The Young Master in the Shadows

I enjoyed the beginning quite a bit, but it becomes too creepy later on.

The 'Villainous Lead' was well done for the first section of the story, but it then becomes the story of an MC who creepily mistreats his teenage slaves, acting like a sex-obsessed buffoon for the sake of hiding his acumen in public, but not in a way that really works.

Constantly we have situations where pretty young women are creeped out because it seems like the MC will force himself on them, only he tells them at the last minute that he will instead just lay his (reborn as youth) young head on their thighs as he sleeps.  This creepy, overbearing way of his seems to be the key to many a young woman's heart, as they all progressively fall for him...

Honestly, it would be way better if the MC acted his mental age and was better able to deal with his sex drive (rather than turning the story into a creepy romance), focusing more on growth, power and believable loyalty derived from treating people right.

It is a lovely friday morning, and i decided to read some chapters, it started off with the mc waking up in the lap of a (12 year old ??) girl, then proceeding to spank her and call her "naughty" and "needed to be taught a lesson" .

Considering his mental age, and actual physical age(i cant imagine a 12 year old boy spanking another 12 year old girl, let alone someone that is supposedly hundreds of years old behaving like a creepy old pervert). 

I felt quite disguted, and immediatey stopped reading.

The story is fine in the begining, but based on what i read this chapter i will not be reading further.

I've read a decent amount of SI/Time Travel/System stories, and this one does its job, and does it well. The MC isn't a massive asshole, he didn't automatically start sleeping with all the womanz, he didn't go on a massive revenge scheme, he just played it cool and allowed himself to break the game. Which is what you want from these stories, they are wish fulfillment of the highest order and as long as you understand that while reading it, stories like this become a lot more fun. Keep up the great work Author!

Likely to be the villain of those chosen by fate. 

Is this story worth a read. 

Yes, with conditions.

Need to enjoy/tolerate: main character with chip on shoulder, sexual tension+ teasing. ( Includes spanking, do note this story includes slaves, + large multi wife families) 

There is a bit of near explicit plot armor but for a story like this it's expected. 

The interesting bits come farther in after the intro is over. The class he picks and the knowledge he brings set him up as dangerous. 

There are chosen individuals who are simply more talented then he is. Just by existing people flock to their banner.

At least as of this chapter he is being setup in opposition to these chosen of fate type of characters. 

Essentially to save his family it seems he is willing to play the villain. 

Or is there another way? 

( One star off for the fake addutude the mc fakes+ the way sex/ sexual exploitation is handled in the story) 

Honestly, it's a decent story if the reader can learn to ignore the pedo vibes that some of the characters give off.

Style: A more or less straightforward writing style. The occasional attempt at suspense or mystery comes off as a bit amateurish but the general descriptions of people and places is decent. Though personally, I think the character descriptions (at least, the important ones) need more depth.

Story: Decent... is about all I can say about it. It has its moments here and there so it's not really bad. Though I'm beginning to not appreciate the repeated 'convenient' items or people or events that fall into the MC's lap.

Grammar: Nothing to quibble about here. A minor typo every once in a while at worst.

Character: Yeah... no. The story stumbles here quite a bit. MC is made to seem like a rampant pervert. Girls and women are made to seem like either gold-diggers or damsels-in-distress. Pretty much every other male besides the MC is made to seem like closet perverts and/or pedos. Even the MC himself might be said to be a pedo, considering his mental age. But at least he has the excuse of being in a body the same age as the girls.

This is not even mentioning that the MC's (or first girl's) age is said to be 12 at some point. This would have made it immensely disconcerting as it is but I'm choosing to rationalize it as being a typo for 15. Mostly because the sexual vibes do not match up with the characters' behavior and because it was stated multiple times that the awakening candidates (like MC and first girl) are somewhere near 'adult' age. The MC is also often referred to as a teenager, which while 12 is technically a teenager, it makes more sense for someone a little older to be called that.

The only reason I'm not giving a lower character score is because the non-MC characters are not just cardboard pop-ups like in a school play. They are shown to have their own feelings and motives even if they are shallow at times. So yeah... not the worst characters but not the best. I think they could improve as the story continues.

My only true character complaint is that the MC's intentional perversion and arrogance (to present a false front) is too exaggerated. I think he can still present that false front while toning down that behavior a little. As it is, those specific parts feel painful to read.

Also, dear author... Please find other ways for MC to annoy his girls besides just spanking and lap pillows. There's things like cuddling and tickling too, you know?

Overall: Honestly, this is a decent story but I think most people are turned off from it by the oversexuality displayed by what was once said to be 12 year olds but the rest of the story treats as older. In my opinion, this would be a better story if the general sexual vibes are toned down in general.

But as it is, one can still enjoy this story if they can learn to ignore some disconcerting parts of it (or better yet, mentally replace those parts with their own headcanon).

Very interesting story, characters have depth to them, interesting world building, 'Cheat' isn't something worldbreaking and I'm realy glad about class choice and his attitude towards enemies and family he shows his strenght doesn't make himself underwhelming but doesn't run around screaming IM OP MASTA.  some grammatical problems but nothing atrocious.  Definetly recomend giving it a try

It is well written, updating regularly and the MC is not an idiot. 

Better even, its not a dark / grim type of novel.

The MC is a young master so he has resources and he is a little evil?.

As he has political power, he can accumulate minions / partners quickly and provide them benefits contrary to over MC that have no money.

The style is a mix of Chinese and corean novels.

Good novel overall and I wish the author could continue writing it until the end.

Go read it!

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I wish there were more novels like these nowadays.

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It is well written, updating regularly and the MC is not an idiot. 

Better even, its not a dark / grim type of novel.

The MC is a young master so he has resources and he is a little evil?.

As he has political power, he can accumulate minions / partners quickly and provide them benefits contrary to over MC that have no money.

The style is a mix of Chinese and corean novels.

Good novel overall and I wish the author could continue writing it until the end.

Go read it!

It is well written, updating regularly and the MC is not an idiot. 

Better even, its not a dark / grim type of novel.

The MC is a young master so he has resources and he is a little evil?.

As he has political power, he can accumulate minions / partners quickly and provide them benefits contrary to over MC that have no money.

The style is a mix of Chinese and corean novels.

Good novel overall and I wish the author could continue writing it until the end.

Go read it!