My class [Death Knight] is just barely legal...

My class [Death Knight] is just barely legal...

by Belgianfri

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

Ever since meeting his uncle, Arthur has pushed himself daily to achieve an arbitrary goal. He trained like nobody else did, longer than anybody else could. He neglected his personal relationships to pursue something he didn't even understand, in hindsight. When the time came for his class awakening ritual, he was ready. He was ready to receive a powerful starting class and to break free from his boring lifestyle.

Well, you know what they say, "Be careful what you wish for, lest your wish be granted."

Arthur was assigned the death knight class, which is just barely, technically, maybe legal.

With it, he learns about what drove him to such simple minded ambition in the first place: his affinity. Now, he's faced with a dilemma: will he embrace it, or reject it?


'My class [Death Knight] is just barely legal' is a laid back story with occasional tension, that describes Arthur, a young man, exploring the world, the system and his own mental health as he pursues his ambitions.

This story is the first serious fiction I ever wrote, so while criticism is definitely welcomed, keep it polite. I'm going to rewrite the first few chapters at some point, since they're not as good as my later ones, but I'm focusing on my current chapters first. I don't have time to do both yet, since I'm also in the middle of my exams.

What to expect from this story:

-Litrpg elements

-A chaotic good aligned protagonist (that starts off as a neutral good protagonist)

-(Hopefully) interesting characters. 

What not to expect from this story:

-Grimdark elements

-Harem

-An enslaved protagonist. (I mention this due to the background of the mc's class)

Release schedule: 1 chapter every other day, 2pm European time (14:00)

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Table of Contents
46 Chapters
Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue ago
Chapter 1. The legality of becoming an evil overlord. ago
Chapter 2. The morality of following your dreams. ago
Chapter 3: The epic demise of a slightly above average goblin. ago
Chapter 4: The danger of revealing the truth. ago
Chapter 5: The rewards of recklessness. ago
Chapter 6: The courage of a merchant. ago
Chapter 7: Tricks of the trade. ago
Chapter 8: The spirit of Reito ago
Chapter 9: The value of a first chance. ago
Chapter 10: The danger of sparring. ago
Chapter 11: The worry of a parent. ago
Chapter 12: The nature of choice. ago
Chapter 13: The effect of affinity. ago
Chapter 14: Adventure awaits! Huzzaaah!! ago
Chapter 15: Investigation of the crime scene. ago
Chapter 16: The death of several undead. ago
Chapter 17: The curse of the dark ago
Chapter 18: The gains of premeditated combat. ago
Chapter 19: The consequences of your actions. ago
Chapter 20: The rites of the dead. ago
Chapter 21: The luck of the draw. ago
Chapter 22: The valuable things in life. ago
Chapter 23: Revenge is best served by proxy. ago
Chapter 24: The bald patches of the [Paladin]. ago
Chapter 25: The mystery of the sword. ago
Chapter 26: The folly of making bad jokes. ago
Chapter 27: Inherited trait. ago
Chapter 28: Another departure. ago
Chapter 29: An eye in the dark. ago
Chapter 30: The Coldwater palace. ago
Chapter 31: The creation of a skill. ago
Chapter 32: Death of one enemy, birth of another. ago
Chapter 33: Going shopping with a literal child. ago
Chapter 34: Ew, bug guts! ago
Chapter 35: What a feat. ago
Chapter 36: Getting overwhelmed. ago
Chapter 37: Fighting above your tier. ago
Chapter 38: Being chastised. ago
Chapter 39: A Restaurant visit. ago
Chapter 40: A month of quests. ago
Chapter 41: Your first murder. ago
Chapter 42: Arid climate. ago
Upload schedule change(every other day from now on) ago
Chapter 43: A large wave of sand. ago
Chapter 44: First encounter with the bandits. ago

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MeowMix
Overall

There's enough discrepancies to detract from the story. Affinity is based on personality, but dark casters gain an enforced insanity skill. Supposedly it's based in obsession and reclusion. The main character was motivated to be a Royal knight, but gave up after gaining their class. 

Pov switches are abrupt, and often don't add much. 

It has one the better systems I've seen. Has it has a comfortable style though it has some ineffective words choices now and again.

Character dialogue tends to be stilted and combat is uninteresting. What remain is mediocre worldbuilding. 

Still somewhat enjoyable and a solid first fiction.

Impulse
Overall

Story has potential, but has huge problem with MC, its now obvious he'll only be alive because of plot armor, not because of his merits... He just doesnt think. Invest few free stats into str and dex to get skill earlier while he is in his first dungeon? Nope. Maybe do some preparation before going to boss? Nah, it'll be fine.

Also MC diligently increases his "Free stat points" stat. Because this stat is most crucial for survival and being strong fighter. 1/3 of his level up stats goes there and he hoards it like a Dragon his hoard.

BlackGreen
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Character

Early days still and the title will probably need to be changed at some point.But overall the story has been good so far and definitely worth a read.

Pacing is satisfying but the author needs to be careful.

It's felt a little rushed and the author might want to reduce the leveling speeds slightly to avoid breaking the level average across the world. 

Makes sense for a massive level gain from first fight with a hugely OP boss that just happens to fit the MCs abilities to counter. But if he races through too many levels it will make the concept of bronze rank adventurers (let alone normal people) a bit silly.

 

The LITRPG elements have been done very well.

Though slightly surprising there were no new skills for such a large level increase.

 

Grammar has been fine throughout. If there's been any errors they haven't detracted from the flow or emersion.

Characterisation is okay but the author will likely need to spend some time deepening it for the MC and his new allies.

I understand the dark attribute was linked to his obsession with training (great way to build that in BTW without the MC having some weird back story). But now that his aims have changed he'll need to have a more meaningful motivation going forwards. 

Even if the MC isnt sure what to do now his original goals are unachievable this can be rich source material for self reflection and growth.

 

It might be interesting to learn more of how people get their more advanced classes etc if this can be done without too much exposition.

This is linked to my earlier comment about being careful with pace going forwards. 

Overall a really good start to what could be a great story.

AqueousSolution
Overall

The main issue I had with this story was main character having too much plot armor and just throwing himself into bad situations ad naseum, relying on his OP class to bail him out, without any character related exposition. 

After reading further, the early problems are much less prominent, and while the main character is still a bit dull, the pacing has reached a decent equilibrium, and there is more characterization happening than before. 

I still like the LitRPG system, it's quite well done. 

Liar1223
Overall

First off, I really find to concept intriguing and the world as well. But the writing is were it hits a wall for ne. Everything feels kinda thrown in my face, all the writing, and I mean all of it, sound like it's narration, and none of the people feel real. Kinda reminds me of a power trip self insert anime.

Illinois is home
Overall

I like the story and the world the author has made can't wait to see more. U especially like the system and the role of the system.

Words to fill up space. Words to fill up space. Words to fill up space Words to fill up space. Words to fill up space. 

Valadan
Overall

Overall, good story: I like the concept and the writing is correct. There is however, one glaring problem: everything is too fast. Our MC gain level by the dozens whithout any special circonstance, there is no development of the world around me (we only see is growth toward an ever stronger hero, when there could be so much more development, it is quite a shame). So, should you read my review dear author please take this into account: don't rush!!!!

Twisted Mask
Overall

The title drew me in, it seemed funny and interesting as compared to others. Not many chapters up yet but the story is decently good. 

Grammar is okay, didn't really notice many mistakes. 

Side characters could use a little more work but it is just the start so maybe they'll get their time later on. 

Style could use some work, it lacks consistency but other than that it's a good read. 

 

I have mixed feelings about the title... I like it but i also think it will be changed soon ( if it doesn't then that'd mean the MC would have the same class throughout... Or I guess it could remain same, even if the MC changes class later on)

sorry about the rant but as I said, I have mixed feelings about it. 

 

 

IDontKnowIt
Overall

I enjoy this novel and can't wait for more, it has an interesting world, interesting characters who are likeable and intelligent, and it seems to be going in a good direction. It's a human who gets the class of death knight. So he decides to be a Witcher and wound up accidentally being a hard counter to them because he is able to be benefited by dark magic instead of harmed by it. Overall a good story and I strongly recommend it.

Elorie
Overall

It starts out rather strong, but peters out quickly.

Low quality story with the standard cliches, and the writing seems aimed at lower age brackets.

Otherwise generally well-written with few if any errors. 

Not terrible for a time-waster, below average for RR.

It's the usual dull, dumb, uneducated protagonist who doesn't want to study.

I have no idea what the kingdom is all about, factions, powers, history, geography, religion, how magic works - it's almost completely empty of background beyond the very basics that directly impract the very hard-headed protagonist.