Ode to Fallen Angels

Ode to Fallen Angels

by OrlonDogmann

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  • Traumatising content

Jericho, the land of humanity, squirms in pain. Magic has been forbidden for so long in this so called "Age of Silence", that all Arcane knowledge has been presumed lost and irrecoverable, and the echoes of God's Will grow fainter with every passing year.

The sight of Demihuman caravans is less frecquent every day, as the likes of orcs and elves have learned to no longer beg for help from those who despise them. Clearly, they can expect more from the voracious wild lands than from humankind.

Many have succumbed to dispair, some driven mad by their fruitless efforts to bring back a Golden Age that they only ever read about in books.

And in the middle of it all, in an old chapel lost in the Eastern lands, young Gabrielle lives ignorant of it all. For she is just another orphan living under the mercy of the Church of the Saints; one bearing the mark of evil in her red hair, the telltale sign of a Witch.

In an Age of the Silent, the Prejudiced, and the Hateful, she merely clings to a single hope: that one day, be it in life or maybe after it all ends, she may find herself forgiven of her sin. 

The sin of being born.

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JEPayne
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Wow! This story is something else entirely! One of the most professional and engaging stories I've found on Royal Road. The full picture of the story is not immediately evident at the outset, being fed in penny packets of information and contextual world building to maintain the building tension and mystery, while providing an absolute tragedy of a character to follow through her harsh existence. Not for the faint of heart! But definitely worth the read.

Style - excellent. The prose is almost poetic at times, with vivid, surreal physical descriptions when needed and a subtle but clear authorial voice the rest of the time that perfectly complements the dark tone of the story. You feel for Gabi in a visceral way that is uncommon for rr.

Story - full marks. I see the story as being in two parts, the first getting to know and understand Gabi's plight, the second the growing mystery behind the state of the world and the role Gabi and the chapel play in it. Its engaging from the first paragraph and I couldn't bring myself to stop reading.

Grammar - excellent quality, a very small number of very minor issues but nothing to detract from reading the story at all.

Character - oh Gabi. Poor, poor Gabi. I won't lie, at times this was difficult to read because of what Gabi has had to go through, and her naive acceptance of abuse and her lot in life. An absolute master-class in character, even if I wish Dog had maybe given me a little bit more to be happy about when reading! The supporting cast all feel like they fulfill a critical function in the story, but beyond that they feel complex and real rather than being vehicles for exposition, no matter how short their time on screen.

Favourited and followed and I recommend everyone does the same.

HWPerfidy
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Story: The story follows Gabi, a girl shunned for being a witch at the Church. Some dark and sinister things are happening at this Church, and the mystery is unveiled bit by bit with every chapter. I haven’t read this type of story in quite a long while, making it a refreshing change of pace.

The worldbuilding is pretty good, giving us little hints now and then as to what happened and what the world is like, but never so much that it bogs the prose down.

Style: The style flows well and is comfortable to read. All the descriptions make it easy to picture what’s happening. The POV switches get a bit fast and frequent in the Thief chapter, but doesn’t make it confusing. Gabi’s POV tends to go off on tangents, but I assume that’s because of her personality rather than the author.

Character: Gabi is a bit dense, but in the endearing way. Reading from her point of view was a joy. Though the way she meanders in her thoughts gets a bit old at times, though that’s a characteristic of her personality that I appreciate.

The other characters are similarly interesting to read about. Their personalities are present throughout the prose and their dialogue, making it easy to tell who’s who.

Grammar: A few mistakes but nothing that affects the flow of the story

Overall: I loved it. My only suggestion is that the chapter titles are all labelled “prologue of [something]”, which may cause misunderstandings, since from what I know, RR readers get turned off by prologues.

CKJ5
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The Saints and the Angels

Reviewed at: Prologue of Mockery


Story 5/5: Ode to Fallen Angels is an amazing tale that follows Gabrielle, a disgraced girl in the church. There seems to be much more behind the scenes at the church. There is so much mystery and intrigue to the story it is hard to put down once you start it.

Style 5/5: The writing style is detailed and works very well for the setting. The thing the author does superbly is the pacing. Each chapter gives us a little clearer picture of what is happening. From what I have read, nothing feels wasted. Every chapter feels to have weight and meaning.

Grammar 5/5: Everything looked spot on to me. Once I started enjoying the story, I put looking for mistakes out of my mind and just enjoyed the ride.

Character 5/5:  The MC, Gabrielle or Gabi, is a great character. Once you get inside her head, you can feel her inexperience with the real world, making her blind faith realistic. The supporting cast is well-written, have distinct voices, and is not just set pieces.

Overall 5/5: Ode to Fallen Angels is a brilliant read. I appreciated everything in this story, from the concept (I am a sucker for a good church/religion story), the pacing, and the characters. I would suggest this to anyone looking for a meaty story.

TealiciousTea
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Different, worth a shot for yourself to see what is inside. 

On one hand, we face the funny events of child and elf and on the other we have hints of darker world. It is an interesting piece. Well written and engaging. Style and grammar are good. Perhaps for some it may be a bit too descriptive but that is personal preference and it worked for me. The characters are compelling and complex. Overall, a job well done. 

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End result looks promising

Reviewed at: Prologue of Whispers

Style- Honestly, I found myself skipping over the paragraphs filled with heavy description. I feel the description drags on. Personally, I don't like lots of description packed into a paragraph but I know others do, it's a matter of preference. The parts of the description I read were well written. 3.5 stars.

Story- From what I've interpreted, this girl has been sacrificed and is trapped in another world with elves and other beings. It's seems intrgeging but I'm not sure if I've got the right idea, it needs to be explained better. Although, I like the sense of mystery it gives. 3.5 stars.

Grammer- Nothing bad from what I could see. 5 stars.

Character- Honestly, one of the best parts to this story are the characters. Gabi is well written although they could do with more description. Their personality is fairly clear. I do wish you described the elves more, accept from that, I find them very intriguing. 4.5 stars.

Overall- Very interesting! Has a bit of room for improvement but is very good so far. I would focus on finishing your story before going back and editing. I feel the end product of this story will be good, although it's not my cup of tea because of the genre and writers style, although I know others will enjoy. 4.5 stars.

 

Ellen Taylor
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This was a great read! 

The style was great. I honestly had no issues with it. It did mind hop around a bit, but I was never confused by what POV I was in, nor was I confused as to what was going on. It was clear, and the descriptions were lovely. It helped build an interesting and facinating world.

I never know what to say with grammar. Nothing stuck out to me, and I was never pulled out of the story by weird spelling or wrong punctuation. It was great. 

The story was magnificent. I loved the idea of fantasy and magic starting to die out. There seemed to be a rich world right out of reach of our MC, which already starts the tension and the beautiful build up. And gives such an empathetic pull with Gabi. 

Speaking of Gabi, the characters were wonderful. As I said before, Gabi had my sympathy right from the get go. It was absolutely incredible (in a sad way) to see what she was going through, and to have it filtered through her POV to see the kind of abuse she suffered and the way she lives through it and makes excuses. It is believable in the saddest way. 

Overall, it is a wonderful read. I enjoyed the change of pace of a low fantasy story. Like I said before, the dying out of magic with the hint of it coming back is a favorite of mine, and I quite enjoyed what I've read of this story.