Grimm, The Mythical Detective

Grimm, The Mythical Detective

by Mighty Action X

Eternal Empire is the perfected VRMMORPG that had taken the world by storm.

Genesis, embarked into this game in the hope of freeing himself from his bindings.

However, there’s something amiss about Eternal Empire and it is somehow connected to Genesis and his family.

Follow Genesis as he unfold these mysteries of Eternal Empire and the people behind it as the enigmatic:

Grimm, the Mythical Detective.

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Kellakayy
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Easy Read with an Intruiging Plot

 A journey that leaves the reader wanting more! I couldn’t stop reading once I started it. Really liked that the MC was able to choose their own race, was intruded by what other choices there could have been but overall a great read. Looking forward to more chapters!

fishsandwich
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MC became too OP too suddenly

Full disclosure: Read through Volume 2

Started out decently enough. Some fairly generic tropes for a VRMMO story, but that is not necessarily bad. Combine that with a few sob story facets about how the MC. We basically get that basically the MC is super smart and talented and he has a rich but shitty family except for this sister that we never meet. That in of itself is fine.

The first story arc is good too. MC is training and being rewarded for his efforts. Then the baddies come. Hard work and planning win the day, etc. The big problems come when the MC beats the "secret" boss. How he beats the unbeatble boss is dubious to say the least. The rewards are a typical load of OP BS. And now we have no tension in the story anymore. The MC literally has to handicap himself to get enjoyment out of his first dungeon. He basically throws all his OP rewards out the window and is still beating elite monsters to death with his bare hands with ease.  After that everything became boring and bland because the MC is too strong to build any tension anymore. I am not against OP chars, but they make it extremely difficult build a meaningful story around. Of course noboy wants the MC to be a useless loser either, but a balance must be struck.

Beyond that the grammar is average. Some errors every chapter but not unreadable. Writing style is also average. Nothing outstandingly good or bad in that department. Overall that sums up the entire work,. Falling for the usual OP MC trope results in mediocrity unless it is played very carefully.

underlord2132
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Can't deal with it (End of Vol 1)

Started out decently, we've got an asshole to hate, and some virtual reality game for the MC to live his life how he wants. Then with no thought or exploration whatsoever, MC picked human for his race. That's boring, but okay sure, no problem. Then we suddenly learn he's some kinda martial arts god who learned everything he could from his teachers as a kid.  And it's revealed in like a couple paragraphs where we switch POV for a few paragraphs while his teachers talk about "man whatever happened to that awesome kid who was the best we've ever seen?" which felt pretty ham fisted and unreal.

 

Then his natural OPness leads to people he barely knows admiring him and his natural wisdom shines bright light upon their lives making him revered all the more. Would have liked a bit more character/relationship development, as opposed to "and now they love him".

 

Then he's seen 100 steps ahead of the bad guy somehow and can already fight some big baddy that an entire company is pooling resources to track and deal with. Ten chapters and already our MC is essentially a living legend. The character and story developments are too rushed and sudden,it just feels like a power fantasy with the perfect MC and the characters around him are just there to be like "oh man he's so awesome and so smart". It might get better later as i've only read the first volume but as it says in the title, I can't deal with it.

 

There's some good elements in there, the tables and system warning stuff is all pretty damn well done, and the grammar makes sense even if it is slightly off here and there, and the main premise is good. But the character/story/relationship developments need more time for some proper development, maybe some foreshadowing of story elements so it doesn't feel like the MC has pulled stuff out of thin air?

pldl
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Definitely above average. Even with all the overpowered stuff, I feel it doesn't really overdo it and the style prevents it from being overbearing. Story is interesting, and side characters aren't flat.

There is some confusion and inconsistency in the meshing of game mechanics and reality.

He can't simply drop a sword because it's an equipped weapon? But he can throw a bunch of swords freely? I'm willing to accept that it's within the game mechanics, but it is still jarring when the only explanation given is that changing weapons in battle has a hefty immobility penalty. It's especially jarring when instead of equipping his knife without penalty, he finishes the fight using hand-to-hand combat. I thought that was considered to be in an unequipped state? Unless unequipping also has the penalty of immobility? There was no explanation as to why he couldn't just drop his sword.

Spelling is great. However, there are many tense problems where words are used in the present or past tense incorrectly. This is most noticeable when tense changes within the same sentence. For example, in chapter 6: "shuddered as my brain process the sight". There is an occasional missing word, like 'the' or 'am;. On a lesser extent, there are a few phrases that would benefit from reordering and a lot of phrases that would benefit from being two phrases. Grammar started off with a solid 4.5 stars, then began to degrade rapidly. At worst, however, it was readable, but clunky to read.

 

BigBadPeperoni
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Could be Average, but flawed execution

First off, I only finished the first volume so that should be taken into account, but I'm going to break down my experience into a couple of categories.

STYLE: All in all, it had an intresting style that didn't feel like it was trying to be something it isn't. Some improvements in the flow of the action scenes and the overall plot could, and while I found it quite jarring when there where flashbacks in a flashback and the switch of POV in the middle of the final part of the arc was not well executed, the style was overall above average for this kind of story.

STORY: Quite a cliche story with, insert alpha male MC, but thats not always a bad thing, it just feels like he has everything handed to him. From the random lowgrade mission that turns into a world shaking quest, to luckily getting just the right skill at the perfect time in order to defeat the final enemy. I'm not saying that all stories with an OP MC have this problem just most of them and this story is not an exception to this.

CHARACTERS: Again with the cliche OP MC, extremly smart, to the point of rediculousness, master of all fighting techniques and stubborn to the point of unreasonablness all lead to a MC that I am not able to empathise with and it feels extremley shallow. The side characters are allso introduced without substance, and I'm having trouble even remebering them while writting this review a couple of minutes after finishing reading. This can lead to them not feeling real, only realy there to to make the MC look more powerful, rather than adding in anyway to the story.

GRAMMAR: The reall dealbreaker of this story. Normally I can deal with the cliche nature of the story and catacters and the odd bit of bad grammar, because without re-reading anything I write you sometimes cant understand what I'm saying. Despite this the sheer lack of effort put into fixing the gramatical and spelling mistakes that litter this story infuriates me. The author of this story really needs to re-read his chapters or hire proofreaders as basic english elludes them at some points. Off the top of my head, one of the worst mistakes that the Author makes is adding a 's' to words that dont need them, e.g. Terains and Gears (in context to the armor he is wearing which does not involve any actual gears) just to list a few.

OVERALL: cliche story, shallow characters and with a style that doesnt take itslef to seriously (an overall good mesh considering the likely target audience) would result in an average story if the grammer wasn't so GODDAMM AWFULL. I probably would have continued wiht the story but the sheer amount of mistakes makes it unreadable, resulting in the score I feel that reflects the story 1.5/5 

Gerganafen
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Awesome story, congratulations my friend! I absolutely love it. Keep it up! :)

Leonid_Constellation
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Lot of Good w/ Less Annoying

The current premise is short but he had been through a lot. That's the first thing I liked.

Second is that he and his rival haven't clashed yet and while the rival is brazenly displaying what he can do like an exhibitionist, he on the other hand is facing a more structured progress. That's the second part that I liked.

Next, the origin of his power and the progress he's experiencing is related less to luck and is more to research and planning. I'd been sick and tired of the setting where some nobody MC got struck by lightning or picked an ancient that made them great. So cliche! So this is quite refreshing.

Last, he maintained being ruthless and rational to being nice and at least conservative to his actions. I'd seen characters that though they don't have the annoying cliche of the "too righteous" MC are just too damned much of a bastard and A-hole.

Well, I guess that's all. Keep it up!

sugarplum
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   Overall, intriguing premise. Some grammatical errors here and there but, it's a good story!

Dark Owl
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The characters are interesting especially the MC. Unlike most MC in other stories where the MC just gain their ridiculous advantage just because they are the protagonist, your MC has foundation. He is a martial artist in real life, trained by the best in the world. His intellect is in genius level. So when he's being ahead in the game compared to those that come before him it becomes acceptable.

PS: The grammar got better.

 

For the rest, I have nothing much to say but as for your grammar, it's a little bit of a so-so but understandable nonetheless. I guess you're more focus on telling your story than perfecting your grammar which is not a bad thing just keep in mind to keep it readable despite the several errors, your readers won't mind a few tweaks.

 

Anyway, don't stop writing!

Mariana1000Trench
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I start reading this due to a friend's urging and to be honest I enjoyed it a lot.

I'm not that good in making reviews and I am being biased right now on all aspects because I enjoy reading it. I like the technology, I like the characters, the references that are from anime and j-dramas. I'm a huge fan of those.

I don't like though the slow updating, he updates like once or twice a month and I'm quite an impatient person.