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Have you ever wondered what would happen if the hero was summoned by the villain instead of the people who need him?
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Style: the story leans very heavily on the 'status update / level progression' with these messages constituting as much as half the text of a given chapter. It makes these skill ups feel completely unearned and also irrelevant since a +1 to any stat, when the character has gotten 20+ in that stat as well as the ability to easily grind more in that stat, is completely pointless. And the writing never showcases the significance of the stats gained.
Story: the story is very basic, it pretty much only involves one character (the MC) and thus the entire rest of the world is undeveloped to the extreme. Thus, readers can't be brought to care about the rest of the world. The magic system is also the uninspired same-old which you could find anywhere else and which adds nothing to the story except to detract from reader immersion and slow down the story.
Character: the story is so focused on what the MC is doing, in a sort of railroaded fashion, that there's effectively no character agency. There's also no critical decision points for the MC to make so we don't see how the MC operates under stress and what they're really like. It just runs like someone's recording the outcome of a game (and where no one cares about the player character themselves). We don't get to really see any character development of MC. There's almost no character development of anyone else. There's a few on the king and his advisors' side, but those only show up in interludes.
Grammar: no spelling or grammatical problems that I could tell so full score on this one.
Unthinking murderhobo wish fulfillment, which wouldn't be that bad if it weren't for the two dimensional characters that fall flat when it comes to showing any depth. Somehow manages to fit in a surfeit of hackneyed tropes without bringing an original twist.
Story, style, and grammer flows well, but is rather simplistic. Quality is sacrificed for moving the story along faster, but that just emphasises how uncritical and shallow the story is.
On the upside, there is plenty of room for improvement.
It is a good first draft. It needs some editing with both the run on sentences and the paragraph structure. Event and upgrades seem to come and go really quickly, but the overall plot and story seem solid. The characters are likable, a little too one note at times. The MC seems like a solid guy but his personality seems to change from murder hobo to lovable hero fairly quickly. The main antagonist is a total ass and i just love to hate the guy. He seems a little too incompetent at times, but he is solid for what he is. A professional editor or a more experienced writer could really help improve this story. I would recommend to give it a chance.
In my opinion it is too easy to level up and aquire skills in this world. The mc is constantly getting new skills and stats. I understand he is supposed to be unique and powerful, but he seems to get a new skill every other chapter. Most of them forgotten. Even if the current system is broken without the proper God to oversee it, it just comes off as too easily abused. Supposedly the mc wassome kind of gamer and he should understand how easily he could abuse the system by getting a bunch of random skills.
First 7 chapters and I can't be bothered to read more
The mc doesn't have emotions he doesn't have any wonder for his new their is no adventure
their is no descriptions of anything no facial expressions the the story has a cool concept but it's dry and the author currently doesn't know how to write good
right of the bat the mc goes from book reader to killing things with no mental preparation their is no build up no tense scenes he kills lv10 dire wolf that supposedly has the strength of a knight squad and that ruins the view we have of his strength
This story seems to have an interesting premise, and the author is clearly committed to it. (Having posted nearly one hundred chapters within four hours is a pretty strong showing. That said, I do worry about burnout.)
Unfortunately, I couldn't even finish the second chapter. The writing is plagued by run-on sentences that could be two, or even three sentences if broken up. Some of them were almost long enough to qualify as light novel titles!
But, as constant an issue as this is, it's certainly fixable. I'll be continuing to keep an eye on this story in case the author does just that.
I have seen many a story judged harshly on its early chapters and given terrible reviews before the author gains his footing, and this has story fallen victim to that. Please fellow reviewers, read more than the first handful of chapters before making a decision, as these reviews early in the storys history will drasticly affect its future.
At first the story is sudden and always changing, with a little too much happening, every paragraph spread out between three skill-ups and two stat boosts, but as the story progresses, you can tell that the author gets more comfortable with the story and which way he wants it to go.
By ch.15 or so these problems have lessened considerably, though remnants of it remain, and the plot begins to steadily move on as we focus on the skills that have an impact and matter, rather than a million for every situation.
Around ch.50 is when the plot solidifys itself from the rather basic single villain in the beginning to an understanding about some of the the hidden powers that maipulate said villain and others -for the readers at least- , with a firm base of worlbuilding and character intro, bringing companions into the mix. *At this point the constant notifications are no longer an issue.
Near the end of what is currently released at around ch.70 to ch.100, the mc finally starts to actually face the current main villain and surround himself with trusted allies to watch his back as he ventures off into the world at large, finding the hints of those hidden villains the readers have long since known about.
The story itself, and how the author writes it, continue to grow in depth and improve in skill, and I look forward to its continuation, and for the author to continue to improve alongsde it.
As for the actual review part:
Style --- At first it relies entirely too much on statboxes and notifications, though this eventually fixes itself as the writer gets more experienced with this story, would give 4-4.5, but first impressions are everything, and it has missed the mark on that, so a 3.5
Story --- Similar to Style it has many problems at first and you can sum it up entirely as 'King stoopid, mc stronk' and thats that. It is only further in that we finally get to see the area outside our little cave, get new companions, more pov's as the world starts falling into place. At this time, ch.100, i would give it a 4, but overall, again, first impressions brings this down to 3.5
Grammar --- Absolutely impeccable, i have only noticed a single mistake so far, and it was a mere cap. error for a name, definite 5
Character --- again, rather basic in the beginning , stupid king, strong mc, oh look a smart mage! even stupider guards, weak ones too, there is little to no character development besides the mage in early chapters, but after finding the elemental, that acted as a catalyst to move the story forward and his character along with it, and others outside of his cave interact, yet again a 4 dropped to 3.5 from first impressions
Overall --- the total score would normaly be 3.5, but there are so few grammar mistakes, im making it a 4. this storys one big problem is the beginning but if you can make it past the first 15 ch. or so, its a decent read
The story is really good, I like how the MC doesn't make revenge his only goal but more focusing on discovering the new wourld that he is in .
The character are ,hhmm, how should I say this.They are your everyday isekai characters, nothing extraordinary, but some time they become likeable "I am talking about the fire spirit".
What I don't like is how the story is told in the present and from the MC point of view, but I guess it's due to me reading a lot of stories that have omniscient narrator and always told in the past.
Here, I am going out a spoiler of something that really messed up my mind about the MC, it's not really a big spoiler but ...
In one of the chapters , the MC is going to find some women that got ra*ed by goblins, without even asking them or something he decided to "end their suffering", I mean for those conscious womens who agreed (but only when the MC proceed to kill them) it's fine , but he also killed the unconscious womens without even them knowing.
The author could fix this easily by making all the womens conscious , making them asking for it, and showing some hesitation from the Mc side
Honestly not too bad a read. Good mindless binge.
The two biggest complaints I have are as follows
1. The chapter pacing is wrong. All the chapters are quite short which is likely an attempt to get more "chapters read" or some other statistic to get more readers. Dude, you have released 380 chapters in 6 days. I think it is fine if you grouped them together a bit.
2. The MC feels a bit too unrealistic. I can understand some survival skills, there is quite a lot of stuff on YouTube, but at the same time, it takes a lot to learn how to actually smith anything (I assume) so the MC having no practical experience and being able to make a katana in under a week broke my suspension of disbelief. Especially because we know he was a person who spent a large amount of his life reading and watching anime.
These flaws are ignorable but can easily be a turn off for several readers. Otherwise an OK story.
I think this story deserve more, yeah it have some flaws, but it's not that bad. It's not a story you read too seriously, it's a type of story you enjoy to pass time I guess, no serious problem faced by the MC so far. The story is interesting if a bit lacking, hopefully it grows better as the story progress
Dont really know why people are giving bad review's.
I find the story quite nice, havent even noticed grammar errors so that is also nice.
Not my personal favorite as a master/slave = love relationship. ~~but eh, tickles other people's fancy.
Just happy to have something new to read.
Well done author.