Immortal Soul

Immortal Soul

by Mike777ac

Michael has been around a long time, a very long time. He has been reincarnated more times than he can possibly remember, and picked up a few tricks along the way. Intimately knowing Heaven, Hell, and pretty much everything in between, he was born into a fantasy world. Will he have a long happy life, or a disappointingly short and painful one? Either way, at least it should be entertaining.

[Warning: Contains graphic violence, nudity, mature content, some sexual content (In the later volumes), and relatively dark or crude humor!]

[Disclaimer: This is a fairly long story, and covers many controversial topics. It is almost entirely written in first person past perspective, and from multiple point of views. There are several """"Main"""" characters, and each of them is significant to the plot.]

Related fiction => """"Questing"""" Link => https://mike777ac.wordpress.com/questing/
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akeshiro
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The story is good so far but i think u should create the map of the story take pace or the whole continent or planet like this one http://puu.sh/ahpwi/cf7fd660ca.png its from LMS n it will make ur story became more intresting cuz the reader know the place where the MC go to adventure or something. well usually u need time to make those map exactly look like what in ur mind n after that try to make pic for the char n the like .

 

EDIT: Thanks now we(reader) know where the story take place :D u deserve 5 stars

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Lets see, First things first This is one of the greatest original fiction  i have read before!The style is great . The story is Original . I can rarely see Grammar mistakes  if not ever .And the characters.... simply amazing !!! If i tried to write something i can probably  guarantee i would never create something as good as this ,the chapters are pretty long and the story is very detailed while it kept me hooked  , the though of skipping a part  ( which happen even with big name novels ) hasn't happened ...yet lol The idea of having a soul being immortal in a sense yet still having the trouble of being killed and resetting troubling enough that the MC clung to his life crossed my mind before when i was first reading Re:Monster but you made the idea into a good work. Michael, Uriel, Azrael etc are Angelic names plus the fact that Michael was born part angel in this cycle seems interesting and it gives me some hints along with the first 16 chapter as to what i'd expect  in the future , i might be right or wrong but I'll keep my thoughts to myself as to not spoil it for the other readers . It seems you already know where to go and have a good grasp of the end so its encouraging me to keep this work bookmarked since i hate unfinished fictions ( their ideas are taken so we cant make similar work and call it original and the unfinished story is frustrating staying in the back our head wondering what happened) So! I hope you keep feeding us more chapters  and please don't  quit!!!! i wana see the end  ^^
Ciaina
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The good:

grammar, and in general pretty damn well written

 

The Bad:

The whole structure, the whole story.

It's confusing and unfocused. Takes too many directions at once. Too many characters, that warp and change personality or reactions to suit the ever changing whims of the author.

Gets boring very quickly at act 2, and easily dropped.

Flow and structure, hope the next work will make use of the lessons learned here.

Seirnos
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This is an amazingly well-written story with a lot of depth. Definitely not for the faint of heart or stomach, but I've truly enjoyed this story. It develops at the perfect rate for the characters, and the interconnection of actions is flawless. Thank you for this story, Mike.

CandyMan
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Brilliant, Simply brilliant/

Long chapters, no spelling errors, great characters and story, awesome fight scenes, what more could you ask for?

Eternal Ice
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Good. could have been better.

MC is seriously too OP and bad mouthed. Other characters are not well defined but the plot is interesting. Improvements both in writing and characterization with every chapter gives hope that the story down the line would be more engaging.

firefoxpaws
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when i was reading you story sometimes you story rhyme it's actually pretty funny since i didn't expect that, and now my mind won't stop correcting the rhyming the word i read, 

kaziz
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You did a great job in building the whole background of each charcter, to the point where we actually get attached even to secondary ones and can't wait to know what will happen to them. Good Job and Thank You.

UndergroundJazzEnforcer
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I just started reading this last night, and I've already finished reading all the currently uploaded chapters. And I seriously can't get enough! Thank you very much for writing this story; This was a very enjoyable read so far, and I can't wait to read the rest of what you have in store for us!

GoGet
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Coming on and finding a new chapter is just so wonderful!

 

I just can't get enough!