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[I accidentally got engaged to the evil owl-goddess who is obsessed with the number-three and now I have to make weapons for our new adventuring guild]
In an era in which ancient gods live in the world’s cities together with their mortal followers, forming tight-knit guilds and powerful temples, the disfigured ash-caster and blacksmith Hineni has lived his entire life as a reclusive outcast. Hidden away behind layers of clothing and just as many walls and doors, he only ever leaves the house in the dead of night, so that neither the gods or anyone else can ever see him.
However, on one of these night-tide outings, he finds that has gained the unwanted attention of what is seemingly a perfectly normal owl and through his unwitting efforts at simply filling his nights with acts of personal meaning, he ends up promising himself to a creature that is perhaps even less versed in human ways than he himself is;
a mysterious, odd owl-goddess that nobody seems to have ever heard of, Obscura.
Hineni, having had no greater purpose in life until now, finds himself willing to accept this turn of events and dedicates himself to creating a brand new adventuring guild, under the watchful eyes of the ancient entity Obscura, who has only one, clear, proclaimed goal -
- To hunt the BIG FROG! BIG FROG! BIG!
[litRPG] [Soft romance] [Base/Guild-building] [Pact with a deity] [Crafting] [Slice of life]
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Love it. Very unique, very funny. The beginning has some real depth to it, with many moments of feels. Once it got rolling I was captivated. I gave it five stars, but just imagine it's three out of three, three is a good number! Avoid fours, fours are for frogs. Frogs bad.
First, it is extremely well-crafted. Second, it avoids almost every trope except the part about having characters. Honestly, I find it difficult to appreciate those stories that try to eliminate the idea of characters, so I'm okay with this. Finally, fantasy requires us to accept some non-real concept as real to proceed. This story gives us a very interesting and entertaining concept as the springboard for its fantastic nature.
It is great, whimsical fun, without any hint of murder hoboes.
The story is well written, and the setup well executed, if on the slower side. The characters have a fairly strong voice, and plenty of potential for growth...
But the male lead has a crippling fear of others seeing him. It's written well, and clearly a cornerstone of the future plot. It's also painful and tiring to read. And for my taste, it goes on too long. I made it to chapter 8, and it's probably going to take a good while longer for improvement, and that's just not worth it.
If you've got a better tolerance for that kind of thing, there's a good story here. If you don't, here's your warning.
Updated 16/02/2022 with disclosure.
Disclosure: This is a review swap, though I have written this review as honestly and impartially as possible.
Look, I don't even like LitRPG. I haven't watched any anime for something like 10+ years and I'm probably the wrong demographic for this, but I still found this fic adorable. You hear me? Adorable.
The author has chosen to use the limited third-person point-of-view in the present tense. It's a very odd style choice, since the POV and the narrative tense are mismatched: the present tense as narrative tense is often matched with the first person POV because it gives a sense of presence and movement (i.e. action) while preserving mystery. Think The Hunger Games for stories that do well with the present tense.
This story is a slice-of-life, so the POV in the third person fits (slow-moving), but the narrative tense doesn't. I think this would have been served better with a third-person limited POV and simple past tense. Even so, the style is very readable and I don't think most readers mind it at all.
Aside from the strange POV and narrative tense mismatch, it's clear the author puts thought into creating and maintaining a certain mood and atmosphere. It's quite cozy and cute, even when the things happening are not quite that.
Occasionally there are shifts in the narrative tense (accidental ones) and for some reason in later chapters the author repeatedly refers to the MC as "the man" (though his name has already been established), which I found odd. However they don't necessarily detract from immersion or enjoyment in the story.
There aren't too many basic errors, but I would say there are some higher-order errors around placement of phrases and clauses. They're pretty consistent, but I think most readers would not notice them and they don't detract from enjoyment or understanding. I've noticed the author is very responsive to comments and corrects errors very quickly, so this is a very good sign. Later chapters have fewer errors and overall the quality of the writing in this regard seems to be improving.
Story and Character: 5.0 and 4.5
I'd say story and characters really shine. I've noticed some reviewers say that the story is too slow, but I don't agree with this assessment. The character work is being used to lay groundwork for future story work and it's done very well.
In terms of story, we are essentially getting an exploration of internal growth (I suppose you could say it is man vs. himself, if you want a simple go-to) for the first bit, since the Hineni is trying to change into a better person. There are already some hints early on as to what the Obscura wants from him and the larger political maneuvering of the gods, and it's likely the internal changes are neccessary for the plot to move forward once the proverbial excrement hits the fan. Foreshadowing is parcelled out at a fair rate and the relationship-building is center stage.
At the time of writing, we have a good idea of who each of the characters are as well as their strengths and weaknesses.
The only weakness I see is that Obscura can sometimes be disconcertingly young. It's not often and I can see she's meant to be quirky in a fish-out-of-water way, but there are times when her behaviour strikes me as simply being from cognitive immaturity rather than stemming from godly arrogance (I would have pegged her as between 14 to 16 based on some of her behaviour). I'm not sure if this is intentional, though I do get the impression both Hineni and Obscura are pretty young. She has enough darkness to her character that she feels more like her own person than a stereotype tsundere, but there are times when I think the character beat ventures too far into "cutesy child" territory to really work with her inherent viciousness.
(I'm actually divided on whether I want a 5.0 here for character or a 4.5. Be warned, I might come back and update this later.)
Overall: 4.25, rounded up to 4.5. I highly recommend this to people who enjoy slow character-pieces and slice-of-life with the potential for something more. It really is very enjoyable (look, I was going to write this review at chapter fifteen but I read until the latest update. I'm a picky, cranky old person, so listen to me), and you should definitely give it a go!
Once again Razzmatazz brings us another unique mix of cute slice-of-life in a horrifying universe. In this case, it is of a blacksmith with a severe case of depression accidentally marrying an owl god(dess). It's cuter than it sounds.
The story is well-written, with few grammer/spelling mistakes (nothing that takes me out of the story). The MC is, quite frankly, a bit too depressed in the beginning of the story, but is gradually approaching a functional human being as he gains friends (and a wife, kinda-sorta).
There's also something mystical going on with the number 3 & owls (the good guys?) and the number 4 and frogs (which are evil, apparently). It's not too clear yet, but the author is good at eventually tying these sort of plot threads up.
If you're here for the crafting side of things, that hasn't been explored too much, even compared to Dungeon Item Shop. However, I have been impressed that all the alloys mentioned were real-life alloys, which shows some research.
We got a depressed blacksmith who gets not so depressed when he gets together with his Owl girl waifu who has decided she WILL BE THE WIFE. It is made such when our sad blacksmith boy does sad boy things that a normal sad boy does. He is sad. His wife is odd, but they are both odd & she is making him less sad. Highly recommended
OK, it's good. I want it, Razzmatazz has got it, & boy do it dazzle. Romance, slice of life, a sad boy who doesn't want to be seen, a system, & there's a really really adorable thing in here. You just gotta read it so come on, you know the drill. Read it & enjoy.
If my expert marketing ploy has failed, please read the spoiler attached & if your still not interested then I tried at least.
Plot moves at a good pace. Plenty of attention is given to what characters are both thinking and saying. Plenty of mystery for the reader to imagine and fill in gaps. Excited for more! I feel the title is *slightly* misleading, but maybe it will become more important as I read more.
A slightly odd, but very charming book with likeable, albeit flawed characters. If you enjoyed Dungeon Item Shop or haven't read it and want a light lit-rpg crafting book, this is perfect for you. The numbers thing is a bit odd so far, and TBH I'm leaving a review due to a deal the author made to the readers, have fun ya'll.
The start is really heavy and depresive, i did not like it too much and it seemed to extend for too long to my taste, I like how everything got resolved and how the MC faces the events after going a bit crazy, grammar is good enough, the Owl is a pain to understand at first then I either got acostumed to that weird speech pattern or the author got better at it, maybe both, has too few chapters to judge character development or world building as there is nothing really set in stone yet.
MC seems to have trauma or be extremely shy and introvert or even be just afraid of groups of people.
Can't really say anything bad about the story so far other than its a bit confusing at times.
Too chaotic dialogs are crap. Chaotic hard to follow
well written. but the protagonist is too pathetic. and the pacing is dragged out.
without any context, its hard to empathize and becomes a chore to read.
it's not enough that he has some percieved physical deformity, he also has PTSD, is afraid that he's schizophrenia and has an anxiety disorder.