MARVEL: GAME MAKER SYSTEM

MARVEL: GAME MAKER SYSTEM

by NunuXD

Alex was an ordinary person with the dream of one day being transmigrated to a magical world.

But what he didn't expect is that he would be transmigrated to a world much more than that, a world he knew very well, but instead of being given a system that would empower him, he was given a system that allowed him to make games, and the more people played, the more powers he would get.

Tony Stark: I hate this! I can do in real life everything this Watch Dogs guy does, but why can't I stop playing?

Hulk: HULK HATES DARK SOULS!!! HULK SMASH DARK SOUS ARRRHHHHGGG!!!

Nick Fury: If any agent can't complete the Hitman game by next week, that agent will be fired from the Shield!

A world of superheroes, but who controls everything is "only" a game developer.

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Zhanye
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I had read a story like this somewhere before, but the focus the other author was giving wasn't what I wanted. But this author luckily stayed focused on writing about game making and how MARVEL characters react to those games.

The main character is not the typical Chinese cliché that keeps causing problems for other people, or wanting to kill someone for saying something wrong, no, the main character is actually a very charismatic and carefree person, just having fun with the games he makes and with reactions with other players. (I even liked how the author focused on 'Ned', who is always ignored only as Peter Parker's best friend, and also how he portrayed the X-Men feeling inside the games.

As to the date the story takes place is still unclear, mainly because the protagonist doesn't know he's in the world of MARVEL (which makes some misunderstoods funnier than they normally would).

The only thing that bothered me a bit were some grammar mistakes I found while reading it, but according to the author's notes, apparently he's going to hire a proofreader to fix this, so I'm glad it's just temporary.

Anyway, it's a nice story with a nice rhythm. I hope the author keeps writing.

AlejoTheBear
Overall

Overall the short bits and frequent PoV changes make this story very easy to binge. Its also a new flavor on what id call the shopkeep trope focusing on games, specifically minecraft right now.

Those are the pros.

The cons are the reletive inexperience of the author and the problems that arise from that. Weird grammer and stilted dialoge leave a good bit to be desired, but inspite of that the premise is entiving and fun enough that i want to keep reading even if i get pulled out of the story.

Xipheon
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A kid playing with action figures

Reviewed at: 13 - X-Men on Minecraft

The best thing I can say about this story is that it is fun.  Everyone is nice and it's a feel good story.

The problem is that it's like a teenager is watching his younger brother play with his toys and writing it all down into a story.  None of the Marvel characters feel like their actual characters, they're all the same character (the MC/author) wearing a different skin.  Everyone is way too impressed and happy with the game.

Nowhere is this more obvious than when Professor X shows up.  It's clearly a kid pretending to be a wise old man in a wheelchair, where the objective wasn't to show how the real character would react, but to just have the MC have a polite chat with him, to have the Professor praise the main character.

The system is also completely arbitrary.  It can basically do everything, whatever the author needs it to do.  There are no problems, everything is just "system, add this" and it's solved.

In the end, this feels like it's written not by an author but by a teenager that's just having fun, so I don't even feel right criticizing it too much.  It cannot even be criticized as a proper novel, it clearly isn't one.  There's no antagonists, no conflicts, not even really a story.  Just some characters having fun playing Minecraft.  For some people though, that's enough.

Acedia11
Overall

Fun and fast food story

Reviewed at: 30 - Suspect

This story is a fun fast food story. It's something you can read and skim without minding the detais and just read for fun. The essence of this story is that it shouldne be taken seriously, only in face value. The problem with this?

It's a fun fast food story, and one of it's fundamental characteristic is lacking. This is easily to be skimmed through and understood, the lack of chapters is a disadvantage, but this is a new story so it's understandable. Thats basically it.

Overall, I can recommend this to you if you need something to read and just throw away every problem.

Blahh5542
Overall

I have read a lot on this platform, but this is the first new idea I have seen in awhile. 

The story is extremely binge-worthy and I am hooked!

My only complaint could be that their are slight grammar issues, but nothing significant enough to disrupt my reading experience.

Highly Recommend!

memahalo
Overall

This story is not the best written story on the site. It does not have the deepest, most airtight plot. Sometimes you can see that the spell checker substituted in the wrong word and the author didn't see it. Sometimes you might wish that the characters did something else

But these all come with writing experience (I would think) and time and are part of the learning process. And that's okay

And this story has something that I believe trumps these thing. Fun. The story is fun. It's fun to read. It's fun to imagine. And most importantly, it seems that the author is having fun writing it.

So NunuXD, continue having fun writing. It got some people to smile while reading it and I sure hope you had a smile while writing it 

Akhil Sihra
Overall

I just love it when authors try something different. Although the writing quality could have been better, I personally have no complaints. A really addictive story. I can't wait to read more.

Thank you so much for writing and sharing this with us.

P.S. When is it in the timeline exactly?

Arukorstza
Overall

A fun story about people having fun

Reviewed at: 31 - Are You Afraid?

Granted the story does have some issues, mispelled words, odd sentenses and the like. But the premise and the general execution of it are S-tier so far in my opinion. At least in terms of a story with a vaguely slice-of-life feel to it. You need to be patient and to not be too obsessed about the plot progressing, usual slife-of-life stuff.

Reading about the protagonist making games and watching with glee as people enjoy their creation is genuinly interesting to me. The story generate the same general feel you get when you see someone else enjoying a game you liked.

Lunareadsbookz
Overall

It is an amazing Fiction about amazing games

Reviewed at: 17 - Herobrine

It is one of the best fictions i have read on this site. Most of the stories you read on here either have hundreds of plot holes or hundreds of grammer mistakes; actually sometimes you get both grammar mistakes and plot holes. Also sometimes the plot just isnt that good. This story has few plot holes and few grammar mistakes. It also has an amazing plot that is different than any other novel i have read. It is easy to binge and has a great format. The only disadvantage is the lack of chapters but those will come with time. All in all great work!

Vitanima
Overall

Almost dropped this at the start, Glad I didnt.

Reviewed at: 31 - Are You Afraid?

I almost dropped this at chapter 6 and was about to give this a 2 star review, I wrote like a 6 paragraph review on why I enjoyed the premise and the author has promise, but how the writing was really off in the beginning. I then decided "You know what, ill read a bit more just to be fair about the review" and not soon later i had caught up to the latest chapter and found myself wanting more.

 

There's no doubt there are things wrong with the story, its very amateurish at times, and its not a truly original and unique concept as its very similar to "Black Tech Internet Cafe system" But if you can get past the first few chapters of confusing, off-putting, and weirdly paced writing, the story and ideas behind this novel really shine.

 

Cant wait for more chapters and for the MC to release a game other than minecraft for people to freak out about.