Voidwalker - A LitRPG Progression

I've enjoyed this one quite a bit even though it needs polish.

Earth undergoes an AI apocalypse. Out of the ashes of conflict, the AI overlord Ani takes over the world but decides to rule it as a benevolent dictator, turning the world into a kind of utopia where work is voluntary and everyone's needs are taken care of.

Fully immersive VR video games are huge in this new society. In the story, these games are so realistic to be indistinguishable from reality, so being a master assassin in VR makes one a master assassin in the real world, for instance.

The MC and other #1 players in different games are selected by Ani to enter cryo and make a 120 year journey to a just-discovered world that has human life. When they get there, things go haywire and the MC is teleported to a pocket dimension. He realizes immediately that this newly-discovered planet is suffused with essence that allows people to cultivate / learn magic (Ani represents everything like a litrpg with stats and levels). Since the MC loves grinding to get stronger and being the best, pushing his limits, this is awesome news. He's no longer bound by the limitations of the human body! Thus begins the MC's journey in a new world!

The MC is famous for his skills as a rogue / assassin. He's already done brutal things in real life in the interim between the AI apocalypse destroying society and Ani taking over. But the vast majority of all the people he's ever killed are all just virtual avatars in VR. I think the author does a good job of showing the MC not wanting to kill but also being willing to do it if necessary. He's not some assassin murder hobo who kills people left and right, and he's also not a novice who's terrified of killing someone in the real world for the first time. It's a good balance.

He's also OP, which is nice. He's behind the curve on cultivating his magic and levels, but his skills are top notch and he punches well above his level.

The main issue is the polish. Some scenes are executed awkwardly, or a big event might happen but it's only given a sentence in the middle of a fat paragraph and my eyes glaze over it. Some of the character interactions can be a little odd. But with a good edit I think all these issues would be resolved.

The beginning is by far the roughest part. By chapter 10 the writing is already a lot better.

Recommended!

Caged Worlds: Breakout is a great read. I've enjoyed the character development, and the lore immensely. There are a few spelling/gramatical errors, but they are rapidly being fixed, and if you can look past that you're in for one hell of a story. I can't wait to see how far this goes and I'm avidly looking forward to more from this author.

Great work, Sorits.

Your fan,

Dickfingers.

The story is a mixed bag between cultivation and litRpg, though more litRpg.

The MC is at least superficially, the typical Archetype of an overwhelmingly powerful and competent Hero. The magic skills he‘s getting are just absorbed into his abilities, nearly without problems. If he wouldn‘t have deep psychological wounds that make him seem human, he wouldn‘t be very interesting.

I hope that the author will let the MC grow with his tasks, in the future.

Meaning to let him make some costly errors or a repeat of errors he made in the past, for example. Like Candace only more personal and long lasting.

What‘s positive with the story, is:

The lighthearted way it is told though the topic may be serious sometimes.

The deep insight into the character of the MC and other characters, the author is giving us.

The world—building.

All in all, it’s a story worth reading. Full of potential, already fulfilled and prospective.

Also some fireballs would be nice! 😉

A beautiful story with a wonderful balance between the journey, the development of skills, the relationships between the characters and the fighting moments.

A bonus for the story is the harmony maintained between physical combat, magical abilities and the help of artificial intelligence, each aspect having its importance in the character's journey.

I had to struggle to go to sleep or work the next day since I would have preferred reading this. Definitely kept my attention and can't wait for more. Great grammar, I found no mistakes throughout the whole thing which is super amazing. Amazing world building by the author! Thank you.

Brings up some interesting what-ifs regarding AIs and the purpose of living. Explores some dark content and the MC definitely has mental trauma issues to work through. Doesn't rub your face in his misery, but doesn't shy away from the memories at a high level with a few very dark recollections of when he was a child (violence only). I really enjoy the pace of development and how he interacts with his skills. Steers clear of murder hobo territory and aims instead for well adjusted professional / top tier assassin. The system and numbers are all kept to a reasonable level and don't take away from the story. Highly recommended!

I like the concept, but the execution is killing me...

Firstly, the random scatterbrained uses of different tenses in the same sentences are extremely jarring.

Second, there are constant logic jumps made by the mc with nigh zero explanations behind them.

I saw a review saying that the writing gets better around chap 15, buuuuttt i just cant do it, lol. 

Author has made a nice little mash up of ideas and mediums. It could benefit from a strong edit for clarity and some grammar issues. Doesn't knock you from the moment, but it does add up a bit.

Ideas have potential, but it needs a few more chapters to flush itself out to see where its going. AI seems to just be a voiced, automated system screen atm so not quite sold on that part yet.

Story leans towards Xianxia types so i'll probably stop here. Good luck on your journey Author!

i like it because power scaling is nice and it is very fun to read I like it and the the story is also good and I like the main characters personality and the unique combination of different types of story fused together in this story so I would like to give this story five stars as I very much like this story

A good read some minor spelling and grammar errors but who cares about those if the story is as good as this one.                  The characters are believable without  being too over the top and the progression is fast if not maybe a little to fast but this does not take away from the fact this is a good read.