The Dungeon Without a System

The Dungeon Without a System

by StrangerDanger51

The unnamed main character wakes up as a Dungeon Core. Instead of being deep within the earth or in a cave, this newly-minted Dungeon Core finds himself drifting to the beach of an uncharted and uninhabited island.

Watch as he explores the uses of mana, defends himself from people trying to kill him and confuses the hell out of all the humans who attempt to understand just why he's different from other dungeons.

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Rando99
Overall

Surprisingly good

Reviewed at: Chapter 8

The best Dungeon Core story I encountered so far.

The "Without a System" idea may be not really new but here it is very well done and brings deeper immersion. If you usually skip Dungeon Core fictions give this one a chance, it's way better.

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SquatTag57474
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No spelling errors from what I can see, and it pulled me on from the beginning.

You have a strong start so keep up this quality and you'll be golden. Word of advice though, dont powerup your mc too fast, I almost got whiplash you were so fast, try to keep it gradual so your readers suspension off disbelief (I think its called) isn't poked too much.

SLit23
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Just when I was craving a fresh dungeon story…

Reviewed at: Chapter 12

My prayers have been answered! Few grammar mistakes, interesting MC, and a diverse set of monsters/adventurers to bring it all together. Even better, it doesn't seem to be embracing the whole "friend of humanity" trope that every other story and their mother seem to be latching on to. Neither is it the bane of their existence, some grand calamity or world ending apocalypse. I'm also loving the lack of system, sure the core is developing, but there's no stated incremental growth, no hard stats to get distracted by, or pad the length of chapters. 

The monsters! Oh the monsters! Mutations/evolutions are some of my favorite bits of a dungeon story, and this one certainly embraces them. I NEED MORE!! Keep up the great work!

Eranatos
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This is a really good novel. It's a Dungeon Core done right. There are a lot of books that do this genre, but most of them suck. This book doesn't. You should read it. Takes a few chapters to get rolling, but a lot of fun once it does.

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sixnein
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Amazing superior dungeon story in every single way

Reviewed at: Chapter 12

This is definitely worth the read. It reminds me of Abyssal Dungeon on rr where the mc was a water dungeon. It also doesn't fall into the unoriginal blase litrpg troupe. Thus the story feels more fluid and more tense as there isn't a god system babying the mc, I really really like how u didn’t choose that route author , like really 

the story is pretty nice you get short chapters filled with enough mystery adventure and lore. I love the second hand perspectives of how humans see the mc. I hope he ends up like the dungeon in Theifs Dunfeon where mc was uncompromising, clever  and ruthless against his human enemies and not like some compromising ninny like the mc of Dungeon of seasons

ovedall I have very high hopes for this story and plan to stick around for a very long time. I hope the author doesn't quit like the authors of Thief's dungeon and abyssal dungeon

 

edit: every single chapter is so goddamn creative. Mc is extremely creative and smart, he isn't stupid enough to make the dungeon floors easy. If they players want to have him they will fight tooth nail and lose a few limbs or become paraplegic while trying, god I love this

Satanael
Overall

A breath of fresh air on dungeon POVs

Reviewed at: Chapter 13

A great dungeon story that doesn't fall into the litrpg system tropes. A fast buildup into action and a good spread of dungeon/mc pov and the humans trying to enter pov. There isn't an overly convoluted backstory to the dungeon at the moment at least, which I personally like since normally the only thing that is needed from dungeon backstories is that they have modern human knowledge, which StrangerDanger51 does well with just describing things in a way that only a modern human would know and some small statements. Overall a great read for those who like dungeon novels and are getting an itch for something new. 

Yohao
Overall

I loved this story !

Reviewed at: Chapter 13

The story is really fun, the mc (I call him Corey cause of yes) has amazing ideas while expanding the dungeon and actually question himself and his choices. The Magic looks really interesting here, and Corey needing to really learn from others how to do it makes it even more fascinating ! The monsters are also a strong point here, how Corey can guide or let them evolve on their own makes the story really captivating ! May Sebastian the First Knight always live in our hearts and memories ! 

The other characters are also well though, nteresting and with their own personality. The story progression is also really satisfactory and I'm really anxious to read more of this story and where it's going ! 

All in all if possible I would give 10 stars but the maximum is 5 so that's what I can do. Thanks for writing and keep up the amazing work !

Sean Quinn
Overall

Fairly Unique Start for a Dungeon Core Fic

Reviewed at: Chapter 13

Starting on an Isolated Volcanic Island and being reincarnated makes his threat level scaleing kind of skewed, which makes the Adventurers take him as a much older and more experienced dungeon. Wonder how long it will take them to figure out their mistaken assumption? Looking forward to finding out! Keep up the interesting flow and interjection of new and more powerful delvers while your dungeon keeps making creative new floors to keep himself safe, StrangerDanger!

Zhen-kotron
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Everything to expect from a dungeon story

Reviewed at: Chapter 13

It may be a little early to state anything, but this is a quite solid read so far (chapter 13). It mostly focuses on the dungeon building and interactions with adventurers, which is honestly all you can expect from such kind of a story.

The fact that the MC learns from adventurers and improvises a lot is what i believe the best part of the story. The fact that there is no system means that it can do whatever it wants to achieve its goals: not reliyng on predefined solutions.

The monsters it creates arent the most original things out there but much more diverse than most dungeon stories offer. 

Sebastian the Crab Knight alone is quite an interesting design!

 

Unfortunetly, in later chapters there arent as many descriptions of the magic interactions. I personally would like a more closer understanding on how enchantments work, but maybe it is the way the author wants it to be: where readers finish the picture in own heads.

The "sun" in jungle hell was explained very briefly but the mechanism behind it seems very intriguing. I think it would be nice if the water shrine on the first level was explained more in detail as well; how does the "intent" influence runes and make them so exactly what is expected? or how does the bowl message the stalactite to stop functioning exactly, without any "wires" or alike?

In the beggining, the story payed a lot of focus to mana and how it works, so i expected as much explaination about enchantments as well, but got a bit dissapointed (or rather, confused).

 

The human characters seem quite flat and have little personality shown. There are many of them introduced, and its hard to remember their names when the introduction is so brief. But i have faith in the author and believe it will get better.

It doesnt help that they often "come in packs" and you have many new names to remember, including those who will just die soon without much impact.

It is also confusing how,  at the beggining, the core uses own nicknames for intruders, but the story uses their real names.

 

Neither the style nor grammar have any issues, they are the way they are and its perfectly fine. I didnt spot any typos and the sentenses are clear to read.

Overall, this story would be enjoyed not only by dungeon fans, since it lacks the "nerdy" parts of most other dungeon stories, such as heavy reliance on the system that simply doesnt exist here.

Bamboocha
Overall

Great dungeon story

Reviewed at: Chapter 13

I have read hundreds of different novels and the dungeon core/master genre is one of my favorites. Based on that I can say that this novel in this genre has a possibility to be one of the best. There are not many grammar problems and the world described seems pretty fun. Author switches between dungeon core and invaders POV with great success. This doesn't just include the POV of adventurers invading the dungeon but the happenings of the town that is being created around it. It is also worth mentioning that unlike most of the other dungeon stories this one doesn't include the system which usually doesn't work well but somehow author made it a non issue. Our dungeon core is also not super beta MC that Japanese stories like so much with strong morals and woke that won't hurt a fly and in my book that is a huge plus. First few chapters are pretty slow and they show that the author was just getting used to writing a story but it gets better and better with each new chapter. What I don't like is that guns were included instead of sticking to standard fantasy settings but so far it isn't a big issue, especially since the dungeon is pretty damn wet if not even flooded at times. If you are a fan of dungeon stories then this one is definitely for you.