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Tragedy had reduced James to a nobody. Washed up and homeless in NYC, he thought his life was over.
Then a message appeared in his vision:
60,000 year countdown has ended
Nemesis 1 released
As the world falls apart, as billions die, as society collapses and all hope seems lost, James discovers a powerful truth: he was wrong to think himself a nobody.
With the dawn of the Void, he'll become the most important person to have ever lived.
Release Schedule: 5 Chapters a week; Mon-Fri.
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I like a lot about this story. I like the world building. I like the main two characters.
I hated the pacing and the way the characters were inconsistently written.
The main dude is a heavily damaged homeless guy unable to function in society. I had to quit when the story turned into a management story where MC reads like a normal, highly competant, cool leadership guy. It just doesn't work. The first ten chapters of the story are just lies based on the following chapters and the cool damaged characters we met in the beginning just get erased later.
Pacing: The story is supposed to be about the frantic adjustment to the end of the world. The pacing feels like a sedate slice of life story. The whole thing should have been sped up drastically. When there is no time to steal a golf club out of a ransacked apartment then there is no time to sit around saying "Thank you" for scones.
My recommendation for the author would be to republish the story with the character identity and internal pacing fixed. Either make the character a cool leadership dude (boring MC) from the start and focus on the boring management stuff or take a page from Zogarth and Rhagar and focus on the progression of the Main Characters. Serenity needs some love man.
This story has potential but it will get choked out by its own internal inconsistency and exhausting pacing. This can be fixed and better now than later when it goes on hiatus at chapter 109.
I love this. Its a gritty realistic story. The reactions of everyone, from the MCs to bystanders to the government looks just right.
The fight scenes are very good so far. Very realistic. I enjoy the mc. He is acting consistently so far.
I like the little twist of having the apocalypse not start for everyone all at once. Having it be staggered isnt something ive seen before.
I would like to see whats going on in the rest of the world though. Thats a little thing for me, and isnt enough to take away any ☆.
Very much recommend
Being woken upfront his cold sleep on a bench in the subway system by a glowing message hovering in front of his eyes James Kelly was just hoping to get some sleep. Instead James is going to be attacked by a monster that he wishes was just a nightmare. Instead it is a Nemesis and his fog of sleep may just cost him everything.
Survival may just be about navigating this new Nemesis system of monsters appearing all over the world, and helping others in his downtrodden part of New York that may just become a slaughterhouse.
The story, grammar, and characters are awesome and feel like the kind of survivor you may actually see in something like this. The reactions of the news and government is also spot on and really grounds the tone of the story. The Nickname James gets is great as well and is absolutely something you would find on the internet.
This is an early review because I do like the gritty new world and the awesome characters that feel like fully realized people that have flaws and are not hidden masters or kids that just happen to have a their parents collection of medieval armor and weapons to help them through this.
I will update at various times as I feel are needed.
Overall, this is a really good read, interesting take on a genre that got so cliche they could practically be considered tumblr posts.
The characters and plot are well put together, an eclectic mix of different types of characters, a plot that's interesting and engaging.
The problem arises a little over chapter 30, the pacing drops drastically, it's almost glacially slow. It's all exposition and introspection, over and over and over and it accomplishes very little as far as plot progression, world development or character development. It's just there to be there and it fills remarkably like filler. I'd read five chapters, then go back and skim/skip huge chunks and I missed nothing.
As a whole this is great work, it falls into common traps of telling and not showing, plot quicksand and overly explaining character traits, but compared to other stories here it handles it better.
Tried this because I really like Skaldi's Saga.
This work is excellent, one of my favorites on royal road but I prefer Skaldi's Saga.
Starting with a homeless guy was a interesting idea. My favorite character is the mayor assistant.
I'd like to see more on how the characters relationships become more intimate.
The pacing to date has been fine and given a us a insight into the characters.
Yes, with the hard deadline imposed by the opening of the pits. The characters have a reason not to focus on this...
Anyway loving the story more please!
Good enough to pay for the patreon. That is pretty much my standard. Intersting stories are followed, but great stories, and their author deserves support. I'm in a position to do that, so I will. Typing this mostly to meet the 50 word requirement. Which is kinda stupid, but understandable.
I appreciate that the hero in this is flawed but not broken. I think that probably fits many of us right now.
I think that the writer's got a good talent for creating characters with real depth versus a Mary Sue With Incredible Luck, and I'm really curious as to where this goes.
Plus, I'm a sucker for a good apocalypse.
Loving it so far. Non OP mc but still kicking ass. Great story and character development. I especially enjoy how it's all realistic, useless politicians and arrogant military just like real life
If you're a fan of shadow sun by Dave willmarth I think you'll enjoy this. Have a crack at it anyway, you won't regret it.
Five stars on all fronts. Characters are solid and realistically written. The story is still very early, but so far the character arcs seem well thought out. No harems or smut, which is a plus in my opinion as that's usually a crutch or the main focus.
So far only one main POV, helps keep the story grounded and flowing smoothly in my opinion, although I wouldn't mind seeing other POVs to expand the global setting.
Setting is very well thought out and highly detailed. Story takes into account government and military action in such a setting, without diving in too deep into either territory. Just the right amount to make the story realistic without turning it into a military fiction.
Fight scenes are intense and put you in the action. Monsters are original creations, can't wait to find out what new types of Nemesis the author creates.
The System is unlike most others I've read in other LitRPGs. Very unique with various religious themes.
It's great to see an apocalypse series that starts right at the beginning and takes you through everything. We see it all. No timeskips with 90% of the world already dead.
Grammar is great. No major typos to my eye.
Overall a fantastic and extremely entertaining read. Give this a shot if you're looking to scratch that apocalypse or litrpg itch.
Honestly I love the Story so far. One of the only draw backs is it feels both rushed and slow at the same time. The characters feel well fleshed out and nice interactions between tech and magic. There are some wierd Power spikes but its not unreasonable. 4/5 just because of minor issues