Immortal Soul
by Mike777ac
[Warning: Contains graphic violence, nudity, mature content, some sexual content (In the later volumes), and relatively dark or crude humor!]
[Disclaimer: This is a fairly long story, and covers many controversial topics. It is almost entirely written in first person past perspective, and from multiple point of views. There are several """"Main"""" characters, and each of them is significant to the plot.]
Related fiction => """"Questing"""" Link => https://mike777ac.wordpress.com/questing/
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| Chapter Name | Release Date |
|---|---|
| Act 1: Chapter 1: Reincarnation | ago |
| The Map of Alfirin | ago |
| Progress Updates, Comments, Questions, Polls, Ect. | ago |
| Questing | ago |
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Hard to read
This story started out so good. I really wanted to like it, but as the story progressed, it became harder and harder to understand what was going on. The transitions in plot was not clearly defined, therefore it seemed like it was jumping all over the place with major plot devices that seems to pop out of nowhere. It was hard to believe that Michael could win over the Black Mithril residents over just a speech – this scene felt very incomplete to me. It was also surprising to me when he called a serious meeting with his close group of friends, only to suddenly run into the endless labyrinth in the middle of it and became a new person. The mood of the story just abruptly changes. I tried, but I stopped reading after I finished Act 2.
Not too shabby
Fun story with engaging characters.
If I had a complaint, it would be that it's hard to get too attached to any of the secondary characters, as anyone but the main character is brought into the limelight, only to be left behind once new friends are found.
The memory glitch bit didn't help matters either, and I'm not saying that it makes it a weak story, it just leaves me wondering when the current secondaries are going to be replaced.
it's alright
All in all the grammar is good but there are various elements that keep coming back and somewhat hindering the experience.
The main character is pretty good but most of the side characters seem to suffer because of it. They tend to be bland or over-the-top neither of which is a good thing for me while the occasional good side character is put into some unpleasant to read situations (i.e. ethir and Rae).
This is a good read to kill time but I wouldn't write home about it.
That being said I know how hard it is to write so keep it up and one day the characters will shine.