Milo lives in a steel cave within a man-made mountain of steel and concrete. He spends his days repairing the machinery that keeps the habitat livable and tinkering with the prosthetics that help his twisted body move about through the small tunnels and air shafts that are his world. He's as much a piece of discarded machinery as the equipment he keeps running. 

Given a chance at being someone different will he become a hero and live in the sunlight? The light beckons, but there are secrets buried in the ground. Ancient mysteries left by races that delved deep and stayed below. Maybe only a tunnel rat could find them?

And thanks to the artist of that handsome rat for inspiration. Find more of her work here: https://www.deviantart.com/watch/memymine/deviations

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The Walrus King

The Walrus King

The Walrus King

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Table of Contents
177 Chapters
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 1: Milo ago
Chapter 2: Heist ago
Chapter 3: How about a nice game of chess? ago
Chapter 4: Nowhere to run. ago
Chapter 5: Shadowport ago
Chapter 6: Rat on the Roofs ago
Chapter 7: Lights End ago
Chapter 8: The Basement ago
Chapter 9: Shroom gathering ago
Chapter 10: Cheating with Physics ago
Chapter 11: Real World Problems ago
Chapter 12: Leveling Up ago
Chapter 13: Bad to the Bone ago
Chapter 14: Why do you have dead worms in your pocket? ago
Chapter 15: Making new friends. ago
Chapter 16: Wash Day ago
Chapter 17: Unchained ago
Chapter 18: Apple core, nothing more ago
Chapter 19: Cichol ago
Chapter 20: Accidents ago
Chapter 21: Stinky Cheese! ago
Chapter 22: Clan Business ago
Chapter 23: Little bugs, big bugs, bugs for dinner. ago
Chapter 24: Home, sweet home. ago
Chapter 25: Once a hacker... ago
Chapter 26: Snakes! Why'd it have to be snakes? ago
Chapter 27: Kicking over the hornets nest. ago
Chapter 28: Corpse Run ago
Chapter 29: Shroom Grinding ago
Chapter 30: Salvaging Parts ago
Chapter 31: Decisions, Decisions... ago
Chapter 32: Actions have Consequences ago
Chapter 33: The Dragon is Wounded ago
Chapter 34: Delivery Boy ago
Chapter 35: Delivery Boy, part 2 ago
Chapter 36: Cheese and Apples ago
Chapter 37: Lurking ago
Chapter 38: Caught between a rock and another rock. ago
Chapter 39: Rocky Rewards ago
Chapter 40: Which rock? ago
Chapter 41: Gears turning ago
Chapter 42: Volat-Repax ago
Chapter 43: Research ago
Chapter 44: Grinding ago
Chapter 45: More grinding. ago
Chapter 46 : Scavenging ago
Chapter 47: Spare parts? ago
Chapter 48: Subragators and Throttlecogs ago
Chapter 49: Bucket Time ago
Chapter 50: The reward for a job well done... ago
Chapter 51: Dreams of the past ago
Chapter 52: BoomBoom! ago
Chapter 53: Solutions, not problems ago
Chapter 54: Chase me! ago
Chapter 55: Extra Clever Traps ago
Chapter 56: End of the Tail ago
Chapter 57: Waking up ago
Chapter 58: Waking up Again ago
Chapter 59: Partings and Choices ago
Chapter 60: So small! ago
Chapter 61: Polite Engineers Share ago
Chapter 62: Destructive Testing ago
Chapter 63: The calm before battle. ago
Chapter 64: Old friends, new friends ago
Chapter 65: We're going to need a bigger boat. ago
Chapter 66: Herald ago
Chapter 67: Breaking Bad ago
Chapter 68: Broken Things ago
Chapter 69: Blame Sydney ago
Chapter 70: Like rats fleeing a sinking ship ago
Chapter 71: Defenders Assemble! ago
Chapter 72: The Big Bang ago
Chapter 73: It's the End of the World as we know it, and I feel fine. ago
Chapter 74: Stretched Thin ago
Chapter 75: Broken? ago
Chapter 76: Interlude: Behind the Curtain ago
Chapter 77: Can't Fix Stupid ago
Chapter 78: Family ago
Chapter 79: Caged ago
Chapter 80: Double Blind ago
Interlude: Tap, Tap, click ago
Chapter 81: Story time ago
Chapter 82: Cheese Thief ago
Chapter 83: Last Meal ago
Chapter 84: Snack Time ago
Chapter 85: Thinking ago
Chapter 86: Talking with Wally ago
Chapter 87: Crossroads ago
Chapter 88: What do you do with a boy like Milo? ago
Chapter 89: Talking with Hekate ago
Chapter 90: Options ago
Chapter 91: Leveling Up ago
Chapter 92: The Rune-Boned Scout ago
Chapter 93: Fire and Flood ago
Chapter 94: Gert is a Big Doody-Pants ago
Chapter 95: Cheesey Deals ago
Chapter 96: Scavengers ago
Chapter 97: Natural Enemies ago
Chapter 98: Looking for a friend ago
Chapter 99: Second Home ago
Chapter 100: Limburger Hollow ago
Chapter 101: Overdue Books ago
Chapter 102: I have found my people! ago
Chapter 103: Tail-Fighting 101 ago
Chapter 104: Dinner with Brutus ago
Chapter 105: Cheese Class ago
Chapter 106: Breakfast with Larry ago
Chapter 107: Friendly Sparring ago
Chapter 108: Snacks ago
Chapter 109: Hamsters Hopping Happily ago
Chapter 110: Silently Sampling Sumptuous Succulent Shrooms ago
Chapter 111: Making friends along the way ago
Chapter 112: Spiders don't keep score. ago
Chapter 113: Things get mixed up ago
Chapter 114: Partner Perspective ago
Chapter 115: A place to think ago
Chapter 116: Clean Pants! ago
Chapter 117: Tunnels and Traps ago
Chapter 118: A visit to Larry's House ago
Chapter 119: Three on One ago
Chapter 120: Cookies for Heroes ago
Chapter 121: Clan Secrets ago
Chapter 122: Operation Larry ago
Chapter 123: Clumpybigtoe ago
Chapter 124: The Rational Decisions of Students of the Arcane Arts ago
Chapter 125: The Duel ago
Chapter 126: and another duel ago
Chapter 127: Final Duel ago
Chapter 128: Circles ago
Chapter 129: Jelly beans are Hero Food. ago
Chapter 130: Dinner with Arlothe ago
Chapter 131: Sparring ago
Chapter 132: Not-Sneaky guys ago
Chapter 133: Different Like Me! ago
Chapter 134: Midnight at the Library of Death! ago
Chapter 135: Bad Guys! ago
Chapter 136: Because we care ago
Chapter 137: Tunnlemuggles ago
Chapter 138: This is a wrench... ago
Chapter 139: Scouts doing what scouts do best. ago
Going Forward (non-story update) ago
Chapter 140: Poker and Pings ago
Chapter 141: And Poison makes Four ago
Chapter 142: Runes and Repairs ago
Chapter 143: Iron Spider ago
Chapter 144: Too much Bleu ago
Chapter 145: Dwarven Holiday ago
Chapter 146: Conclave ago
Chapter 147: Investigations ago
Chapter 148: A visit with the Eels ago
Chapter 149: March of the Spiders ago
Chapter 150: The Raid ago
Chapter 151: Pickled Picnics and Plucky Puffyfurs ago
Chapter 152: The Cheese Caravan ago
Chapter 153: Further Investigations ago
Chapter 154: Words in the Dark ago
Chapter 155: To the end. ago
Chapter 156: Jellybean break ago
Chapter 157: Raiding the Ratkin Dungeon!! ago
Chapter 158: The Big Scary Noise ago
Chapter 159: Dwarven Thunder ago
Chapter 160: Tasty New Cheese ago
Chapter 161: The Iron Spider takes the Scenic Route ago
Chapter 162: Spiders, Spiders, Everywhere! ago
Chapter 163: Salvaging the Situation ago
Chapter 164: When some idiot screws up your crafty plans.... ago
Chapter 165: Wait...you have beer?! ago
Chapter 166: Larry 1, Reality 0 ago
Chapter 167: The Battle of the Gathering Fields ago
Chapter 168: Healing and Puffcakes ago
Chapter 169: "Magic Cheese" ago
Chapter 170: Blood work ago
Chapter 171: This will hurt a lot! ago
Chapter 172: Smiling ago
Chapter 173: A delicate mix of strength, torture, and compassion ago
Chapter 174: Someone is Sad ago
Chapter 175: Battlelines are drawn ago

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reteiker
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In the name of science! magic! And CHEESE!

Reviewed at: Chapter 61: Polite Engineers Share

The following contains minor spoilers for the first few chapters.

Meet Milo, A an escaped child-sized E-slave/lab experiment living in a hole inside your neighbourhood arcology.

He is the sole reason the Arcology sewer system is not flooding your apartment with liquid shit, and the reason the edible foodcubes are still being shipped to you, and the reason you have water to drink, and why the lights are still on, and he is the reason those assholes from the arcology next door didn't set up an illegal slave driving cryptomine in your basement. You will not thank Milo, because you do not believe the story of the magical sewer gremlin is real, that is hearsay AND THAT IS VIDEO OF A RAT SWIMMING IN SHIT CARL! IT. IS. NOT. PROOF!

... Ahem. As I was saying, Milo might be in a teensy-tiny need of a day off, so what would be a better way to relax than that sweet-swanky-spankin' brand new revolutionary VRMMO made by the god-complex quantum super computer. The game supposedly even has a race that comes with a tail, like Milo!

Gibster
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I came here because of the rec of Wizard's Tower author's rec.  Great story with a lot of world building.  One of the only stories where the out of VR is as interesting as the in VR story.  The author uses a random generator for the fights, so it stays fresh and interesting.  The writing is great and the characters draw you in.  I really like this story and will stay with it for the long haul.

Zazertron
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Real life cyborg vent kid becomes in-game RatKin

Reviewed at: 50: The reward for a job well done...

The character Milo is great and fun to read. The story is well written with good grammar and no visible spelling mistakes.

The story itself is set in a scifi world of evil corpos. But people hav VR games to escape to. Milo is a fun little hero trying to keep things running in a world of corrupt corpos, at the same time trying to enjoy his new life in the VR world.

 

Fun read, hidden hero, scifi real world meets VR fantasy.

Joaquim
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After devouring the author's other fiction in 1 day, i got intrigued and stumbled upon this little gem here. Situated in the same game-world, it has a MC with a unique, but sad, background and really good world-building. The switches between real and virtual world are well-placed and not confusing. These chapters are like some good cheddar, you just can't get enough of it!

Owlish
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TLDR: Great storytelling, great characters, amazing worldbuilding. Written by someone with English as his native tongue, first draft, minor mistakes creep in but nothing immersion breaking.

I'm not a huge fan of VRMMO stories, unless they have real world implications. This story [and the author's other one] do. We have a cyberpunkish world, with organized crime, powerful corporations, cyberwear with significant drawbacks, huge differences between the rich and poor, and a massively powerful AI who has his own agenda. And that's with most of the story happening online.

The MC is no Mary Sue- he has setbacks, pain, and flaws. He's not a nice character, although he has done rather positive things for his hab. He is powerful ingame, but tends to defeat his major enemies through cleverness rather than through ingame skills.

Check it out!

chumponimys
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This story starts extremely well. Both the real world and LitRPG aspects are very well done--it has me wanting to read more about both. We have a character who's doing interesting things in both, and both have their own plotlines.

However, I think the story may be suffering some of the same issues as Walrus's other work. I haven't read Butcher of Gadobhra, but the top review on that story echoes my sentiments here:

[T]he story goes from a well contained semi-slice of life story about this village and the contract worker inhabitants into a voluminous multicharacter smorgasbord of conflicting viewpoints and omniscient character hoppings that quickly leaves behind the compelling and somewhat charming pov's of our four protagonists in favor of trying to cram every possible strand of narrative into the same storyline.

We're seeing the same thing in the latest arc, unfortunately. Our interesting main character is being neglected for new characters. And while the new are all interesting on their own, there is way too much happening at the moment with viewpoints jumping everywhere.

Meanwhile, plotlines that had interesting movement with cliffhangers (like

Milo's siblings finding out about him

or his "girlfriend"--who we haven't even seen in-game in probably 50 chapters) are growing cold.

I can't help but feel that the writeathon has hurt this story--sending Walrus off on tangents and not planning out resolutions with proper pacing.

This is still a very fun read--don't get me wrong. And it's something I'd suggest to anyone interested. The characters have an abundance of charm, despite the darker backdrop they're set in. Walrus does a great job of setting them up for us to root for. But since this last writeathon, a lot of plotlines have been left to go stale while the pacing and planning have been thrown off the rails.

Elrood
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Well written, yet could have been so much more.

Reviewed at: Chapter 55: Extra Clever Traps

Milo IRN was interesting concept and fun cyberpunk story in the making.
Milo in VR was boring same old.
Ended up skeeping VR, looking for the IRL parts, unfortunatelly theye were dimishing with time and after the ark of Kaminski finished, they disapeared completely.

Still high marks, as the story is cleanly (and well) written.

FooBarTrixieBell
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Milo is a very likeable antisocial character, he manages to be nice and to get along with people comically and almost accidentally.

I like that the game is an actual game with NPCs who are actually intelligent and don't know they are in a game rather than some random real world game power or teleport into a game world. The fact that Milo still lives in and cares about the real world is a big difference and makes the story feel more beliveable, it removes much of the suspension of disbelief that many books of this genre require.

The story is well written, doesn't feel rushed and although there are errors (many of which I should be reporting in the comments but I get too caught up in the story to do so, /sorry/) they don't detract overly from the reading experience. It even feels like there is an overarching plan for the plot, something which is refreshing in this genre where 800 chapter 2 million+ word behamoths just don't go anywhere.

Very worth the read.

Batcard
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Fantastic story of a Litrpg and a MC who is a techie gutter rat both in game and in real life and happy about it. A unique take on the series for me and I hope they continue to write it. I give it 5 stars because it is entertaining and his class and system is highly entertaining and story attention grabbing.

TamaNz
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I'm really enjoying this so far. For a writathon entry the quality is awesome.

The world feels fully fleshed out and internally consistent. The pressures it places on the characters and their responses give the story a life of its own and a sense of depth. It feels almost like a machine, with the various parts working in sync with one another.

I enjoy the prose and the pacing of the story. King's style is a great fit for the style of story they are presenting. There is a great balance between action packed moments and periods of reflection.

The system is presented in a fresh way, which can be difficult given the prevalence of LITRPG books on Royal Road. Each skill is developed and logical ( if that can be used as a descriptor for a blending of fantasy and technology)

I’m not always sold on the decisions the characters make but that just shows the investment in them the writer has been able to develop.

There are some grammar issues which sneak through but given the lack of editing time involved in writing 55K words in a little over a month this is more than understandable.

I hope to see this story continue beyond the 5th.