Millennial Mage (A Slice of Life, Progression Fantasy)

I am in love with this story. A unique setting where humanity is fighting against the environmental magic with capsule-like cities that house populations with caravans trading between them. Humans are forced to plan the abandonments of their cities as the magic in the world swells like an immune response to reject them over the course of centuries.

In addition, while magic is common in the world at large and the cities themselves, only mages who have metal-based circuitry inscribed in their skin can fully use it. Each mage shapes their magic through their perception of magic and the inscribed circuitry they use. Some have mental enhancements, some are able to summon matter into existence, some can heal wounds, or teleport, or a combination of abilities. The magic system feels defined without being super crunchy. The author clearly has thought about limits, I would put it just under the magic system in the Mistborn series in rating the "hardness" of the world.

There are a few grammar or spelling errors in this story, probably averaging 1-2 per chapter. You might read "reign" when the author meant "rein" but they are mostly minor distractions.

The main character is interesting and likeable, but her voice doesn't always feel consistent. Sometimes she is socially awkward and other times she comes off as a witty and snarky. Sometimes she is aware of how little she knows having skipped the traditional apprenticeship but then she will disregard the advice of a centuries old master mage. I feel that her recklessness should have consequences that the main character is dodging, and I'm curious how long that will last. Ultimately though, the MC is an interesting window from which to view the world and this story.

I highly recommend reading this story.

I enjoy reading this series thank you to the author

There is a lot going for this series that I like the world building, story pacing and the magic feels inventive and original. 

TLDR: World building, magic system, story pacing excellent 3 stars!  Too lucky MC and as of yet unexplained plot holes minus 1.5 stars. Some developement and plot holes filled by chapter 50 and further developement and education by chapter 66.  Solid 4 stars.

I feel there is a problem with the development of the main character Tala.  Its my opinion that Tala is willfully jumping into holes where the author fixes all her  problems.  The author has emphasized the dangers of magic.  Tala aggressively experiments with the unknown and miraculously discovers something new or rare by luck.  Its not rigorous testing or theory or meticulous data gathering or even godly insight (which I also think can be a cop out if used too much) its by fortune that her "experiments" turn out with minor consequences and major benefits.  This is happening almost every chapter so far.  That IMHO is not good for character development or plot development.  That is not in the flavor of a realistic story but it could also be what the author intends for Tala to be extra-ordinarily lucky.

Let me give two examples:

1) Defiance of the Fall the good luck MC becomes super powerful through lucky encounters which feel contrived by the author.  A huge story with 700+ chapters but each arc has the same formula.  MC is weaker than enemy and through luck overcomes to the next level.  Rinse and repeat.

2) Tori transmigrated where Tori the MC has bad luck, fate consistantly gives Tori bad situations.  This bad luck is unbelieveable and a direct result of a game system.  Tori's game system fate bad luck is explained and detailed throughout the plot and makes the unbelievable acceptable.  Tori uses many methods which include planning, research, resource mangement and development to overcome the bad luck.    

Again this is my opinion that not having a supremly lucky MC will improve the story.  By Chapter 66 Tala has had much more developement away from the lucky MC plot armor so I am very hopeful.

There are plot holes which leave me with a disconnect.  There could be a valid reason later in the story but so far I dont see any hints or foreshadowing.  Why do mages have holes in their knowledge of magic?  Why dont mages know or actively seek out everything about magic?  If something has magic or an affect on magic would not a mage know something about it? 

Holes in common mage knowledge leads to innovation by the MC with exaggerated benefits.  Its my opinion that some of the discoveries are not that mind blowing yet the effects are out of proportion.  If the benefits are that good for little risk then why hasnt some mage already discovered it?  By chapter 68 the author alludes to further explanation for these plot holes.

I will continue reading to see how everything develops.  Please take this feed back as well meant commentary.

Ok so i paid money to read this on patreon, so i obviously love this. Lets see...

Style: im not a writer but the story makes it very easy to imagine everything that is happening. Very fluid. Didnt even think about it until seeing the style category.

Story: its fun and interesting. There is always something new happening,most of it based on something that was hinted at before. Thee is a bigger picture slowly becoming clear. There are parts with strong fast action, followwed by calm and funny moments of contemplation and character interaction. For a magic setting there have in my opinion not be enough secret cults with forbidden knowledge jet, one is ok but im really into secret society stuff, so i was hoping for a secret war situation. Also there is a magic system that allows the mage to grow in different ways, but sadly we dont get enough explanation, since the mc is just out school and doesnt need to relearn the basics. The advanced magic lore is nice,though. 

Grammar: didnt notice any mistakes.

Character: Side characters feel like people with opinions and motives, who handle according to those, mc is a special snowflake,but there are more special snowflakes out there and whats a mc without the drive to improve? Boring .

I would recommend this story to anyone who wants to read about a mage becoming even more magical through hard work,creativity and taking risks.

So far I nothing but good things to say about this story. It is a very unique magic system and an interesting world that is well flushed out. The characters within have variety and substance enough to feel real and relatable to.  As far as grammar, spelling, and style, I have no complaints. It might not be completely flawless, but is good enough that the occasional minor mistake doesn't detract or distract from the reading. Can't wait to read more of it.  

I don't know what it is about this story but it has that special something that makes me keep refreshing to see if the next chapter is posted yet.  Maybe it's the idea of a world where humanity has built a civilization that runs cities with planned obsolescence.  Or maybe it's Tala's attitude of taking dead end paths out of sheer spite.  All I know is I want more.

I love so much about this that I don't know where to start. Excellent writing, intriguing magic systems, relatable characters, smooth world building, consistent internal logic, and a really great story.  I hope the author maintains their consistently high quality throughout.  I can't wait to see where the story will go next!

As a patron of this story this review is as of chapter 60

I’m an avid RR reader and an old hand at it. This story is therefor not anything brand new, using some old tropes. What it does have is an interesting magic system and decent grammar. The MC is a bit overpowered and unnaturally lucky in their unluckiness, so if OP MC’s aren’t your cup of tea this isn’t one for you. There are hints further down the line that the world is bigger than what we’ve been shown. The story is also fairly slow, not much really happens in the first 60 chapters, but I like a slow burn story myself.

I just found this story from a review on Reddit and binged reading it.  The characters are excellent and interesting without being overpowered. The author does a great job combining a character  you become invested in with descriptions you want to learn more about.  No info dumps, just a beautifully written story.

I just love the story until now. At time of writting, the first arc isn't even completed, but I enjoyed every chapter. It's a new world with different rules and the author managed to switch things up compared to your average fantasy world with mages and magical creatures. I'll be following this one with geat interest.

I agree with most reviews about how well done is the overall plot, characterization and magic system. I was initially willing to overlook some basic mistakes but sadly the author isn't going to solve them, hence the score drop. The three main problems are:

1) it makes sense for the MC to do stupid things, it's in line with her age, personality and background. The problem is how she still hasn't encountered anybody around her that got mad about it, everybody just rolls their eyes at best, demands to be more careful in the future and forget the thing. Next time they'll just do the same.

2) the author decided to use a particular writing style where third and first POV are mixed together. There is a reason it's not used in 99.99% of the cases

3 the main problem is that the author is oblivious to the concept of time-skip. Everything is narrated, literally! Not a single day and hour in it is skipped, doesn't matter if nothing interesting is happening. We start with her waking up, stretching, preparing the bath, washing, checking her coinquiline, getting something to eat, enjoying the meal, etc.. only after a long while do we finally get to the "event" of the current day. Overall chapters are very long but filled with useless, repeated things