The Healing Thief

The Healing Thief

by Derejird

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

 

Many past choices ended up with what we have present. Some were important, some were trivial. And some were... just tragic. 

Who knows, maybe we do have some sort of past lives and we’re  just harvesting the karma we sowed.

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A sick lady with hazy eyes leaned her body to the man she loved. Sitting by his side, awaiting death.

She then eyed her arms and legs which already turned into wood. A sad curse.

No one knew why she had a sad smile on her. Or as to what she told her knight.

As only the Queen and the knight were there in that lonely wooden cabin. In the middle of an icy storm.

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A young girl with red hair, hiding behind a wooden door. Overhearing her sister's voice.

Jealousy was what she felt most.

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A gray haired boy sitting down on the cold cobbled ground. Having his hands soaked in blood as he stares onto the corpses.

He failed them by being too greedy. 

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Exchanges of sword clashes could be heard, before a badly beaten boy fell to the ground.

He was then told to get up or bare the daily consequences.

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A lady with golden eyes sat down as she wailed. She felt the sting of betrayal once more even though she was sure that it wouldn’t happen... at least from him.

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“So what? Those were people that would die either way! Why are you now ignoring me!” 

“I thought so much more from you... but I was wrong.”

 

 

 

A long journey to perfection. 

Turning an amateur novel into something... great. 

Follow the journey of countless characters with their intertwining predestined pathways.

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Table of Contents
68 Chapters
Chapter Name Release Date
Book 1: Chapter 1, Princess Xiao Lihua ago
Book 1: Chapter 2, Decision ago
Book 1: Chapter 3, Forest ago
Book 1: Chapter 4, Lou Jun ago
Book 1: Chapter 5, Another Day ago
Book 1: Chapter 6, Truth ago
Book 1: Chapter 7, Development? ago
Book 1: Chapter 8, The Continent ago
Book 1: Chapter 9, Reason ago
Book 1: Chapter 10, Qi Huai ago
Book 1: Side stories (1) ago
Book 1: Chapter 11, Zhou Huan's Adventure ago
Book 1: Chapter 12, Foundation ago
Book 1: Chapter 13, Depth ago
Book 1: Chapter 14, Gin Fe ago
Book 1: Chapter 15, Unleash ago
Book 1: Chapter 16, Auction ago
Book 1: Chapter 17, Question ago
Book 1: Chapter 18, Warning ago
Book 1: Chapter 19, Understanding ago
Book 1: Chapter 20, Mistake ago
Book 1: Chapter 21, Pain ago
Book 1: Chapter 22, Another Day ago
Book 1: Chapter 23, Day before Slaughter ago
Book 1: Chapter 24, Knight ago
Book 1: Chapter 25, Knight vs Cultivator ago
Book 1: Chapter 26, It's but an Illusion ago
Book 1: Chapter 27, Inscriptions! ago
Book 1: Chapter 28, Preparation (1) ago
Book 1: Chapter 29, Preparation (2) ago
Book 1: Chapter 30, Matters at hand ago
Glossary ago
Book 1: Chapter 31, A calm pink day ago
Book 1: Chapter 32, Not Just A Knight ago
Book 1: Chapter 33, Wonders ago
Book 1: Chapter 34, Undermining the opponent ago
Book 1: Chapter 35, Prelude to a storm ago
Book 1: Chapter 36, Floating Islands ago
Book 1: Chapter 37, Aptitude ago
Book 1: Chapter 38, Starting of a legend ago
Book 1: Chapter 39, Part 1, Face Off (Tengfei POV) ago
Book 1: Chapter 39, Part 2, Surprise ago
Book 1: Chapter 40, Converse ago
Book 1: Side stories (2) ago
Book 1: Chapter 41, Vermilion ago
Book 1: Chapter 42, A Visitor ago
Book 1: Chapter 43, Fawn ago
Book 1: Chapter 44, Before darkness ago
Book 1: Chapter 45, Unexpected ago
Book 1: Chapter 46, Peace ago
Book 1: Chapter 47, Different views ago
Book 1: Chapter 48, Pent-up ago
Book 1: Chapter 49, Message ago
Book 1: Chapter 50, Last day at Teisu ago
Lihua and Tengfei reviewing Book One + Afterwards ago
Forcedius (1) ago
Forcedius (2) ago
Forcedius (3) ago
Forcedius (4) ago
Forcedius (5) ago
Forcedius (6) ago
Forcedius (7) ago
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Forcedius(End) ago
Book 2: Side Story 1 (Lou Jun) ago
Book 2: Prologue (First Half) ago

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Folkensedai
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nice romance and fun banters

this is a nice wuxia romance story featuring two tsundere, a Don Juan and an ice queen as main characters.

i especially love the first couple's banter : it's fun and cute to read. for me, it's the selling point of this story.

please keep up the good work !

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Hello, this is part of a review swap, okay to start it off I read several chapters in and noticed a few prevalent things throughout.

The grammar was overall good not too many mistakes, but there are irregular font and size changes that threw me off, I don't know if it was intended or not but it seemed to be not. Keep in mind author, and future readers, that this isn't my kind of story but if you interested in this type of genre it may be for you.

Now on to the thing I noticed.

Show not tell.

"Even though he hates, and I mean really hate making tea, that's something he couldn’t help but be forced to swallow.

He's the type that would mix poison with aphrodisiac in drinks to cause grievance to the one he hates but he couldn't obviously due to how it's quite likely he'll be accused to be the one. " Here show us that he hated making tea, maybe a grimace or something, also explaining characters vs showing us what his character is may be better because this just came off as flat and didn't feel as genuine.

Overall keep working on it!