In A Parallel World With Random Skills, I Reluctantly Become A Mafia Boss?
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Too soon to see where the story will end up yet, but I like what's there so far. I'm especially grateful that the author doesn't lazily use brackets, parenthesis, or a chatroom style (e.g. Kyou: Hello world.) to denote who is speaking in his dialogue. The reader can easily pick out which character is speaking in this story from the context if it isn't stated by the narrator.
One nitpick I have is that when archaic English is used by the NPCs, spell incantations, and System popups it isn't too consistent and doesn't mesh well with the modern English that usually surrounds it.
As for Chacterization, there's only one main character so far, and most of the other minor characters that have shown up have all died off, although they do die spectacularly and in ways that progresses the plot. I have high hopes for his companions when they are fleshed out, but 6.5 has confused my take on the personality of his "Angel."
I did enjoy the April Fools prank even though I fell for it until the end.
I am loving your story and it very different from others
The story premise is interesting, the main character is a weak by day, strong by night character that you might love. The grammar is easy to read and the style of writing is to my tastes. Hoping for more chapters in the future.
Despite what the star count would leave you to believe, this story is very good. There are no major grammar problems and the story hints at a huge world to explore with his story. Perhaps people have a problem with his OP build. However, this is a slightly foolish concern. Due to his general lack of understanding he is actually quite vulnerable for a large period of time. Once he starts exploring the world more, I bet there are plenty of powerful beings who could take him on, perhaps even in the night when he is at the peak of his powers. Plus having an OP character can lead to tons of funny situations. Give the story a break as I am betting that we are still in the begging phases of this story.
Really, I had begun to suffer dizzy spells at chapter 6.
MC personality is bad, really bad, annoying, and unlikeable, plus with his OP yet not OP ability.
God preserve us.
i like it. Keep up the good work.
The story had potential, but it was ruined in my opinion by a severely flawed MC using lazy plot devices. Either decide whether you want the MC to be OP or not. Do not just arbitrarily decide he won't be OP just to draw out an encounter for no good reason. Also there are several confusing and poorly delineated jumps in the story/perspective. The story's premise as a whole was good, but planning and execution was inadequate in my opinion.
Your story is a very great one just that the writer ruins it. Or rather the 'translator' ruins it. You obviously know how to write in English. Then why write like the actions you ae trying to express dint exist in the BLOODY LANGUAGE YOU'RE THINKING IN.
Its basically a loser who gets transported to a different world, gets an op skill instantly, kills a god instantly and pumps his fist into the air like some idiotic childrens movie. Would have been a much better story if it was darker withought that useless comedy. Also considering that the story takes its names from greek mythology and other mythologies from europe, why add the sama? Its stupid and annoying.