Millennial Mage (A Slice of Life, Progression Fantasy)

Millennial Mage (A Slice of Life, Progression Fantasy)

by JLMullins

The world is wild, untamed. Humanity thrives, but only in isolated, well defended cities, ever shrinking as the wilds slowly reclaim all that was taken. The most capable magic users are raised up as Mages to serve mankind, further their cause, and defend them over the course of millennia.

Tala is freshly graduated from the magic academy and determined to make her own way in the world. She hopes to pay off her massive debts, quickly, but still plans on living each and every day to the fullest. Too bad the Academy left some glaring holes in her practical education. Loath to let that slow her down, and with no patience for a standard, low-paid apprenticeship (intended to fill many of those knowledge gaps), Tala strives to learn and improve as rapidly as she can on her own. Her unorthodox methods for preserving her own life allow her to take greater risks in search of profit and advancement, much to the surprise of those around her.


I do hope you enjoy this tale, but let me know what you think either way! Critique, both positive and negative, is welcome.

Release schedule is weekly: M-W-F

Thank you for your time and for giving this story a try.


AUTHOR'S NOTE: If this is found on a site other than Royal Road, or the linked Patreon, it was not posted by the author. Please find this tale, here:

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/47826/millennial-mage

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121 Chapters
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter: 1 - New Beginnings ago
Chapter: 2 - The Caravanner’s Guild ago
Chapter: 3 - Dinner ago
Chapter: 4 - A Simple Home ago
Chapter: 5 - A Day of Preparation ago
Chapter: 6 - In Holly’s Workshop ago
Chapter: 7 - The Old Made New ago
Chapter: 8 - Delivery and New Sight ago
Chapter: 9 - It’s Just Glue ago
Chapter: 10 - Don’t Let Them Poach You ago
Chapter: 11 - Mysteries and Chowder ago
Chapter: 12 - One Has to Dream ago
Chapter: 13 - Late Night Meetings ago
Chapter: 14 - An Auspicious Start ago
Chapter: 15 - The Journey Begins ago
Chapter: 16 - Arcanous Beasts ago
Chapter: 17 - The Evening Encampment ago
Chapter: 18 - The Wilds Are My Workout ago
Chapter: 19 - Not Soon Enough ago
Chapter: 20 - Around the ‘Death’ Tree ago
Chapter: 21 - Berries and Jerky ago
Chapter: 22 - A Frustratingly Fitting Name ago
Chapter: 23 - Around the Dinner Table ago
Chapter: 24 - There Would Be a Next Time ago
Chapter: 25 - A Blood Star ago
Chapter: 26 - Please Don’t Kill Us ago
Chapter: 27 - That’s…a Big Bull ago
Chapter: 28 - Messy Work ago
Chapter: 29 - You’re a Mage, Figure It Out ago
Chapter: 30 - A Morning to Decide ago
Chapter: 31 - The Foundation of Any Fighting Art ago
Chapter: 32 - Terribly Wrong ago
Chapter: 33 - Creature of Magic ago
Chapter: 34 - Aftermath ago
Chapter: 35 - Power Aplenty ago
Chapter: 36 - Through the Gatehouse ago
Chapter: 37 - A Spinner of Tales ago
Chapter: 38 - Little Shop of Wonders ago
Chapter: 39 - The Wandering Magician ago
Chapter: 40 - The Beginning of True Magehood ago
Chapter: 41 - To the Ending Grove ago
Chapter: 42 - Well… That’s New ago
Chapter: 43 - Unexpected Results ago
Chapter: 44 - Food and Inquiry ago
Chapter: 45 - So Much More to Learn ago
Chapter: 46 - Bad Birdy? ago
Chapter: 47 - A Day of Departure ago
Chapter: 48 - Potential Conflict ago
Chapter: 49 - Cyclops and Conversation ago
Chapter: 50 - Back on the Road ago
Chapter: 51 - Settling in ago
Chapter: 52 - Through the Pass, Again ago
Chapter: 53 - Worst Proposal Ever ago
Chapter: 54 - Back to Basics ago
Chapter: 55 - Interruptions and Progress ago
Chapter: 56 - A Talented Teacher ago
Chapter: 57 - Right! The Hammer ago
Chapter: 58 - Undiminished Intensity ago
Chapter: 59 - A Cow a Day? ago
Chapter: 60 - Set on Unconventionality ago
Chapter: 61 - It Should Be Fun ago
Chapter: 62 - A Silly Accusation ago
Chapter: 63 - Crush ago
Chapter: 64 - One Thousand Ounces, Gold ago
Chapter: 65 - Smell Like Blood and Death ago
[NOT A CHAPTER] I've Been a Bit Sick ago
Chapter: 66 - A Foolish Form of Immortality ago
Chapter: 67 - I Might Need to Be Attacked More Often ago
Chapter: 68 - More Dangerous Than We Realize ago
Chapter: 69 - Not Nice ago
Chapter: 70 - Understatement ago
Chapter: 71 - I’m Going to Become an Archon ago
Chapter: 72 - Are You Heavier? ago
Chapter: 73 - Flow ago
Chapter: 74 - Worth Every Copper ago
Chapter: 75 - This Won’t Kill You, Directly ago
Chapter: 76 - Yay, Me… ago
Chapter: 77 - Already Lost to the World ago
Chapter: 78 - Group Breakfast Deal ago
Chapter: 79 - Mana ago
Chapter: 80 - That Has Merit ago
Chapter: 81 - A Hodgepodge Foundation ago
Chapter: 82 - Fleeing the Madness of Reality ago
Chapter: 83 - She’s a Scary Lady ago
Chapter: 84 - Watching for a Trap ago
Chapter: 85 - About Time You Finished ago
Chapter: 86 - A Taste of Human Blood ago
Chapter: 87 - Wish Me Luck? ago
Chapter: 88 - The Real Work ago
Chapter: 89 - What the Rust? ago
Chapter: 90 - False Choices ago
Chapter: 91 - Plentiful and Free ago
Chapter: 92 - The Crux of The Matter at Hand ago
Chapter: 93 - In Ancient Times ago
Chapter: 94 - That’s A Bit Embarrassing ago
Chapter: 95 - To End a Very Long Day ago
Chapter: 96 - Progress is Progress ago
Chapter: 97 - More Questions ago
Chapter: 98 - Mistress Odera ago
Chapter: 99 - Only a Mage Protector ago
Chapter: 100 - Crystal ago
Chapter: ?? - Fool’s Folly ago
Chapter: 101 - A Calm, Uneventful Evening ago
Chapter: 102 - I’m Hardly Standard ago
Chapter: 103 - A Start ago
Chapter: 104 - That Seems Bad ago
Chapter: 105 - Practice ago
Chapter: 106 - Potent Creature ago
Chapter: 107 - The Dark, Cold Forest ago
Chapter: 108 - Nightshift ago
Chapter: 109 - Leshkin ago
Chapter: 110 - One Way to Protect the Caravan ago
Chapter: 111 - Outside the Defenses ago
Chapter: 112 - On Overwatch ago
Chapter: 113 - Welcome to Makinaven ago
Chapter: 114 - Less Than Ideal ago
Chapter: 115 - Needed Support ago
Chapter: 116 - Higher in Makinaven ago
Chapter: 117 - Espresso? ago
Chapter: 118 - Into the Constructionist Guild ago
Chapter: 119 - Jevin ago

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TheAbyssStaresBack
Overall

Mostly well written but unbelievable plot armor

Reviewed at: Chapter: 34 - Aftermath

There are a few things that don't make sense, like no mages realizing they're eating arcanous beast meat over decades. Overall though the story is interesting and well written. One thing that annoys me however is the plot armor MC has. She keeps on doing stupid, ill-advised things and getting rewarded for it. When are there going to be lasting consequences because of her poor choices that causes her to grow as a character?

Etly
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The story follows a fledgling mage, Tala, fresh out of the mage tower. Not that anyone is gonna know that's the case if it's up to her. Full fledged mages are the ones that get the big bucks after all. 

Tala is a bit easily distracted but definitely quick witted. More importantly she is inventive and thinks outside the box. Which is a character trait that is always nice to see, but in a story that is about magic it is the hands down the best freaking character trait possible. 

The story takes its time ot introduce the character and world at a reasonable pace, there is definitely action to be found aplenty here make no mistake, but exploration of both magic and this strange world she lives in has been the focus so far. 

 The magic is just my cup of tea. Not so scientific it turns into a physics lesson with the word magic slapped onto it half haphazardly every once in a while, but neither is it unexplainable miracles called forth simply by the "appropriate" posturing and gravitas. Probably my favourite iteration of magic I've read on RLL yet. 

Didn't notice anything amiss grammatically so 5 stars from me.

If you like magic or fantasy, I'd recommend you read it. 

uiytt
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(Please don't kill me for my english)

So, I feel this is going to be pretty controversial.

First thing, I agree that this story is exceptional on a lot of points. I was very impressed when I started this story, by how much was done right.

So let's start with the good.

The first thing that strike is the impressive world building. There seems to have a  lot of thoughts put into creating this world. The idea of short-life cities is very interesting and there is some very good idea to explain the why and how of everything.

So another very good point is the magic system, again it's complexe and well thought, it's the first time I see a system like this and even better it comes with it's own progression and repercussions on the world.

And the last good point is that the character has an interesting background. The idea of an indebted new mage is new enough that we're interested about how she is goin to solve that.

Big 👍 for starting the story directly when she quit the school instead of going through a long useless school part.

The bad

Now to say that everyhting is perfect in this story is false, and I have mainly two things I want to discuss :

 

The character is too perfect : Literally, the character is better than everyone else on pretty much everything or at least she is very good at it. She learn quicker, is stronger, has better ideas, has a bigger mana pool, better defense, she is also very nice and understanding and everything.

The only slight issue she has is that she is reckless, but it doesn't matter since she will manage to do everything without too much problem even thought some things are supposed to be extremely difficult.

And this is really the core of the problem, you can't really be interested when a character is better than almost everyone else and has little to no struggle for basically anything.

 

The second point that I didn't like much in this story, is that he plot doesn't seems to go anywhere. There is definitely some progression but mainly, we basically feels like some random things are happening to the character and she is just getting more money / more power. (Or this is to show how great she is)

 

TL:DR : Very good world building and magic system, Character feels like a Mary Sue, the plot seems to go nowhere.

 

FaultedBeing
Overall

Its a really well written story with new chapters arriving regualrly. The world is well written and the characters and character interacitons are pretty great. I guess i'm not that picky of a reader but I have read enough to know quality when I see it and this is a ggood read. (i don't typically write reviews frankly so im not entierly sure what else to say :) )

badu
Overall

Great progression fantasy story, with a fun, relatable main character and a plot that hooks you in and wont let you go!

Couldn't recommend it more and I cant wait to see where Tala and Terry go next.  This story really deserves a wider readership.

The author is great with comms and regular updates which is really appreciated.

luda305
Overall

Transplant Millennial Problems to Very Unique Magi

Reviewed at: Chapter: 110 - One Way to Protect the Caravan

As the other review mentioned, the story has a wildly original and interesting magic system involving magical metal tattoos.  This is combined with equally crazy worldbuilding.  But, it's all presented naturally to us, and not amateurishly dumped on us like too many stories on this site.  So, many, many kudos. (That said, the whole thing about the mages wearing skimpy clothing is ... odd).

Overall, the story has a slight bit of a satirical take to it.  Imagine trying to translate the trials and tribulations of ordinary millenials in America into a fantasy equivalent (e.g., too much debt, higher ed that didn't teach you anything, introductory jobs that don't pay you anything, the world being far more complex than you could have imagined as a student), and that's a bit what you have here.  That said, it's a very light touch and frankly you'd easily overlook it because the story is so well told.

No idea really what the plot is.  We are taking it slow right now and we're a bit slice of life.  Like 39 chapters and it's maybe a few weeks in-story, where she's been in one city, then a caravan, then just arrived in another city.  And while it's slow, there's so much going on that it doesn't feel slow. Which is funny given that she has a bit of a time perception magic going on.

EDIT: So, we're 110 chapters in and it's clearly a slice-of-life story. The millenial transplant problems continue aplenty, and frankly I find a disturbing (if accurate) comparison between the higher mages (archons) and their highly specialized knowledge and modern capitalism. 

That said, one of the other themes was was prevalent earlier (though I didn't mention it) is that the protagonist is exceptionally powerful and advanced.  That said, the theme dials itself a fair bit back once the protagonist returns from her first caravan round trip.  First, the author reveals the world has an exponential power scale, rather than linear, somewhat like a xianxia.  The result is that while the protagonist ahead of the curve based on her age and experience, she's still small fry and bigger, badder meanies squish her occasionally.  Second, given that the protagonist is physically robust, the author starts to throw mental issues at the protagonist.  Distraction, ADHD, memory alteration, possible light brainwashing, etc. So take that for what it is. 

JcW Swe
Overall

I just binged this, and it's really really good!

 

The grammar, worldbuilding and character development is great. The story is about a young girl, freshly out of a magical academy and starting her career in the magical community. Sure, her power up is realatively quick. I usually like it to take a bit longer in stories to make it more believable, even though the MC in these kind of stories need to be better than average to make it enjoyable. Even so, the power up might still not be as OP too quickly by how dangerous her world she lives in seem to be. 

 

I'm mostly saddened I caught up in the story and need to wait for every chapter to come out. I don't have much critique to give, neither constructive or otherwise. I just hope the author keep on posting, make some tweaks here and there (if they feel it's needed), and thereafter publish it. Because this story is publishworthy for sure. 

 

Sorry I don't have much feedback to give at this moment but thanks to the author for posting this story on RR! 

Flameburst
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Great worldbuilding and a fun magic system. The style is neat and i really dig how well put-together the society and the magic system are.

Unfortunately the MC is one of the biggest Mary Sues I've ever seen. Instantly beloved by everyone? Check. Smarter than everyone else? Check. (Not really, other supposedly smart characters just get hit with the idiot stick when she is around) Her literal plot armor makes her nigh invulnerable before she gets in her first fight, and so many things magically work out for her that even the MC herself comments on it. It is also frankly weird that every other character gets hit with the idiot stick whenever she wants to keep something secret. You'd think that mages who have commented on both seeing and smelling iron could figure out she smears iron salve on her skin...

Of course she also gets weirdly ignorant about things she has no excuse for being ignorant about. You'd think someone who went to magic university would not be surprised that magic is easier when you know what you are doing. Yet somehow apparently none of her teachers ever bothered mentioning that magic that literally burns gold to use gets more efficient if you have a clear picture of what you are trying to do.

Helixical
Overall

The heroine of this story channels every Fucking New Guy story I've ever heard or been involved in. It's actually hilarious. The plot thus far has been her dramatically lurching from one massive, ignorance fueled fuckup to the next, all the while desperately trying to learn on the job.

The only thing this story is missing is some old timers muttering in the background about how she's the dumbest piece of shit they've ever seen before heaving a gusty sigh and going to fix her most recent critical mistake.

the13thdragon
Overall

This is an excellent story with good characters and a very interesting and detailed magic system. It is fairly fast-paced with new things happening and being discovered all the time and has so far avoided getting bogged down. This combined with the rapid update rate and the female main character (there just aren't enough such stories) makes it my favorite story currently.