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With trouble as her only constant bedmate, the only aim, after being exiled, was to spend her life in peace and relative obscurity. A chance encounter brought back memories of her lost love. The more she pursued her lost love, the more question she faced and the people who were close to her are not what they appear to be.
Even in exile, her constant bedmate would not stop. Now, being hunted, embroiled in an age-old conspiracy, torn apart by various factions, how is a lone drow to survive? Of course, by doing what she did best, raising an army. For the dark-elf Matrons have a nasty habit of not staying down when knocked. They rise up again and come back with fury.
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The world-building is a combination of DnD, Pathfinder and Elderscrolls. Though I prefer to take a few liberties if possible.
The yuri/GL Is an extremely slow burn one and the focus is more on the relationship dynamics than romance.
This is my first writing attempt, and in the spirit of full disclosure, I am not a native English speaker and I am hoping to use this chance to improve my writing.
Constructive criticisms are always welcome.
I have a full-time job but I would try to keep the releases consistent.
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When I read the point of raising an army in the blurb, I was sceptical. Usually this leads into not much more than a horde of nameless tetrarily characters who seem to just exist to give the actual character story a bigger sense of scale. I myself am very much guilty of that.
Not our author here though. I was very pleasantly surprised.
Without delving into spoilers, and for the sake of brevity, I want to focus here on what I touched on in the introduction: The author puts a lot of time, energy and detail into the party of our protagonist. They are given names, large sections are purely devoted to logistics, the minutae of legal entities are discussed, battles are fought not by frontal assault, but using the environment, the nature of their enemies, and improvised weaponry. This is a great strength that kept me very much engaged even in sections that I would skim in other works, because they are shown to be of relevance, rather than flexing the authors research.
I also want to highlight the expansion of the plot, both figuratively and literally. We do begin at a very small point, but steadily as events compound upon each other, the world and the role of our protagonist and her merry band of misfits begins to grow more and more. This shows both the authors patience, as well as ambition, which I am very happy to see.
The story is written in limited first person, with a lot of narration by our main character. I find it very difficult to judge style on objective values, since it is heavily dependent on your own enjoyment. I personally am a bigger fan of third person, but I can acknowledge and appreciate the proximity first person brings to the reader here. It is held consistently, and the narration helps in getting parts of the worldbuilding across, as well as character details, without the need for more intrusive techniques like flashbacks.
This story is clearly and openly centred on our protagonist, who also thanks to the style is given a large amount of space to express herself. There are other important characters in her entourage, but they do not exactly make up an ensemble cast. This in my opinion is a stylistic choice, not a merit or demerit. Regardless, even rather minor villains are given adequate characterisation, their motives are largely believable, and there is a definitive sense of effort of the author into making even low-level adversaries more than carboard with survival instincts. This is very commendable.
It is also important to note that our protagonist is not only meant to be very seasoned and experienced in her field, but she also shows this time and time again. It is a breath of fresh air to have an already competent protagonist, even moreso to have this actually be done well.
I personally am awful at grammar, especially when it comes to more minute details and rules, I simply do not notice when they are used wrongly, so I normally withhold any judgement in this matter. However I did notice typos a little more frequently than usual, and found a few sentences to have a strange structure. This however did not detract from my reading experience,
In conclusion, I can only recommend this story. It is more slower paced, demands patience and an interest into the more nitty-gritty aspects of worldbuilding, rather than a simple adventure or quest fantasy. But if these aspects do interest and excite you, then I don't think you will be disappointed. I look forward to see how the story will continue and expand.
Updated: premise and MC was interesting. Grammar and spelling errors at times made it hard to follow occasionally. Description of a fight scene could be improved.
So far its not bad but leaves something to be desired. Will leave it here as I've got other things to read.
Hopefully it improves over time.