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This progression fantasy LitRPG features Shane, a game developer, who finds himself reborn into the world he helped create. As he explores the game, he discovers that the AI Director, which he also made, controls many of the game's systems. Shane must navigate the game's challenges and unravel the mystery behind the AI Director's actions while uncovering the truth about his own identity.
Shane Carther works as a developer for an ambitious new AAA game. The game, Endless Veil is an open-world RPG with contextual quests and endless procedural generation powered by an AI Director of Shane's own making.
The game world is populated by random events, dungeons, NPC outposts, portals, boss fights, wandering merchants, and more. Through machine learning, all of these encounters have context and backstory.
Right before the game's launch, Shane wakes up inside his own game. At first, this looks like a blessing as Shane has a robust custom class that gives him many more opportunities than usual to acquire power—and exciting loot.
Shane quickly learns that life in his game's world is authentic and deadly. Even though he respawns endlessly after dying, there are fates worse than death and rebirth.
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A.T. Oliver writes a story of a man who created the virtual world he was later transported into. He must adapt and use his prior knowledge to survive the dangerous world, all the while dealing with the usual troubles one has when transported into a virtual world. What might those be? Well, Levels, skills, feats, quests, you name it!
What I really enjoy about this story is the number of details the LitRPG system brings to the reader. It really feels like the author has a passion and a background of gaming or reading LitRPG's which makes me excited about what comes next.
The story is slightly typical but very engaging and exciting. It gives you a familiarity that lets you know you're in good hands and the trip will be worthwhile. Shane goes through
As for Shane himself, the MC, he comes across as a loner but someone who can be rooted for. Seeing him struggle and improve gradually and slowly allows the reader to build a personal relationship with the MC that is very rare in most LitRPG's. He is very well fleshed out and written making it a joy to go through what he goes through together.
The story also has great style as well. Although it doesn't get out of the box that is LitRPG, it only improves it and doubles down, making it one of the better stories on RR to read.
Grammer is great. Well Edited. No complaints here!
Overall it is a great story if you enjoy the LitRPG genre and a must-read if you enjoy good storytelling!
The writer is trying to lure you into his world, and establishing it through a creator of the game he is isekai'ed in.
I'm not a huge fan of the style of writing, as there seems to be a lot of telling and little of the telling part that is frequently given advice to writers here.
The writing is pretty jarring sometimes, with the grammar being awkward, and it feels as if the sentences are juggled around to NOT work.
The styling is very good, if you disavow the grammar. I see a lot of potential here.
The story and system are pretty cool though, not gonna lie. As the feats and traits evolve, I see tremendous amounts of potential. As is, that is the absolute best part of this fiction.
I suggest to the author that he gets some grammatical lessons, some writing advice from fellow writers of this website and looks up the common made mistakes of starting authors.
For me personally, the main character of the fiction seems pretty chill. He is wonky in his zero to 100 attitude of becoming feisty and laidback at the same time though. I suggest the wheel of emotions to the writer for shifting through a small to a big emotion though. It would reduce the wonkiness, lol.
Overall this fiction is not really for me, but I can definitely see how other people could enjoy it. I am going to keep reading, even if it is just for the upgrades and the dopamine that releases when I see them.
Right of the bat, I want to say that I was greatly hooked right from the prologue. The prologue leaves alot of question that need to be answered and if you're like me, who likes mysteries in novels you will certainly find this worth to read.
The LitRPG system is well done and the Mc's personality personality is certainly interesting. As for the grammar, the story is well edited and I didn't find any mistakes.
Certainly worth the read.
Full disclosure: Gamelit is not my cup of tea and all those trappings only take me out of the story I am reading.
That being said, this was easy and fun to read. The prose flows easily and the pictures the author pains with words are clear in my mind. Often I found myself wishing this wasn't game lit because I quite enjoyed the authors ideas and the lead's, Shane, characterization.
The first 3 chapters are a bit confusing but the ship rights itself nicely. If you're a fan of this genre, you'd do yourself a disservice to miss this.
From what I can tell in my reading so far of this series I can tell it's a good popcorn read. Something to sit down with and just pass the time away with. Though the short chapters do mean I should probably read more to get a better grasp on the series.
I don't have any particular strong feelings about this series however and LitRPGs are not my cup of tea personally.
So far I've read up to chapter 7 and I can definitely say the story has pulled me in. Obviously the basic plot has familiar isekai tropes and honestly reminds me of animes like SAO or Log Horizon. The world seems interesting, and the exposition is very well written even though I'm usually not a fan of walls of text. The character so far doesn't have much of a personality beside just being an AI game developer, but the story is young at the point I've read up to. One thing I personally don't like that many people actually may be fine with is the break in the story that takes you back in time. That always irritates me in shows and stories and that's no different now, but honestly that doesn't reflect bad story telling, just a trope that I'm personally not a fan of. All that being said, I am looking forward to diving more into this story and following a (hopefully) developing main character.
Shane was a game developer, and pretty good one at that. What happens when he finds himself in the game he developed and controled by the AI he built? A solid LitRPG Adventure of course!
Overall Score: I gave this give stars because it leans into the genre in all the right ways. From the universe it was written in, to the game mechanics, it's great causal listening for anyone who enjoys this genre.
Style was just what you would expect in this genre. The Game mechanics wasn't too much, but it was there in all the right ways, adding affect to the story rather than taking away from it. There was also some great origonal concepts that I liked, and enjoyed, The Loot Golden Retreiver for example.
I didn't see any issues with the Grammar, but I am far from an expert in this field.
The story was enjoyable and I happliy listened as I did some reports and other work around the office. The story was engaging, but not so serious that I could do nothing else. It is just want I like in a LitRPG
Character Score was a five out of five, because I think that the character is well defined and the characterization is solid. As the story progresses we will learn a lot more about him, and his personality, but we have already learned a great deal.
This is a solid story and I will be back for book 2!
Style: I'm overall fine with the style. The prose is workable and doesn't get you lost at all, but sometimes it comes in chunks and might feel like its offering you a bit more exposition than what is needed. Overall, acceptable, just not spectacular.
Grammar: Not so many issues. Didn't catch that many mispellings or grammatical issues at all.
Story: So, you can understand me calling this story "not that unique" in two ways. The first is that its boring--which it really isn't. The second is that you can expect many genre staples at play here, but they're also happening from the perspective of a character with a deeper knowledge and relationship with the system due to their focus and profession. The dialogue can definitely use some enhancements in places in my opinion, but frankly, it doesn't feel bad either. Just generic at times.
Character: Shane is at once someone who's probably more geared to dive into a LITRPG environment but also more suspectible to it in certain ways. He knows the system due to his focus and being part of its development. His revivals and how he interacts with the world is kind of simplistic at times and could use more voice, but so far he hasn't done anything too strange or mind-boggling to accept. Not an overly complex character, but also not someone who's just supposed to be a vessel to gawk at the setting or exposition.
Story: Somewhat generic, but definitely well-executed. The first chapter threw me off some, but the sudden twist later does well for the story. Our MC is Shane, a game developer who is suddenly thrown into the game he developed - sounds rather par for the course, but the author's skill sets this isekai above the rest.
Character: Shane is a rather uninteresting protagonist, or rather he's what you would expect of a loner who was given the (quite abrupt) chance of living the world he helped to created. While the first chapter gives some insight into the person he would become, at this point in the story he is still rather shallow. I dearly look forward to continue reading and seeing how Shane's character gets fleshed out and livened.
Style: 3rd Person POV, written in past tense - a classic. The author's prose flows well, and is wonderfully executed. Since I am not one for LitRPGs or GameLits, I can't comment on how the author has written and formatted his system - but to my uneducated eye it all fits quite well with the story they've written and does not do his style any disservice. Great work there.
Grammar: Perfect. If there were any spelling errors or strange vocabulary, I could not find them.
Overall, I would definitely recommend this story to those interested in the genre. The author's skill sets this story a bar above the rest, and the unique beginning is quite the bait to continue reading to see how Shane ends up. Consider me hooked.
The Man Who Taught the Machine takes you along through its story, and the smooth prose helps to convey the information seamlessly. I like the introspective angles we gain as readers, and since Shane is one of the core developers of the game, Endless Veil, it only adds.
Style (5/5 Stars) - The style doesn't deter the reader, leading you through skillfully while keeping you interested. Hints of Shane's personality leak on the page through his internal thoughts, and when it comes together with the storytelling, it works well.
Grammar (5/5 Stars) - I don't think I've seen a single typo so far!
Character (4/5 Stars) - Here's where the story falls short a bit, partially because there are not a lot of main characters where I've read to, and partially because of the brief time we've had with the interesting few. Shane's likable despite all these facts, so this does little to bog down the story.
Story (4.5/5 Stars) - The story took a while to hook me, but once it did, there was no looking back. I can't really elaborate because of spoilers, but if you get to the end of Chapter 3, you'll know exactly what I'm talking about.
So what are you still doing here reading this review? Go ahead and read it! It won't waste the time you've spared.