Master of All, Jack of None

by Mythran

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Comedy Fantasy Romance Harem Martial Arts Virtual Reality
17 year old Ren Haddon hasn't had an easy life, the child of a pair of drug addicts that used him as a lab rat left him almost crippled for life, after they were caught he went on to spend his life in hospital under constant care, the white walls of his room was all he knew, until that day, the day his name was drawn out from millions of others to receive a one of a kind class in the new virtual world game Flow ('Fantasy Life Online World')
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marineopferman
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So far I really do enjoy your story but we practically know nothing about anyone even his own city, so can we please get more details and maybe even some side stories on the other winners?

Nyx
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Great character development of the MC and he gets along quite well with the NPCs but the NPCs aren't quite that fleshed out in personality, and he rarely interacts with other players at all, i think fleshing out the 4 other "special" players and forcing him to interact with them more (like he currently is) yea i understand the whole premise of the artificer class is that the others lied about themselves to win. Flesh out the prince dude, WHY is he so self absorbed, maybe give him another side that isnt seen. The girls i know next to nothing about, and the "ninja" guy seems like he will probably have the closest relationship with the MC right now. But since there is almost no character development on them, PRINCE being the most fleshed out.....but overall this is a great story so far

slime313
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I love the MC in this story. He just has such a lovable personality, he is as hardworking as Weed in LMS but not as detestable in certain aspects. I hope it gets a development similar to LMS's seoyoon, or whatever her name is.. (haven't reread LMS in ages). Lovin how the MC is progressing thou! ^-^

Docnox
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A nice slow moving story

an enjoyable read, a bit slow lately on the updates, nothing else really to fault but i still cant give it the same 5 stars as a couple of the others currently in the top 5. the funny moments arent quite laugh out loud but they can get a chuckle, the mc is fairly well represented but sometimes im not sure what to make of his personality. like i said its by no means bad but theres always room to improve.

Vampwalker
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Love the class you gave him hope to see him humiliate that prince charming douche in the future.

Ulvr
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@Argos / The Group

Please take into consideration that he was basically a guinea pig for his parents so he most likely did not have much of a childhood beside being experimented on. so when he gets to act a bit like a child from doing something he never would be capable of doing in the real world of course he would be happy and giddy, and child like as he probably gave up on ever being able to do the things we would take for granted.

I agree with some of what you said (Argos) - not enough inner monologue to get a better idea of his character.

I still like this story very much and will continue to be a fan.

Stupidiot
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This series is slowly develeoping and very succinctly doing so. It has a very strong protagonist who knows how to get what he wants. He is put into a harsh situation and is able to overcome it through sheer will and perseverance. 

The story is well done and very clean, its currently top 1 and deserves to be in that spot. If I were to have any gripe it would be the speed of production, but then again you can't rush quality.

obatrana
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The FF deserves the ratings of perfect or almost perfect. Even if it isn't all about action and adventure and OP MC it is among the best FF out there not only on this site. Even if it goes slow it goes perfect. The grammar, the story line, the ideas are great. I seriously hope that the FF will continue for a loooong looooooong time :).

Lonjest
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What can I say that hasn't been said already. The story is great, and I my only wish is that you would update more often :P

ajrswim2000
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I really loved what’s been written so far.  This story is unique enough that it can be considered the author’s own work rather than just fan fiction.  The quality is good and the story in engaging. I urge the author to continue developing this story, keep writing, and when the story is complete definitely publish it on Amazon.