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An alien virus changes things on earth for good.
William is given a second chance at life, to go 15 years into the past in order to stop humanity from completely falling apart. If failing that, he at least wants enough power to protect those important to him this time around.
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Alright, this review is pretty annoying to write, because the premises are pretty cool, and the technical writing is done very well. However, it fell apart for me, and I don't think I can keep on reading, for one specific reason : the main character.
I'm not the type of person to obsess over the best possible choices, or acting perfectly rational, but his actions just are so extremely frusturating, over and over again, and there isn't any progression either; he seems to learn nothing despite literally coming from the future.
I apologize for the relatively low rating, but I do want to express my frusturation with this story without leaving an anonymous rating and no feedback.
The story idea is solid. A post-apocalyptic survivor sends his consiousness back in time fifteen years to prepare for the future. While it isn't explained how his knowledge is sent back that is okay. Also the symbiotic parasites that have been mentioned seemed really promising.
The problems are what he does when he goes back. He starts hoarding cash, since the Canadian Dollar is going to remain strong when most of the world dies. He does stockpile food, which his buddy shows on social media, making them huge targets. His idea of weapons is two pistols, which could be okay since superpowers have been hinted at. The authors stereotypical Chinese family I found rather insulting, especially the depiction of the main characters mother.
Overall an OK story premise, but the annoying details made me stop reading.
I quite like that it's not the standard introduction of a system. The author also uses technology that's already available or soon to be developed (in a believable way) to introduce or expand it.
I'm quite curious how it will turn out from this baseline.
Stylewise I don't mind anything, but I'm using mostly the phone, so I don't know how it is for Fullscreen PC reading.
I rly hope this story continues, I'm always glad when I see it updated.
The world is paper that offers no resistance to MC's actions. This sort of snaps the suspension of disbelief as soon as you start encountering things that you've seen before. Other characters just sort of yield before the main characters actions, which isn't really great for making them seem like more than just cheap filling.
Overall: A rather solid story lacking a thorough plot. There's conflict to survive, but many characters fall into insignificance and are more placeholder and plot elements than characters. The viral enhancement and parasitic "cultivation" is rather novel compared to most progression fantasy mechanics. There is aspects of LitRpg but it's been well relegated to being an easy way to keep track of powers and progression, rather than being a senseless list to bloat words and enhance the power fantasy.
Style: The least part of the story. Really cripples my immersion into the story, the author focuses on the right things but doesn't describe enough depth for my immersion. As well a lot of Dialogue feels stilted and artificial. Still comprehensible but a significant detractor.
Story: Quite enjoyable. The basic plot of trying to prevent the worst detractors of humanity while preserving your morality, is a great conflict and plot. While many of the antagonists are currently lacking, and the plot line would be a mess, the basic premise is used really well.
Grammar: There isn't any intrusive errors, though the style may be covering up some of it.
Character: Lacking, while the small bits of characterization goes rather far, only the deuteragonist has any noticeable personality. All other character have been ignored and the protagonist is lacking in a personality.
Additionally: While knowing the big names of future importance makes sense there's a lack of locational villains. Of future relevance we have Canadian Bioterrorist Supreme, Captain Canada, and Two Pricks that did Something. There is nothing personal that happening.
The world building in well done. You get the info but not all at once so you can absorb it. The main charicter is relatable, with good and bad points to his personality. He is very human and not so overpowered. Like many driven people his harshest critic is himself, he knows he has weaknesses and strives to compensate for them. He leverages his best advanage which is knowledge not power to move forward toward his goals.
I would like to see more moments/flashbacks with the girl friend (Sarah?) of happy times they shared. We know he loves her but if we see flashes of the happyness they shared we can get a better insight into what is feuling his impressive determination? I liked what I saw of her in the begining even though it was brief. At her death but she used it to save him (standard story line) but what struck me is that not only did she save him she expressed both love and possessiveness, she wanted him back. So many times the female charicters do not state clearly what I think everyone wants to hear, especially men "I love you, I want you, this one is MINE." We see laced through the story times when he thinks of her and thinks so highly of her. Could show us a moment were she she strait up tells him she wants him to be her friend, partner, and lover. I think that would make it a stronger story. I am looking forward to the next chapter to be posted.
Really like where the story is going. MC makes interesting, practical and realistic choices given their jump back in time.
I'm enjoying the MC abandoning the consequences of their actions due to the impending semi-apocolypse.
I really like the authors style and hope they dive into some other characters viewpoints deeper.
This is super fun to read. The MC has this kind of calm yet forceful/frantic energy about him as he prepares for the end days. I like the premise, I like the writing, like it all. yaaay fun story.
Nothing negative stands out to me that would make me dislike this story so far. So thumbs up for that.
I love this novel even thought it's still at the beginning. For one of the few times I see a well done personality for the MC that supposedly traveled through time he didn't become an idiot or some terminator buy has a pretty real response to everything and the state of the world again it's very nicely descrribed
My only regret it's that there are so few chapters out
I like this series for the system, this system is essentially a virus that acts as a catalyst that speeds up evolution, plus parasites and symbiotes.
This system is, IMO, probably the most realistic growth/personal power system ever? cuz we as living beings evolved with parasites and symbiotes that (although mostly cellular in size) expand our capabilities.
TL;DR: I like the series cuz system is unique and mostly realistic