Chronicles of a Fallen Matriarch

Chronicles of a Fallen Matriarch

by elenaV

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With trouble as her only constant bedmate, the only aim, after being exiled, was to spend her life in peace and relative obscurity. A chance encounter brought back memories of her lost love. The more she pursued her lost love, the more question she faced and the people who were close to her are not what they appear to be.

Even in exile, her constant bedmate would not stop. Now, being hunted, embroiled in an age-old conspiracy, torn apart by various factions, how is a lone drow to survive? Of course, by doing what she did best, raising an army. For the dark-elf Matrons have a nasty habit of not staying down when knocked. They rise up again and come back with fury.



===== Series Info=======

The world-building is a combination of DnD, Pathfinder and Elderscrolls. Though I prefer to take a few liberties if possible.

The yuri/GL Is an extremely slow burn one and the focus is more on the relationship dynamics than romance. 

=====Author Notes=====

This is my first writing attempt, and in the spirit of full disclosure, I am not a native English speaker and I am hoping to use this chance to improve my writing.

Constructive criticisms are always welcome.

I have a full-time job but I would try to keep the releases consistent.

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Table of Contents
75 Chapters
Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue - Part I ago
Prologue - Part -II ago
Prologue - Part -III ago
Chapter 02 - The Escape ago
Chapter 03 - The Prejeudiced Ranger ago
Chapter 04 - Aram's Ploy ago
Chapter 05 - The Bluff ago
Chapter 06 - The Breakout ago
Chapter 07 - Back to the Forest ago
Chapter 08 - Flint-Tooth Tribe ago
Chapter 09 - The Barghest's Bargain ago
Chapter 10 - Taunting the Trolls ago
Chapter 11 - No Place for the Wicked ago
Chapter 12 - The Transitory Abode ago
Chapter 13 - The Overlooked Signet ago
Chapter 14 - The Valorous, The Valiant and the Vagrant ago
Chapter 15 - The Aberrant Irregulars ago
Chapter 16 - The Peddler's Passage ago
Chapter 17 - Taming the Thundertusks ago
Chapter 18 - To Westerleygates ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 19 - The Journey Begins ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 20 - The Wares of the Peddler ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 21 - The Perils of Waylaying ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 22 - The Unwilling Target ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 23 - A Kind Request ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 24 - Shopping not so Much ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 25 - The Box, The Cipher and The Knight ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 26 - The Planar Mage ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 27 - The Second Attempt ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 28 - Free City Sarenthill ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 29 - Seeking Employment ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 30 - Unemployed, but not for Long ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 31 - Seeking the Seeker ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 32 - The Battle in the Bog - Part I ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 33 - The Battle in the Bog - Part II ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 34 - The Battle in the Bog - Part III ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 35 - The Battle in the Bog - Part IV ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 36 - The Surreal Meeting ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 37 – The Retrieval – Part I ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 38 – The Retrieval – Part II ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 39 – The Retrieval – Part III ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 40 - The Retrieval – Part IV ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 41 - The Retrieval – Part V ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 42 - The Retrieval – Part VI ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 43 – The Retrieval – Part VII ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 44 – The Itinerant Loss ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 45 - The Indifference ago
[Arc I - The Dwarven Puzzle Box] - Chapter 46 – The will of a Dead Hero [END of Arc I] && Interlude ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] Chapter 47 – The Vanished Treatise ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] – Chapter 48 – The Weasel’s Worry ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] – Chapter 49 – The Cabinet of Vangere ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] – Chapter 50 – A Corpse Unknown – Part I ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] Chapter 51 - A Corpse Unknown - Part II ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] Chapter 52 - Zaehran, the Ascetic ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] Chapter 53 - The Revelation of an Archoness ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] Chapter 54 - A Herbalist and the Would-be Alchemist ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] Chapter 55 - The Many Interrupted Duel - Part I ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] Chapter 56 - The Many Interrupted Duel - Part II ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] Chapter 57 - The Assault on Asterlund - Part I ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] Chapter 58 - The Assault on Asterlund - Part II ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] Chapter 59 - The Aftermath and the Survivors ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] Chapter 60 - The Off-beaten path ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] Chapter 61 - The Path to Arlond ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] Chapter 62 - The Haunted Low Crag Pass ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] Chapter 63 - Alone Against the Odds ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] Chapter 64 - The Faraway Offer ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] Chapter 65 - The Mismatched Entourage ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] Chapter 66 - Solitude and Gifts ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] Chapter 67 - Mutually Assured Destruction ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] Chapter 68 - The Denizens of Arlond ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] Chapter 69 - Infiltration ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] Chapter 68 - The Denizens of Arlond ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] Chapter 69 - Infiltration ago
[Arc II – The Curseforged City] Chapter 70 - The Underrated Troop ago
[ Arc II – The Curseforged City] – Chapter 71 – The Reaper’s Visit ago

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When I read the point of raising an army in the blurb, I was sceptical. Usually this leads into not much more than a horde of nameless tetrarily characters who seem to just exist to give the actual character story a bigger sense of scale. I myself am very much guilty of that. 

Not our author here though. I was very pleasantly surprised. 

Story: 
Without delving into spoilers, and for the sake of brevity, I want to focus here on what I touched on in the introduction: The author puts a lot of time, energy and detail into the party of our protagonist. They are given names, large sections are purely devoted to logistics, the minutae of legal entities are discussed, battles are fought not by frontal assault, but using the environment, the nature of their enemies, and improvised weaponry. This is a great strength that kept me very much engaged even in sections that I would skim in other works, because they are shown to be of relevance, rather than flexing the authors research. 
I also want to highlight the expansion of  the plot, both figuratively and literally. We do begin at a very small point, but steadily as events compound upon each other, the world and the role of our protagonist and her merry band of misfits begins to grow more and more. This shows both the authors patience, as well as ambition, which I am very happy to see.

Style: 
The story is written in limited first person, with a lot of narration by our main character. I find it very difficult to judge style on objective values, since it is heavily dependent on your own enjoyment. I personally am a bigger fan of third person, but I can acknowledge and appreciate the proximity first person brings to the reader here. It is held consistently, and the narration helps in getting parts of the worldbuilding across, as well as character details, without the need for more intrusive techniques like flashbacks.

Character score: 
This story is clearly and openly centred on our protagonist, who also thanks to the style is given a large amount of space to express herself. There are other important characters in her entourage, but they do not exactly make up an ensemble cast. This in my opinion is a stylistic choice, not a merit or demerit. Regardless, even rather minor villains are given adequate characterisation, their motives are largely believable, and there is a definitive sense of effort of the author into making even low-level adversaries more than carboard with survival instincts. This is very commendable. 
It is also important to note that our protagonist is not only meant to be very seasoned and experienced in her field, but she also shows this time and time again. It is a breath of fresh air to have an already competent protagonist, even moreso to have this actually be done well. 

Grammar score: 
I personally am awful at grammar, especially when it comes  to more minute details and rules, I simply do not notice when they are used wrongly, so I normally withhold any judgement in this matter. However I did notice typos a little more frequently than usual, and found a few sentences to have a strange structure. This however did not detract from my reading experience, 

 

In conclusion, I can only recommend this story. It is more slower paced, demands patience and an interest into the more nitty-gritty aspects of worldbuilding, rather than a simple adventure or quest fantasy. But if these aspects do interest and excite you, then I don't think you will be disappointed. I look forward to see how the story will continue and expand. 

Grayfox
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Had me intrigued, a bit hard to follow at times

Reviewed at: Prologue - Part -II

Updated: premise and MC was interesting. Grammar and spelling errors at times made it hard to follow occasionally. Description of a fight scene could be improved. 

So far its not bad but leaves something to be desired. Will leave it here as I've got other things to read. 

Hopefully it improves over time.