Milo lives in a steel cave within a man-made mountain of steel and concrete. He spends his days repairing the machinery that keeps the habitat livable and tinkering with the prosthetics that help his twisted body move about through the small tunnels and air shafts that are his world. He's as much a piece of discarded machinery as the equipment he keeps running.
Given a chance at being someone different will he become a hero and live in the sunlight? The light beckons, but there are secrets buried in the ground. Ancient mysteries left by races that delved deep and stayed below. Maybe only a tunnel rat culd find them?
And thanks to the artist of that handsome rat for inspiration. Find more of her work here: https://www.deviantart.com/watch/memymine/deviations
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I'm really enjoying this so far. For a writathon entry the quality is awesome.
The world feels fully fleshed out and internally consistent. The pressures it places on the characters and their responses give the story a life of its own and a sense of depth. It feels almost like a machine, with the various parts working in sync with one another.
I enjoy the prose and the pacing of the story. King's style is a great fit for the style of story they are presenting. There is a great balance between action packed moments and periods of reflection.
The system is presented in a fresh way, which can be difficult given the prevalence of LITRPG books on Royal Road. Each skill is developed and logical ( if that can be used as a descriptor for a blending of fantasy and technology)
I’m not always sold on the decisions the characters make but that just shows the investment in them the writer has been able to develop.
There are some grammar issues which sneak through but given the lack of editing time involved in writing 55K words in a little over a month this is more than understandable.
I hope to see this story continue beyond the 5th.
I came here because of the rec of Wizard's Tower author's rec. Great story with a lot of world building. One of the only stories where the out of VR is as interesting as the in VR story. The author uses a random generator for the fights, so it stays fresh and interesting. The writing is great and the characters draw you in. I really like this story and will stay with it for the long haul.