Born Different [Monster Evolution LitRPG]

Born Different [Monster Evolution LitRPG]

by Vnator

In the dark caverns of a secluded dungeon, Click the spider is born with the impossibly rare gift of great Intelligence. Only the strongest of monsters can hope to survive in the savage dungeon, and Click must make the most of their unique abilities to come out on top… or at least alive.

Click can best be described as Lawful-Neutral, but in a way that they see merit in making and benefitting from allies rather than trample everything under them. So not a Hero, but definitely not a mindlessly evil villain.

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GreenPangolin
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An intelligent monster protagonist that isn't an isekai'd human? Yes please.

It's great to see a smart (for its kind) creature gradually build its understanding of the world, I'm already rooting for its terrible maneating success. The lore snippets at the start of every chapter is a cool worldbuilding choice.

Seeing outside POV some more would be appreciated, I think.

Society
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It's easy to have LitRPG stats governing the intelligence of beings, but it takes skill for quantifiable differences in intellect to show themself naturally without coming out and explicitly mentioning it through comparison. This new monster evolution story thankfully fits the latter description, as the entire premise is based around the protagonist's superior brainpower. Click quickly pursues a skill path of commanding other creatures to do it's bidding, which comes in handy when implementing tactics that can turn a fight from unwinnable to simple. I'm enjoying this very much, and reccomend it to anyone willing to give it a shot. 

beingtheergot
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I highly appreciate a LitRPG that has put time and effort into its system, and this story has obviously done so. There isn't enough out right now to do a full advanced review, so I'll do a smaller, shorter one that I may update as the story gets longer.

Monster evolution stories can sometimes be difficult to do, because they often boil down to "the MC fights Monster A and wins. Then, the MC fights Monster B and wins. Then, the MC fights Monster C and wins. It levels up. Next chapter." This story, while absolutely focusing on progression and leveling, seems to care much more about intelligent, creative solutions to problems than brute force. It makes these conflicts and 'xp grinding' much more interesting.

Also, as I said before, the LitRPG system has obviously been planned out and thought about ahead of time -- the stats matter, the abilities matter, it just generally feels effortful.

So far, I'm enjoying it. Keep it up, author! :)

Ixta
Overall

A very good start to a new story.  I'm enjoying the style quite a bit and am quite fond of the subtle humor at play.  I'm looking forward to the development of the spider.  It's a clever one indeed to already realize the horrors of micromanagement.  The grammar is also very good.  If there are any mistakes, I didn't notice them while reading.  

TravellinJack
Overall

I'm several chapters intro a really enjoyable binge on this tale.  The writing is easy to read, and follow.  I also got a kick out of the way the world outside the dungeon is written. (Sorry for the impersonal review, figured it was the best way to highlight some of the things I like so far.)

IncognitoAnonyms
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Three things you can look at forever: How fire flows, How water burns and How others work for you.

Write down the cocktail recipe. Let's take a pure mind that is not reincarnation. It is somewhat like a paradoxical snake*, only without religious fervor. (*The Great Core's Paradox) Then add a related tribe, as in the "Chrysalis", only let it be more primitive and less social. After that, you should gradually introduce this mixture into the system. Only this is not an RPG system where each of your sneezes will allow you to acquire the skill of sneezing, and daily scratching your ass throughout your life will allow you to acquire immunity to scratching. No, this is a strategic system in which the capabilities of each unit are enclosed within the framework of the type of unit, without the possibility of being above or below it. And the only way to go beyond this framework is to move into the framework of the next division, which is at the next stop of inflexible development paths. The last and most important ingredient in this mix is the talent of the main character. Does luck pour out rewards and trials like a cornucopia? No, Fortune stopped paying attention to him after the very first gift. The main character is not endowed with the power to "overcome his limits", which would allow him to smash any wall with his head. No. He only has the ability to draw conclusions. (And he has access to special development options, but he is not unique in this.) You do not have the strength to defeat a much superior enemy. What to do? "Exceed your limits"? No. If you don't have enough power, use someone else's power. Your little world is slowly being destroyed by one problem. What to do? Know yourself, know the enemy and win a thousand victories. An enemy using the tools of the mind has appeared? The wedge is knocked out by the wedge. Your race is under threat of destruction, what will you do? Will you become a hero who will do the job for a thousand spiders? No, you are not a super-being. You will be the organizer who will create a symphony from the unique but limited capabilities of each specialist. There is no need to strive to become a hero equal to a thousand, if in a coordinated hundred of spiders each spider will be effective as ten.

If by this time you were very intrigued and very tired of reading this review, you can start reading this story about the Spider’s Bizarre Adventure.

Narrative style? The beginning of each chapter(Almost all. The author loses his grip.) contains a statement by a representative of a reasonable race, which thematically corresponds to the content of the chapter. Sometimes we manage to understand the point of view of intelligent beings on some phenomenon. Sometimes it turns out to be a good joke. And sometimes it can be annoying just because you want to start reading a chapter as soon as possible. Speaking of jokes, jokes in this work are presented in abundance. It's nice. Jokes are often based on emotional moments of social interaction. The author instilled human emotional reactions and patterns in the spiders to increase reader engagement. In principle, this is very successful, but you may have an unpleasant dissonance. The narrative style is pleasant, but not without drawbacks.

Are the characters in this book good? Ha-ha-ha! There are no characters here, there are only blank sheets on which two artists actively draw: temperament and innate qualities. Do these artists draw well? It's fascinating. Is it possible to judge anything about the characters in this book? Yes and no. Judging the characters in this book is like judging how water flows or how fire burns. It's just a primitive manifestation of the natural element. This is a special beauty, and not everyone will appreciate it.

What can be said about the described universe? At the moment, this world is opening up to us smoothly and systematically. The author is not trying to dump on us huge monoliths of text that have little to do with the surrounding reality. No, the author shows you the surrounding reality, from which the description of this world is formed line by line. But. The author has not yet transferred the narrative to the "big world". It is completely unknown whether the author will be able to continue to build a picture of the world as holistically.

What can I say about grammar? Actually, it's quite funny. I am a foreigner, so in all my reviews I write that I have not seen the original text, as I read and write through an online translator. And since I can't see the source text, I don't see any errors in the text, right? At least that's how it should be! But the author managed to make such mistakes that they were able to survive the ruthless distortion of the online translator! Brilliant! My applause! You've lifted my spirits!

Since the author was able to make me laugh even with his mistakes, I cannot but recommend this book to you. I wish you all the best and see you in the comments!

JingleDragon
Overall

The first few chapters are pretty rough, but it improves after that. The author has said he'll go back and edit it later; until he does, give it at least 4 chapters before you decide if you're going to stick with it.

Simple but cute monster litrpg. If you like numbers go up, this has it. If you like a story where not every single little detail goes Protag's way and victory becomes boring and expected, this fits. Give it a shot.

Nomad1791
Overall

Well written, enjoying how the characters are growing and evolving literally. No real world building yet other than beginning chapter peaks which are awesome. Honestly just not a whole lot here to review but I wanted to give a encouraging stamp of approval and follow it. I like the writing, the direction, and the idea that bundle this story up. The writing is clear with little grammatical mistakes if any,the direction being personal and specie's growth, the idea that monster gained sentence and is discovering for itself how to survive and bring it's species with it. Yep it's cool looking forward to more.

grovekeeper
Overall

The author seems to have no idea how to use pronouns. From the first chapter on, they is used to refer both to a group of spiders and one individual spider. Then to escape using He or she, the author goes on to repeatedly use 'This particular spider' once every paragraph. All the sentences seem clunky and short and seems to go to many lengths to make up for this one particluar obsession. It can easily be solved, either by using singulars or just using it. There is not much vocabulary in the chapters, the words and sentences both seem repetitive.