Edean World Online

Edean World Online

by ChadCross

Edean World is the first game that Neos created who also create the virtual pod called AVTR (Avatar). A game created by integrating other game that is on the brink of corruption. Edean was only release after years of preparation and now is the time Neos shared their new world.

It is the most unique game that enable players to have unique abilities that is tailored according to their real life abilities and skills. The world itself is also unique than other game because of self conscious AI and environment.

Tadashi Rishido a college fresh man student and one of the few student able to attend a prestigious college abroad but an accident occurred than will take his ordinary life into something that most people would instantly grab.
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This is my very first story that i tried to post publicly coz i didn`t have the guts and time to do so.
There will be errors and other stuff coz im not really good at english i just like to read LN and WN.
It is also inspired from re install of warhawx and clockwork by VRdraco.
a bit mecha but its all part of the story so no spoilers.
I add the mature content for gore and cursing of the mc inside his head. But i`ll keep it minimal.
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Nathan050101
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D. Traveler
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Great but please check your spelling

I find this story to be very interesting, the only problem with it is the grammar, please do something about it, it gives me a headache trying to understand.

claws8367
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It's unique and good, but..

it’s a good story i promise you!

But the grammar/spelling is bothering me sooooo hard…. 

If this story was just another copy pasta story i would skip it.. it wouldn’t be worth the trouble.. But it’s not so.. i have to endure… 

 

Future editor-sama please come quickly! With your help this could get in the top 50 easy maybe even top 25 if it had more blue pop ups…

 

manpapper
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A surprisingly good story

A surprisingly good story but like the autor said sometimes there are some gramar problems.

Can't wait further chapter update.

 

 

Dracko2121
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Not bad but definitely needs editor mission letters and words but good storie.

Lewisking50
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Very promising so far, needs quite some grammatical improvement though.