Beware of an old man on his last job.

Terrence Wicht is a grizzled Bounty Hunter. He survived two decades in the profession where those younger than him succumb, he battled the wilds and the outlaws, and enemies magical and mundane, but in the end, it was his advancing age that caught up to him.

As advancing civilization mercilessly encroaches on the frontier, and the world becomes better connected than ever before, Bounty Hunters may eventually become things of the past as well.

Down on his luck, burdened by the age, and out of money, the protagonist accepts the suspicious contract of locating the valuable missing shipments for the Federal government and gets entangled in the problems he didn't bargain for. But in the world of magic and technology, where bottled health becomes ever valuable, it might also be a job that solves his biggest problem.

His last job.

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Style Score:

I do not grade this.

 

Grammar Score:

I had to knock off half a point, since there were a bit more mistakes in this one. Though, it is not too much as far as I can see. So, generally good to say.

 

Story Score:

A pretty simple story to say, then again it just started, so don't take everything at face value. More or less someone that specializes in potions I guess, takes on a job. Which is a questionable one to say. The story goes into its world building by explaining different parts, such as potentially how their law works. Which there does seem to be something a bit shady going on, but that is just me on this. Either way, I find it interesting.

 

Character Score:

This is probably where it does better, having a range of characters. This merging into the world does it wonders, and gives off a wider feel. Which is what I believe was going for. The interactions just work as a result of it.

 

Overall, while not a perfect story. Which to be fair, nothing is. It is a solid enough one. There just needs to be a bit more attention to potential grammar errors, and that is probably it. It is an interesting idea, and I can see others getting into. So, give it a go and see for yourself. 🐕

Wocalich
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The first "chapter" was a bit difficult to go through, but the narration gets better in the second part. The grammar is pretty good, though there are some mistakes. The world-building is pretty good as well. I would recommend this story to those who like intricate world-building with no info dumps, and main characters with questionable actions in the name of reaching their goals.

KIDYnS
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It's a promising story that is well written and well thought about, especially in the mystery aspect of it, which is essentially the main plot.

The atmosphere that you can feel as you read is genuine, as if you where there with the protagonist.

The ability of the author to describe this story as he sees it is incredible, I have a lot of expectations for future potential fighting scenes. 

For anyone that likes mystery and fantasy you will definitely like it, give it a chance.

 

Nilonyan
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Currently, there are only two chapters, or maybe one technically? Either way, this fiction is just starting and because of this I can only give a simple review.

I'll be updating this review to an advanced one when I feel the Author has uploaded a numerable amount of chapters that I could work with.

 

But as of now... it's great! I like the premise and I especially like the MC, the grumpy and clearly tired old man that wants a peaceful retirement. And the story itself too is quite intriguing, a last job that might or might not be your 'last job', it's hooking me, to say the least.

Other than that the grammar and style are fine, nothing too out of the ordinary.

 

Sincerely, The Fiddling Cat.

Ciao!

K.Asvoria
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Style Score:
It is a risk to deliver a first person past tense story. But it worked well in this story.

Grammar Score:
When the story is interesting enough to capture the reader's attention, who cares about grammar? The story itself had taken all my focus. And I do not under-estimate the power of auto-correct. All Hail Grammarly, Words, Google Doc... whatever writing softwares and word prediction algorithm! Praise the software developers!

Story Score:
I keep on suspecting the whole story is referencing some real case. Especially the term FDA was used in a strange way to represent another kind of organization. I'm not sure the author did it purposely or its an accident or coincident. But when it is a story about potions and medicines... it is smart. I really enjoy the story. the descriptions are good, and the protagonist delivered the story well,

Character Score:
The characters are really realistic! With all the fantasy creatures, dryads, orcs and fairies... but their personality are all very real and they kept me immerse into their world. Though no single character shine brightest, other than the protagonist. They are all well fleshed and served well in the story.

Overall, worth reading and following! It goes into my favourite list!

Esbe Esi
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Fantasy Detective Story

Reviewed at: Chapter 1.3

This story seem to follow the usual patter of the noir detective stories where hardboiled detective accepts the seemingly innocent, but suspicious case from a mysterious woman...

Except, this story is a fantasy one, albeit one that invokes the imaginery of early 20th century. Instead of the detective, we have old Bounty Hunter, and mystrious woman is a dryad and case is initially about stolen magical potions, and true noir character are usually more wordy with their narration than protagonist is, but ...

I swear, it see the pattern.

Sadly, as all detective stories, it probably requires attention to detail to read ... which might be problem if story doesn't update fast enough. But otherwise, it seems fine, despite the few grammatical errors

MrNobodyisHome (E. Anderson)
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He is getting too old for this sh*t

Reviewed at: Chapter 2.3

First off, I am biased. I love detective stories, and as much as I am not a fan of rewarding stories for being “original” because complaining about cliche is becoming a cliche in itself.

That being said, a detective story in fantasy is something I know must’ve been done before, but I haven’t read or seen it anywhere before, so I find it all incredibly enchanting.

Style is up first.


I believe this is the weakest aspect of the fiction. The sentence structures are competently woven together but with not so much of an impressive flair to them. Not much use of stylistic devices used here that I think if used could solidify this promising writer’s identity. Some opportunities for descriptions are omitted, irking me a bit, but it gets better.


Grammar
I am late to the party, so I believe the author has taken time to polish things, therefore, grammar looks acceptable to me—no need to grab your bleach bottle to throw into your eyes.


Characters
Terrence Wicht is a fantastic lead to follow. He is an old bounty hunter well fixed in the morally grey area. Other characters introduced are actually surprisingly interesting. It’s hard to elaborate or even give a score I believe in on this, but I will base it entirely on feeling. I like them, and I hope they get developed more that is all I have to say.


Finally, the story.
Something’s going on with the shipment of magic potions. Agents recruit a bounty hunter that time forgot. It’s sleuthin’ time, baby!
The worst part about the story is that there is a frustratingly low supply of it. But no shade towards the author! Life happens! I genuinely hope that readers on this site give more stories like this a chance. Yes, it is a slow-burner and requires delicate attention, but in doing so, you’ll be rewarded with a fantastic world coated in black-noir paint. 

It has the potential to be my favorite story on this site.

IanFlat
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Possibly because I'm a man of a certain age myself, I love the idea of a guy buying healing potions in an attempt to reverse the effects of aging. Especially because he knows they won't work, but still tries. Makes him an interesting character, one I haven't seen before.

The combination of photography and automobiles with shamanism and sorcery is intriguing, too. And orcs trying to shift a broken-down half-truck!

The setting is interesting and appears rich, the protagonist is sympathetic and skilled, and at the end of the Chapter One the reader is already propelled into the plot. I really like the world, but I suspect that holding off on some explanations, even at the cost of complete clarity, would be a worthwhile tradeoff this early in the story.

The two car noises worked as a pair, for me; first just an innocent backfire, and then something bigger. I actually expected the second one to be someone shooting at Wicht, and it was fun to be wrong. And the integration of various races, and the introduction of Wicht's abilities, are both well done.

Knightraveness
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Judge this Book by its Cover

Reviewed at: Chapter 2.2

The title of this review sounds a joke, but I intend it with sincerity. The cover is as necessary to understanding what you're getting into as reading the initial blurb itself.

A bounty hunter, horse-drawn carriages, orc contigents, trains, revolvers, potions, pharmacists, and business folk, mix with cars, dryad mimicry, sorcerers, receptionists and guild offices, saloons, dusters, faeries, magic sensitivity, FDA agents, and political intrigue. As per the blurb, I tried to imagine some kind of Arcanum-type world where tech and magic exist side by side with fantasy creatures. Or at the very least, with its (sometimes) contemporary feel, something similar to the Bright world.  As chaotic as it sounds, it isn't the content and subjects that are jarring so much as the constant shifts from contemporary to "old world" style, and back. I eventually felt unstuck in time, which periodically broke my tentative hold on the universe.

I ended up pausing to look/zoom on the cover to get a better glimpse at the world visually, and admittedly, it did help! Note; I recognize the author is trying to make something unique, and that has value.

Grammatically, the run on sentences and shifts from past to present tense mid-sentence can make one re-read a few lines, but as English is not the author's first language, it is easily forgiveable. Grammar isn't as necessary to good storytelling, and it is clear that the writer is definitely trying to tell us a story, and is at least trying to craft something out of the ordinary. It has potential for delivering a blend of something not quite available in other universes, and it seems to arguably be the author's priority.

As for the main character, he's definitely a "type" and probably the easiest aspect to latch onto. And in this nerd's opinion, enhanced if you read the inner monologue in Nick Valentine's voice. Wicht's patter certainly lends itself to it.

If judging on delivery alone, there is room for improvement. But if you more heavily value something not commonly found, it is worth the time to explore The Last Job.

Astrille
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Great Western Vibes

Reviewed at: Chapter 2.2

Though there is little of this story to review, what I've read so far has been excellent. We have the initial setup of what ‘The Last Job’ entails, our plucky MC and a quick insight into the mechanics of this world.

The story is told in first person and the narration is smooth, giving a good insight into MCs thoughts and character. Wicht is everything that the synopsis promises, grizzled and with the benefit of experience, but with a light dusting of good humour as an added bonus.

This story is also tagged as ‘steampunk’ but be wary as it certainly isn’t. What it does do is give strong vibes of gritty fantasy Western. Stetsons and rolling tumbleweeds wouldn’t feel out of place in the vibrant world that is painted for us. You can almost view it, painted in sepia tones, as the plot progresses.

The quirky characters are also viewed in high definition through the lens of our MC. In particular, I enjoyed the introduction of the fairy at the bar. The dryads, I’m left undecided on. Though deeper understanding may come in time as the plot develops – Something which can only happen when given time.

The grammar in the story is something that I won’t rate. It’s easy to read though. The occasional mistake might have squeaked through, but there’s not enough to disrupt immersion.

All in all, the story is solid. It has a great foundation laid for building on the mystery of the aforementioned ‘last job’. The characters are interesting and memorable. The setting isn’t overbearing.

I shall be following this with great interest and would heartily recommend others to do the same.