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[You are not the hero. You are the System that will enable him.]
Parker wakes up with the ability to control magic, a conspicuous lack of a body, and a whole lot of blue boxes. After being informed that a new hero--[Godkiller] Jerome Smith--is set on a path to fight the opposing System's Eternal King, Parker is forced to attach to the hero's body as his brand new System.
With status screens being the only way to communicate as they navigate this perplexing Continent, Parker and Jerome will have to learn to level, progress, and ultimately triumph.
Now, if only Parker can get Jerome to stop treating this like a video game...
System Error is complete.
Author's note: This fiction has a very unique style. It will be told this way throughout the entire fiction. Reading the first chapter will reveal what this unique style is.
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System Error. A perfect example of taking a meme and making it so much more.
If you enjoy alternative storytelling methods done well or just like blue boxes, this story's for you.
Style: This earns extra stars for how well if keeps to the premise. The blue boxes aren't just there, they're an intrinsic part of the storytelling method. And if you read the author's notes, you'll see they bring more than their fair share of headaches.
Grammar: This story has a few little grammar oddities, though most of it is pretty good. Not quite perfect is enough for me to knock a half-star off, but not enough to ruin my enjoyment.
Story: The weakest part, is definitely the story. It's not terrible, but there are several small moments that don't keep with the pace of the story around them. That said, all of this is overshadowed by the excellent conclusion. A thing we don't get to see on RR often enough. I think if you stick around, you'll find your patience rewarded.
Character: The main character is great. They have lots of personality, and are easy to relate with. Several of the other characters are... harder to get involved with, though this is partially because of the medium through which the story is told. It's tough getting involved with someone when you only hear about them through notifications in the mc's head. This gets better pretty quickly, as the MC learns how to experience the world around them.
All in all, a solid 5 star experience. If you're finding this on the completed list, where the author should totally have moved it by now, then know...
This story is mightier than the meme.
Imagine a standard isekai story. Now instead of the perspective of the Hero or a member of his harem you get the perspective of the system that has to deal with the Hero's bullshit.
Parker Wu is the best MC material. The fact that he narrates the story means that we see the full scope of the System's powers and how the System is doing all the legwork while the Hero gets all the credit. Turns out friendship and determination wasn't what killed the big bad - it was the System pulling the strings to keep the Hero alive.
Grammar is fine, and although I've seen some people correcting author's word choice in the comments it's mostly small stuff that don't ruin the flow of the story.
Characters are well written and despite hitting all the isekai story stereotypes the new perspective means nothing feels repetitive, and fleshing out the Hero's personality so they aren't just an everyman is nice too.
Story pacing is weird. It took 20 something chapters to go through day one. A lot of important stuff is happening- yes, but feels like author could've split day one into a week and it would've been better. rn the Hero is literally walking out of one confrontation and right into another.
Took off one point on style because the blue boxes really gets annoying after a bit. (like seriously please remove some of the less-important system updates. I hate scrolling past a whole page of hit-confirmations)
So, hmm, you've probably read atleast one litrpg if you're on royal road, if not more. People generally have mixed opinions about popular litrpg, but usually have one or two that they really like.
This story flips that on its head. The closest genre I've seen to it would be a dungeon core story, designed for hardcore litrpg fans. This story only has blue boxes, there is no normal dialogue, hell even the author telling you to follow is in a blue box.
I respect the determination. It's not a story for everyone, but I have a feeling that those who have been patrolling the lands of royal road, moving from one litrpg to the next, will really find this enjoyable and unique read.
Seriously, nothing like this exists out there. Not even close.
I see this story as a mix between those who like dungeon core stories, like litrpg or especially, those who write both. The grammar is good, no problems in sentence construction, and the system mechanics are intriguing.
I am really curious what the landscape of this story will look like a hundred chapters from now, and that alone is worth a read.
The rise of the blue boxes is coming, and neither you nor I can stop it.
Story rating: Based/10
A rare example of a story that is actually finished!
The premise seems like it was put together as a joke, but surprisingly it works.
This is the most LitRPG story you will get read. If you need more blue boxes in your life, then this story is the cure you need.
Our MC finds himself isekaied into another world, except he doesn’t arrive in his own body.
He is reincarnated into a system which is attached to another reincarnator. The only way he can communicate is through system messages and he has to figure out how to do everything
This was a fun popcorn flick, with decent characters and a plot with decent progression. Even though the whole story is told through blue boxes, the story is not as crunchy as you might assume.
I enjoyed this story and maybe you will too.
The introduction was a bit jarring but I think it does a great job of showing Parker's struggles with the newness in a good way.
loving the character development and the way that at times Parker feels omniscient and other times stupid as Jerome. Would recommend to many readers.
Yes, I'm aware the story is composed entirely of blue boxes. I'm also aware a lot of other reviews on here are satirical. But there is a story there, if you can get past the formatting enough to read it - and it's a honestly a pretty good one. Parker and Jerome are both great characters with distinct personalities and voices. All the best moments are filtered through the lens of the incredibly sassy MC, who provides great contrast with the rather more... uh... games-oriented secondary MC, shall we say.
They do really feel like people from this world and culture, which is great. There are absolutely strong elements of satire and comedy here, but it's not the entirety of the story. I say give this story a chance, and pay attention to the characters, because you'll fall in love with them quite quickly. So, getting into it:
Everything being blue boxes is obviously the joke that's sort of the central premise of the story, but beyond that, the actual writing for the characters are excellent. The style here is essentially the character voices, so it coincides with the character score a bit? Half a point off because the table format makes it a bit unclear which character is speaking/writing the blue box.
Again, satirical nature aside, there's a lot of implications about the true nature of the story. The full picture isn't exactly clear yet, but what's there is enough for me to be sure this isn't just a story making fun of boxes; it does have a plot, we're just still in the early stages of it.
I have no issues with the grammar.
I've said it before, but the characters are where this story shines. If you read it, read it with the intent to care about the characters it's presenting to you. The entire premise is pretty much carried by Parker's excellent voice and overall sass.
This is it, this is the peak of Royal Road. The utmost pinnacle any story could dream of reaching. This is a story ENTIRELY made up of system messages, status updates, and anything else that fits into a table. Despite the popularity of the LitRPG genre, a story from a system's point of view hasn't really existed, until now, so I'm going to buckle up and expect the unexpected.
Also, creating this must take forever, the constant formatting would definately get on my nerves, so I have to offer commendation to the author for all this extra work.
I don't review 1/10th of the stories I read, but I usually make an effort for a completed one. This was a solid, engaging story with a clear beginning, end, and progression. Might take a little adaptation on the reader's side, but definitely worth the read. Looking forward to more by this author!
Obligatory: Read up to current(though there is more on patreon) 19.
Style: I was leery about something that was so box heavy just because muh eyeballs but it wasn't actually bad, and like most gamers after learning the formatting they become pretty easy to start skimming over with minimal effort. Excellent tagging of the boxes in regards to who is speaking/thinking. Found them very enjoyable after a chapter or two.
Story: I don't spoiler in talking about actual content when I review. There are relatable and familiar plot tropes and neat new takes on old themes. Pacing is pretty well done, except for the power gamer in me that wants the author to stop sleeping and just start dropping chapters; a feeling that I usually relate to being a 'good thing' about how my enjoyment of the story progresses. If you are a fan of RPG's, JRPG's, or even Bethesda games like Elder Scrolls then the system is going to seem pretty fun.
Grammar Score: Haven't noticed any problems with any immersion breaking errors or inconsistencies. No truly wild stretches of vocabulary, but given where the story is it would be weirder to me if the author broke out a thesaurus. Very good.
Character: I wanted to hate the... I don't know what to call him. ONE of the leads. He grows on you, though, like fungus. The <HIDDEN> MC is fantastic, and the support characters and their sort of resigned attitude toward helping the leads is quite charming and refreshing.
The shameful use of 'poggers' and how it felt 'okay' with how it is written deserves a special call out. Makes me want to subtract points from MYSELF.
I think most people will enjoy this. Well done.
I have been a reader of this novel for a while and now to see it finally finish, it is awesome to see. The final chapters were amazing and the buildup was awesome and well done. I cannot recommend this story more and will be sending links to it to friends of mine as well to read.
Thank you Slifer274, I wonder what you'll do next.