The Legendary Hoarder (VRMMORPG)

The Legendary Hoarder (VRMMORPG)

by T J Logan

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Profanity

Synopsis: With his families debt accruing more interest than he can pay off, Axel decides to put on the VR helmet in a desperate attempt to pay it off. He soon realises that making money illegally in a game is far easier than real life. With his experience in accounting, he tries almost anything to fill his pockets with gold without drawing too much attention. However, his young, joyful self who enjoyed playing in VR, is no longer around. He's rude, crude, and his name is Axel Smudge, AKA The Hoarder; he's going to shake the pockets of every player he passes.

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Drakonion kin
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I recently joined this author and am soon going to check out his other novel. The grammar, even if it is early to say, has not had any mistakes I have spotted so far in the book. The story itself I feel has a large genre it can fit into and is extremely realistic with the elements of the game world so far, but I don't know about all the mechanics, yet. The characters are all really well done, and even the 2d characters have a life given to them that is befit a 3d character in most other novels, with these characters getting a deep background and thought out character even if we never will see them again. As I said, the author has done a wonderful job so far and I am now just typing to reach the word limit of the advanced review counter thing. Still trying. Again! I wish they displayed how many words you had. This sucks. Anyone want to join my biscuit genocide? I really hate biscuits, I have two dogs, and I am drinking tea. Hold on let me look up a word counter. Nine, eight, seven, six, five, four, three, two, one.

Skylar Darkprism
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I'm relatively new to reviewing and royal road as a whole, but this story stuck me as really good, so I'm going to give it a try.

The plot itself feels real and gritty. Although the MC is smart, that doesn't make everything go his way. We don't know a lot about the rules of the VR he's in yet, but the MC doesn't know everything about it either, and I trust we'll both learn in time in a natural way instead of a world building dump. The author is pretty skilled at avoiding those.

As for character, the MC is clever, needs money, and acts consistently in a way that shows off both. As a big fan of really smart characters, I like the guy. He acts like a jerk sometimes and cusses too much in my opinion, but that's just a part of how the author built him and it fits with his backstory.

The only reason I rated the Grammar 4.5/5 instead of 5/5  is because of a few word choice errors I spotted (man instead of men, etc., just small stuff really). Because those things really stick out to me, I can't in good conscience give the author 5/5 even though it really doesn't affect the story or reading quality for most people.

 

Joaquim
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No nice butterflies&unicorn-story, thank god.

Reviewed at: Chapter 19 Eyes Of White

As the author mentioned on his last chapter, he is most likely dropping this very promising story because of troll/fake reviews, so i felt compelled to plead my case for the quality of it and why i loved reading it up to the very end.

I really just discovered VRMMO-stories for me and in this case i really like the world-building inculding a virtual reality with serious economic implications in the real world. Regarding grammar i cannot judge properly as i'm no native speaker. The MC has had a really rough life so far, which turned him into a cynical and mistrusting person with maaaybe some anger issues, but thats understandable. As mentioned in my title i really like that it's a bit more on the darker side of stories, with crime, corruption but nothing too terrible, gory or haunting. I genuinely enjoyed it and really hoped for more, reading about the MC resolving his real-world-issues with virtual-world-solutions. All the best.

TheDerangedOne
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Mmm.... VR rags to riches fast moving mobster-lite

Reviewed at: Chapter 19 Eyes Of White

.... Or that's what it seemed to be aiming at. Story's getting dropped because some people spammed 0.5 stars on it which is a real shame.

I honestly don't get why the interest in VRmmo settings for stories have been dying out lately when there's still good shit being written in that setting. 

The character interaction between the two main male leads gives me a similar vibes to Vito and Joe from Mafia 2 which is always nice to see.

I guess using deep dive VR to make money to pay off debts is sorta cliche at this point but honestly, what other motivator is there to play the game other than wide eyed optimism?

Engkdae
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Something Different, Something Good

Reviewed at: Chapter 19 Eyes Of White

I've read up to chapter 19, so far this is one the best books I've read in a while. The dialogue is humourous a bit dark but its constructed very well. I haven't really liked stories of characters with wibbly morals but this has changed my mind. Can't wait to see what Axel and the gang do next.  

Amin
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Always wanted to see more of a "business" side of these kind of stories. Good job man, keep up the good work..... Just continue doing what your best at man. Don't let people get you down with bad reviews and shit. You have a good thing going on here man. Don't let them take that away from you.

Book-Wyrm
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Give this book the respect it deserves

Reviewed at: Chapter 19 Eyes Of White

I’m fucking terrible at talking about the details of books and what they do right or wrong so I’ll just say this. I love it, aside from some spelling errors it’s amazing and I hope to whatever listens that the author continues and ignores all the dick heads leaving 0.5 star reviews for shits and giggles 

- From a Pissed Off, yet Hopeful Book-Wyrm

Faeron
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A more evil, brutish take on RR's heritage fic

Reviewed at: Chapter 15 The Uhyre Horde 

Tons of fun, and grittier than its spiritual predecessor, The Legendary Moonlight Sculptor. I'll be sticking around for the long haul on this one; Weed and Hoarder would be best friends, if they weren't busy figuring out how to scam one another.

I have some small stylistic and world development gripes keep this from being a 5/5 for me, but the pacing might just require this sort of handling. Kudos to the author.

RandomNumbers8
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The story sucks you right in with the MC just getting demolished by life. The grammar is excellent and there was no break in the flow of paragraphs or chapters. I understood everything that was said and didn't have to reread any part to get the meaning down. The characters are developed and have believable flaws; they don't do stupid actions that break away from their character. The story itself is well thought out, make enough money to clear MC's mountain of debt before his legs break. There hasn't yet been a lot of outside the game elements, and I don't know if author man is going to include that in this story. There is no problem with the world building either as I personally see that since the MC is rushing to get money he has no time to learn about the world. The game itself has flaws as well which isn’t really seen in most Litrpg’s which I find a very good plot point. I have no qualms about the style the story is written. Overall, author man has blown it out of the park with this story. I hope author man keeps up the pace and doesn't run out of fuel like so many other authors before him. 

Zalrick
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I've read upto chapter 19 so far, but this is already one of the best books I've read in a long time. The conversation is witty and a little gloomy, but it's well-crafted. I've never been a fan of stories with questionable morals, but this has changed my mind. I'm looking forward to seeing what Axel as well as the group of friends do next.