Some seek power. Some seek justice. Others seek to root out the filth lurking in the darkest of corners.
Spot was summoned from his comfortable charging pad and familiar floors to a world of magic and intrigue. After the flight of his new patrons, he is left to care for a filthy castle. During his quest to keep this new home clean, he will face demons, foreign armies, and the dreaded stairs.
All those who stand before him will be swept away. Those who follow his spotless trail will find enlightenment, purity, and a world on its knees.
Follow this wholesome vacuum on his quest to power.
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I don't normally go for stories with frequent perspective changes, but this story is amazing so far!
I gave it a whirl because the title was ridiculous. And definately didn't expect something I would enjoy so much.
I like our main character, I like the suporting characters, and how they all add to the story, and the different lenses our plot has so far!
Our tidiness-obsessed hero seeks the death of all mess. Unfortunately for him, pesky magic users make magic circles of dust and salt! Shenanigans, over-estimations and fun views in the mind of a sapient vacuum ensuem. Grammar is perfectly fine, and the system isn't given much focus, which I love. I look forward to seeing how Spot the Endbringer, Enemy of Entropy, and Dust's Bane cleans up the rest of the castle he's found himself in.
With funny ideas that depend on constant misunderstandings, it's best to keep them short and sweet. I liked the first few chapters, but then the lack of dialogue and a plot based on misunderstandings began to feel thin. When I realized the story was boring me, I dropped it. This was a great unique idea for the first few thousand words, and then it became tedious. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes on your projects.
I admit I didn't expect much when I came across it, but I devoured all 59 chapters available in two days. Reading about a roomba leveling is oddly compelling. I can't wait to see what Void/Spot and Bee get up to next.
There's hardly any grammar or spelling mistakes. I look forward to this being published properly so I can buy it.
There is a great layered connection between the fantasy world and the Roomba. Much of the comedy is from the strange but kinda true relationships between their very different perspectives. It is sort of like 'reincarnated as a sword' if the sword were really a sword instead of a human. The Roomba's singular focus on cleaning sounds like it would be gimmicky and boring, but the story doesn't fizzle out and is able to really create some solid world building. I was hesitant to read this one and am glad I gave it a chance.
I wanted to like this- it seemed like a breath of fresh air. Well- for some it might be (from the other reveiews that seem to be the case)- but not for me. In fairness, I lost interest early- just seemed like too much work for no reward. I honestly only got to chapter 5. This means my review could actually be very wrong if it gets better- but unless someone tells me it does, (and why they think so)- I'm done 'following behind a Roomba'.
Style: I found the story to be a weird genre mix-up of (apparent (unexplained)) transmigrator fantasy into a (potentially?) Lit-RPG world where the 'system' gives fantasy or 'sci-fi' power-ups (curently uninvented Roomba features are 'sci-fi' to me). That 'seeming lack of focus' in itself suprisingly isn't the problem- not even the 'sci-fi and fantasy rarely mix well' hurdle poses much of a problem at this point-- but the 'written as cartoon' forced plot & humor dynamic which makes everyone around the MC a complete idiot doesn't really help the story.
Story: I often find stories like this are a bunch of (often) unrelated 'and then another thing happens' events barely strung together. This isn't one of those because there's so much 'string'. Plodding pacing. Too much reading 'details' while things don't happen. Please, something happen! Also, I'm not a Roomba. Though at first, being introduced to 'the mind and views of a Roomba' are neat- it get's tiring fast, as Roombas are uninteresting idiots. The story reveals plenty of questions, most of which will not be addressed. The 'meat' of the story seems to be the 'misunderstandings'- and those are 'because people are idiots that jump to ridiculous conclusions' (forced plotting/plot puppets).
Grammar: No problems, really. A few minor things not worth quibbling over.
Character: Needless to say, the MC gets no score (by design)- he's a clueless robot. Unfortunately, all the 'plot-puppet' characters who just exist to force the plot and create specific situations for the author get no score either. Everyone being 'idiots that jumps to convenient conlusions' doesn't help... I'm lost as to how this gets 5 stars anywhere.
* Interesting premise
* Solid writing skill
* Pace is insanely plodding.
* The comedy is very 'hit ot miss' (to me). It didn't do much for me, but I can see others might appreciate it more easily.
* MC is... seriously?- I'm supposed to care about this guy? Why?
* So much forced plot, plot armor, and characters who are just plot puppets. No one does anything remotely sensible, because 'humor' (I guess?).
* A valiant attempt to do yet another 'bet you would have never thought this could be an MC' fantasy story.
For me this doesn't work because it seems to think it's a cartoon. That in itself chouldn't be a problem, but in cartoons things happen... constantly- and in this... not so much so.
The crapload of things you're entirely not supposed to quention are also non-stop.
Gods are powerless to the MC's 'shutdown', but somehow wise in the way of futuristic upgrades? Say- aren't some of these upgrades hella powerful? Why? Oh- did we miss that during the 'shutdown'? Great 'not story-telling'. Wizards ALL are absolute cowards, and ignorant to the consept of 'scouting'? (at least in the days the story was forced to be a passive-aggresive 'misunderstanding'(confrontation) between a demon and another 'I'll just wait here till I die' extra). I won't even ask about all the imposed 'comedic' suffering. Not really 'funny' to me, but 'whatever'...
Even worse (to me) are the magical powerups that the MC gets for getting to levels 1 and 5. Putting aside that these are normally just increases in existing ability, OR (sometimes) a new skill- getting expanded or completly new mechanical aparatus... well, I kinda don't care, BUT being that he's in a mage.., something-- that's a 'missed opportunity' for a story segment where a blacksmith does surgery? I dunno. 'Here, cause you made level 5' works too I guess. Cuts out the middle-man. And motive. And reward for effort after realizing one'slimitations...
Ah, all that's 'story'. Let's talk about surfaces and spills for paragraphs instead because that's rivetting to other Roombas (which I am not one of)...
I'm not expecting the story to 'do this' just saying (by one example) 'shortcuts' are 'shortcuts'!
Anyway- hopefully it gets better depite my reservations
I may not have read all the chapters to date, but unless the author:
Started doing some proper character development
Abandoned forced plotting and determined some actual goals and motives. Maybe real obstacles? I dunno. If just 'cleaning' to level 1 can get you an offer of 'dimensional travel', I don't see any realistic effort/reward scenarios. (Yeah, I know it's supposed to be humor- but 'funny because he didn't take it' is less imporrtant than 'it was offered, though'). This is a writing 'style' that realy doesn't acknowledge the apparent genre.
Well, I really am only guessing what the author is 'trying to do' from the results. If this were a cartoon or movie where it could be visually 'sold'- then I can actually seing it work better- but just as a novel a lot of 'nuance' (that would be filled in by an actor or director) is missing.
That's how I see it anyway. There's a bunch more, but my point isn't that these are 'mistakes', so much as the balance for the story makes them unwieldly. Plot holes abound.
Please understand- I'm not saying this is bad- just that it needs editing, badly. I think with some cleanup (and a little enhancement) it would be impressive. I just can't follow what it is now without being dissatisfied.
Something this silly has no business being this much fun. The story of the little Roomba that could, and did, and the chaos that resulted from it.
First of all the story is brilliant. 66 chapters in, mostly set in one location, and not for one second has it felt boring or slow. The humour is light (don't expect side-splitting jokes here), but extremely well done, causing a smile almost every chapter. Progress is well paced, no chapters bogged down by endless exposition or tedious fight scenes, but no rushing through important dialogue or character development either. POV changes are relevent, often adding to the humour as we get to witness the misunderstandings that turn a simple robot into a world threatening catastrophy.
Characters (especially our MC) are good, with real character growth as their world changes. One problem i've witnessed all too often in these sort of stories is how easy it is for OP or apparently villainous MC's to simply become unlikable jerks as the story progresses, with the concept behind them being lost. Here - at least so far - the reverse is true, with our cheery little character becoming more likable even as he becomes more and more OP, causing all who oppose him - usually by accident - to fear him even more.
Really interested to se where this story goes.
I was not expecting it when a friend told me they were reading an Isekai about a Roomba, that it would be anything but a bit of a spoof story that I would enjoy for a chapter or two, then get bored as the same tropes get played out over and over... well dam I was not expecting a gripping story that I have been almost unable to stop reading for nearly three days straight.
The plot is delightful, and the fact that there is a plot, to begin with, is unbelievable. The storytelling is incredible, and I have come to deeply care about the main characters and the way the story is heading.
The Isekai style of the story is familiar to me as it is one of my go-to styles, even before I knew the term; however, having it be a Roomba added something very new, a being that, at least at the start, could not even begin to comprehend what power it had been given or what even was happening to it, was very different from the more normal humanoid going to another world (whether they stayed humanoid or not). This, combined with the understandable reaction the locals have, creates a very different tale to the standard Isekai.
While there are the occasional grammatical error and spelling mistakes, they do not break the flow of reading and have only ever had me stop once or twice as I found the sentence a little jarring.
I hope to find other great stories to tide me over until the next chapter is out.
Honestly, I went into this story with little to no expectations as a recommendation from the Rolling Stone story. My mind was blown when I realized how actually fantastic those story is and will continue to be. I definitely recommend it to everyone! Roomba stories werent something I knew I needed till finishing the current chapter.
It starts with a really interesting idea and it stays fresh for a few chapters, but it gets stale pretty quickly. The biggest problem for me is that nothing really happens, especially in the later chapters. If something interesting happens, it will drag and slow down until it feels like nothing is happening again.
The writing style doesn't really help. The author repeats words and sentence structure often, puts a full stop where a comma would be better and vice versa.
Some of the stylistic choices are full on grammar errors, too. At the beginning, I thought they were like that because it was narrated by the roomba, but this style prevails even in the POV of other characters.
Other than this, there are few problems with grammar, certainly not enough of them to make it unreadable. It's just the stylistic choices that border on grammar errors that made me lower the score.
I'll admit, I really like stories with non-sapient main characters and this one executes it especially well. You can very clearly feel the increasing intelligence of the MC and for me, it was a delight to read. The other main character is okay, but not quite good enough for me to give a full five stars. Even so, I absolutely adore the main character.
I tried to come up with something to say about the story, but then I realized there really isn't much of one. It's more of a string of unconnected events rather than a clear plot. At the beginning, it's carried by the momentum of the inciting incident, but after that the plot slows almost to a stop while the story marches on.
Overall, it's a fun idea that peters out pretty quickly because of slow pacing and strange stylistic choices. I recommend reading the first few chapters, if only because of the MC.