In a world where Classes, Stats, and Levels are the everyday norm, Reivyn has a secret.
He was unusually aware of his surroundings from an incredibly early age, and Skills and Stats were acquired easily. He was just the son of an ordinary village family, and nothing appeared out of the ordinary on the surface. But below the surface, dreams of another life help shape his mentality and growth. Why does he have some remembrance of a past life, and what is his purpose in this new one?
"Soul of the Warrior" is what I call a Semi-Isekai LitRPG. I say "semi," because Reivyn's past life is remembered like a dream, and very incomplete. It is still Isekai, though, as he remembers enough that it directly shapes his personality and his sense of self.
The System that governs the world of "Soul of the Warrior" is a combination of modified versions from Selkie's "Beneath the Dragoneye Moons" and Kosnik4's "Magic Smithing." I have changed enough of these Systems and combined them in a way that is unique that I'm mostly sure it's fine, but I still have requested permission to use these ideas. They have both graciously granted me permission.
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There is a ton of boring info dumps early on. The main characters mom inflicts a huge amount of paragraphs of info on her one year old son. Completely immersion breaking and unrealistic. Needs to go back to the drawing board on how to start a story and present information to the reader in an interesting way for this one.
Old review at chapter 31: Stagnating LitRpg: Becoming a slog.
General Overview: A mundane litrpg. Not enough character currently matter. The world is currently 2 cities 2 counts and a mountain.
Style: Nothing amazing or particularly captivating.Shallow on setting scenes. Currently very much focused on numbers go up. Reduced numbers go up at chapter 31 but is more boring training still.
Story: Not quite existent yet. There are some plot threads that have been laid and foreshadowed, but the call to action was very underwhelming and more a secondary introduction. Currently a LitRpg fantasy militia slice of life. Could have potential.
Currently flopping between training, and really mediocre magic lessons, showing and telling all the wrong parts. Shows the repetitive training, tells the character development.
Grammar: A couple of insignificant spelling mistakes.
Character: Not a lot of depth. A couple of amusing side characters but nothing or no one significant. Couple of basic character descriptions. No one gets much storytime.
On the System:
The author claimed inspiration from Beneath the Dragon Eyed Moons and Magic Smithing. I haven't read Magic Smithing, but the current system has none of the flair or style of Selkie's BtDEM. Currently it's a very mundane LitRpg system, with tiers that mean very little. Punching above your level is common as Skills are the most important factor. Stat gain holds precedence, but relies on Class rarity which relies on Skill level. Considering Achievements also add to Stats, the system has great potential to make Tier classifications insignificant
Overview: Regained momentum, the protagonist is currently at a tolerable level of exceptional power. Far beyond the norm but still having meaningful challenges. There is an obvious plot, but still a major lack of conflict. The godly intervention was odd and somewhat out of place but not overly discombobulating.
Style: Still shallow on background setting but improved. Combat has developed to be more fluid. The numbers go up has been made more engaging via dungeon delving.
Story: Has a clear plot now, is still lacking in major conflict, but has some minor conflict.
Grammar: No noticeable mistake recently.
Character: Big improvement, but the reoccurring side cast has less development than what seems like throwaway characters. The asshole religious knight has had more character depth than the best friend introduced near the beginning. The side characters are very much sidelined.
System and Magic: The development of the magic system was nice. Motes to braids is an interesting while simple enough to be easily understood. The system is still rather boring, but the introduction of an antagonist system could be interesting. The tier still seem rather problematic as the protagonist seem to be two or three tiers above in weight class. While he still is in a starter zone, it isn't promising.
I can tolerate info dump because it is a necessary evil in fantasy. The reader is exploring a whole new world afterall with its own set of internal rules and natural law. But how the author does the info dump does matter.
In Chapter 3 the mother explained the whole RPG and levelling system to her infant. Paragraphs long of exposition told to an infant as if the infant is a college student attending a lecture on Akashic Record. Genius or not (and at that point the parents have not fully recognized their child as one) it defies suspension of disbelief that you would talk to your barely 1 year old child who just learned to talk complete sentence.
After this atrocious chapter, I just powered through, and tried to read chapter 4 and I just gave up after that. MC a few months into his second year (barely a todler) asked his mother where skill comes from, then the mother again dump a paragraph of exposition. I stopped reading after that. The mother seems like a normal housewife, why is she talking like a highschool teacher to her todler?
I think it would have been better if the author just info dump it outright to reader. He tried so hard to incorporate it in dialogues between the characters, which does not makes any sense.
"Soul of the Warrior" presents us with a rather standard medieval litRPG world and -- in true litRPG fashion -- it only knows one direction. Numbers go up.
At least I think so... The story is not fully comitting so far.
Style / Grammar:
There's rather little to remark about either of these points.
There were no typos, odd prases, or other grammatical errors that made me stumble while reading. There's some odd capitalisation, but I presume it's intentional and used to make clear when something specifically refers to a [System Aspect].
The style is functional and, while it doesn't wow with speldor, or amazing descriptions, it gets the job done more than well enough.
The only complaint I have is that it can get very heavy on exposition. The story frontloads most of that exposition into chapter 2, or 3, if I recall correctly, but even after that is done, there's still a lot to be explained to the reader -- Specifically not the character, who should probably know this at his age, but the reader.
Most of that is also explained to us via conversation... Which works sometimes, but can also lead to clunky dialogue. Honestly, I'd rather have that bandaid ripped off quickly and just have a paragraph explaining it as something he learned off-screen, most of the time.
Story / Character:
There's rather little one can definitly state on the plot as it has just reached what I belive to be the inciting incident at chapter 10. Hence we have only 6 chapters or so in which the story has started rolling.
In general, our main character has one goal front and center: Getting stronger. Rather vague, but par and parcel for this genre.
In terms of mid- and short term goals, the story is mostly moved along by the circumsatnces the character finds himself in. Go here, do that. Go there, do this.
It doesn't make for the most interesting story so far, but what's here is decent so far.
The characters themselves are also fine, though they're not gonna win any awards.
Our main character is moved along by the memories he has of his past life, but they're not greatly expanded upon to give us a solid basis for his character.
That's fine, since the story seems to wants his first life to play a subordinate role to his current one, but for that... we also don't have enough depth in those introductore 10 chapters for him to base his character on.
This isn't some irreprable damage, that the story will never recover from, but looking back upon the first 10 chapters, I ask myself whether one could have achieved the same in 5.
In the end I kinda ask myself what this story is aiming for. It doesn't seem to be purely focussed on the unabashed "numbers go up!"-appeal other stories go for, having a character who's roided up and ready to kick ass and lift weights the moment they're popped out of the womb.
Instead it takes ample time to get moving, normally spent setting things up. But we come out of the setup... With a roundabout idea of what the system is, a few names and characters that don't have any real depth and no real motivation to speak of.
The main character himself is also rather passive... Making sense, considering he's in the military, where you're not supposed to step out of line... but also not exactly the type of character you'd expect in this genre.
I'll stick around to see where the story is going, definitly. And I'll edit my review when I get a better idea of what the story is trying to do...
But so far it's a bit puzzling to me.
After reading everything at the moment those are the only words that comes to mind. Average and generic.
This is literally a recollection of the most used tropes in litrpg fics.
Forced classes, secret bloodlines, a*holes nobles, academy plots, etc...
The most interesting part would be the ability to refine his bloodline. But that is mentioned on the first/second chapter and then completely ignored. At the moment we still don't know anything about that. Maybe even the author forgot?
It shouldn't really be surprising since this was writen for a challenge. That means using already known tropes mixed together to write a story instead of thinking of something original. (Basically what xianxia authors do to write faster)
If that is your thing go ahead but this is literally one of the most generic litrpg that I've read.
I have been enjoying this book as the chapters come out and I'm impressed in every way. The book is a fairly standard good example of the litrpg genrebut what makes it stand out is it's method of giving the MC a slightly OP advantage over other characters. Having a past life provide some advantages is common but because the past life does not shape the maturity or personality of the MC to much, the character develops with the reader instead of a pre made personality.
TLDR. Great litrpg book; is special because semi-isekai gives the book an interesting unique twist
This story is well written and hits so many high points. The author is actively improving on their writing (not that it's bad to begin with) and it shows as the story progresses. The story is well paced and makes solid sense with its time skips and details.
The MC isn't a terrible overpowered monster, he does grow to OP but is reminded often that he is only OP in his small area. His development is well done as is his interaction with other characters. The growth is organic and not forced.
The world and system are explained well, it walks a line sometimes of almost too much detail but doesn't cross it. The author gives us information in a well thought out way.
I am enjoying the manner and style of this story, the peoples culture feels real and the system is fairly consistent.
The main character is fun and I enjoyed his early life descriptions.
The world is lacking a little scuff and greebles, you know, those little touches that the way cold air is crisp on your tongue in winter or the way the sugar melts into little dark rivulets on top of the golden crisp pie crust.
Not constant and everywhere but at least sprinkled for the spice in amongst the talking and thinking.
Looking forward to further chapters with interest.
The LCP Underground has expanded to a new world, proving it's omnipotence. Was it there before the story was ever written? Is it just hidden in all the rest of the stories I've ever read?
The story is well wrtten, and kept realistic with what I assume are personal experiences from the author. The military life is vivd and is without a doubt as accurate as you will possibly get in a fantasy medium.
Tears of blood drip from my eyes, the ripped parts of my soul that wanted to find a connection, or one simple attachment, a mere correlation with the MC is drifting far lost in the eternal expanse of the void.
The MC is bland, he tastes like sand in your mouth, he has no taste per se, but just that underlining sense of discomfort that grows by the second, razor cutting your tong, until only blood remains in sight.
The world feels vast, but empty all the same. All that exists around the MC exists only for the purpose of exposition, and when it's time is due, gone back to the blank, to the nothingless from where it came once again.
I know it's hard to write a history, I know, I tried so many times and failed miserably to write something that's not just my personal history... And even that, is just a middling failure... But that don't justify the score of this novel, it's a travesty to the people who actually are blessed by the effort they put into making a enjoyable read.
This here? Not a total waste of time, but I wished I could get a refund of my time nonetheless.