he attends his coming of age ceremony, in the mortal world, to become an adult. He then joins a cultivation sect and proceedes to repeatedly say uncovering the secrets of the universe and his family are important. Yet he immediatly makes several friends, exploits an elder and the sects point/money system, focuses on cultivation, and largely ignores that elders allow children die as this it the "cultivation world".

Grammer is as one would expect from a poorly translated Chinese webnovel. Mistakes litter each chapter. Even if used to such already many are hard to ignore as they break the readers immersion, provided you are able to immerse your self in the story to begin with.

The MC is comes across as two-dimensional as is the case with most cultivation novels. All the side characters are very one-dimensional: we know their names, martial arts practiced, and cultivation level. Most side characters, the MC's "friends" included, could be removed and there would be no major changes to the plot of the story.

tomledder
Overall

Good Cultivation Story. 

The story includes everything that is needed in this kind of story.
Meanwhile the hero has no chat power.  In addition, the form of obtaining the energy is well explained.
story for people love cultivation story.

Hope the author continues to write clearly. 
The pace of the story comes at the desired time. 

WilliamHellios
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Cultivation with math, this about sums it up, it's realy great how the story mixes these two so great together.

 

The MC has is consistent with his motives and appears and feels real, he is not just some justice warrior set on saving damsels in distress.

 

The caracters in the story are lifelike, they have dreams,ambitions etc... they are relatable and likeable for the most part.

 

4.5 stars because the first 5 chapters could be better, the story really picks up between ch 5-10

Philip Read
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I am enjoying the story. The MC is logical and doesn't frustrate me with stupidity or illogical decisions.  The plot is straight forward and engaging with wfficient time skips that keep the story progressing without glossing over important events. Well structured, progressive, logical, doesn't have unnecessary baggage for the MC to overcome the always seems to be popular with these types of stories. Power structure logical and consistent, I like it.

edwardcastle
Overall

A flawed pearl, but a pearl nonetheless

Reviewed at: 66- Sun Cultivation Alliance

There are many kinds of stories in the world.

Those that transport you to the characters' minds and have you feeling like you are going through everything they are. Those that evolve you in an air of mystery and wonder. And those, like this one, that take you through a pleasurable trip.

This novel is a tranquil journey through a cultivation world.

It's written like a light novel, with little care for details except those the author cares about. You often won't be given a detailed description of every character and place but vague impressions to let you imagine things however you see fit instead of slowing down the trip to look at something. Your imaginary wagon will keep moving, and the only hurdles will be the few points where the author believes a full stop is required.

Yet, that doesn't mean the setting is bad. It's above average as cultivation worlds come.

That also doesn't mean the pacing is too fast. It's even a little slow at times. Then, it rushes ahead. The author shows everything he believes is worth his and the reader's time and doesn't waste words with things he has already explained in detail or that don't matter much.

Finally, it definitely doesn't mean things are shallow. There's love and passion put into many concepts the author shows us. As with most novels, it has both two and three-dimensional characters, and that's alright.

This is a fine piece of entertainment. Don't come waiting for a life-changing story. Come to enjoy a pleasant sunset afternoon following a story that will leave you wanting more without feeling like an addict.

I give it five stars because it hooked me and didn't have any glaring issues that decreased my enjoyment, and I'm at a point in my life where I don't need much more than that.

friendofcatgod
Overall

I'm really enjoying this story. The main character actually makes progression at a reasonable pace but isn't trying to stay "under the radar". The story is well paced and it makes me want to beg for more chapters. I hope we see some advancements in his relationships as he gets older.

I do hope time moves faster in his 3rd and beginning of his 4th year.

Over all this story is Definitely my cup of tea☕.