The Last Orellen

The Last Orellen

by sieley

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Profanity
  • Traumatising content

According to prophecy, the ninth-born child of Lord Orellen will have the sort of power that changes the world. But in a land ruled by magical families, no one welcomes the possibility of a dangerous new player. Fearful even of their allies, the Orellens come up with an extraordinary and deadly scheme to protect themselves.

If the most powerful people in the world wish to kill the ninth-born, they will have to find him or her first. And that's not going to be easy when the Orellens have called upon dark magic to create hundreds of heirs. The boys and girls are given new bodies, new names, and even new magical talents before they are scattered across the continent. Only one among them is the real ninth, but all of them will have to grow up in a world where they are fugitives.

Kalen, once fated to die, is now an Orellen heir in hiding. And he is determined to survive, even if he has to master his strange new powers to do it.


The Last Orellen is a long, character-focused epic fantasy with progression. It's set in a vast universe, and it's about a boy's journey to become a powerful magical practitioner. Reviews are deeply appreciated. Please do not repost my work elsewhere without my written permission.


What type of reader is this book for? You might enjoy The Last Orellen if you like...

Clever and resourceful protagonists.

Big fantasy worlds. Multiple cultures, lots of characters, many different types of magic--this story is expansive rather than closely focused on a narrow storyline. 

Old-school epic fantasy.

Progression fantasy that takes its time. Our main character will be progressing through magical ranks, but this is going to be a lengthy story. If you're more about the journey than the destination, this might be the book for you.

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The kind of story you come here hoping to find

Reviewed at: Chapter 20: Sprout

Just one of those gems that you always hope you'll come across. Never reviewed on this website before, felt this really deserved one - I'd 5-star it for the story alone, but about the smaller details, the humour, the magic, the dialogue, the time jumps and even the rare POV shifts I have nothing to complain about. 

Style - I don't usually measure the prose of webnovels against all the fiction I've read, because the vast majority don't quite measure up to the best professional works we hold dear. This rating isn't based on those standards, it's excellent execution of ideas and the story by any metric. Dialogue in particular flows really well and overall I haven't come across any areas of awkward sentence or scene structure.

Story - I'm glad we were told at the start that this would be a long, slow book, and I adjusted my expectations accordingly. The first few chapters meander a bit unless looked at this way, where now I was happy to relax and enjoy the worldbuilding and watch the stage be set. The core of the story starts around a 100 pages in, and from then on it's very tightly plotted. If the pace and lack of filler keeps up throughout the promised length I'll be very happy. 

Grammar No mistakes that stick out, nothing else needed. 

Character - Reckon here's where it shines, almost want to give the other areas 4 stars to make it clear. It's this last chapter (20) that truly convinced me, Zevnie's (hopefully part of the main cast going forward) characterization was a great read. Captures the cruelty of genuine thoughtlessness over premeditated malice we see so often in children. In all of her insecurity, spite, subsequent guilt when she realizes actions have *consequences* that she isn't quite prepared to accept responsibiltiy for, and her roundabout methods of attempting reparations to avoid awkardness. It's rather cute and one of the best depictions of teenage behaviour I've seen here. If this is the attention important characters get going forward we're in for a treat. 

playmenot
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This is how I fell in love with reading

Reviewed at: Chapter 19: The Sorcerer's Apprentice

This book reminds me of how I fell so deep in love with reading.

If anyone read a book that shares the same feelings that are aroused when reading "The Last Orellen." Please share. In my case, it was the Dune Series.

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I am a regretful ghost. I have a deep unsatiated hunger for a ten-book series. I need to be saved. "HELP!"

sindre
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This story deserves to take RR by storm. A must read, and my only complaint so far is the length.

Story:

The intro might be a little frustrating if you start reading it as a cookie cutter RR light novel. However when seen as a start to a long novel it fits perfectly, and is executed very well. Teasing the future of the story left and right, and dropping just enough of a back story to give us something to build on.

For example, I think the inclusion of the mystical spatial mage right at the start was a nice touch - As it hints to where our budding MC might once end up. It gives the story some potential for future tension beyond what is the focus right now.

Characterization 

This has so far impressed me greatly, and the author is currently writing some of the most realistic child/ teenage dialogue i've read on RR. The MC draws me in, and you quickly end up wanting to root for him. The few side characters we've currently seen are diverse and have their own goals. As opposed to just following along on a farm boy to hero journey...

 

Grammar:

No complaints here. The author quickly edits any of the few errors that gets pointed out.

 

World Wolf
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I very rarely review books, but this. This is some of the best writing I have read in a long time anywhere, not just RR. The way the characters are written and the way we see their personalities is just unbelievable. Even the magic system is very interesting, I may not have seen much of it so far but it seems really thought out but still like magic not a typical RPG system. I really hope sieley continues this because it is amazing. If you are looking for an amazing book with endless potential this is the one for you.

mike karr
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insanely good, quite possibly the best book I've read on RR and Ive read a ton . Seriously do yourself a favor and pick this one up . The writing and concept is so insanely good... but the most impressive thing is the magic. The way it starts is just ,.... ugh its so good . 

Nomad1791
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It's one in the morning and I'm sad Im caught up. Story is very engaging and enjoyable. Characters are all fleshed out and have a feel of life to them world is easily slipped into. Grammer is excellent pacing is good and magic system has a skeleton so far that makes me think it'll be very impressive once fully fleshed out. Not a lot to write on with only 18 chapters but hopefully this gives everyone a idea what they getting into. Oh and MC is likable from my point of view even in the annoying kid years. I'll update to an advanced review at 50 chapter. Unless of course I forget 😂

F r a n
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A novel with a heart and a will

Reviewed at: Chapter 17: Novice, Pt. 2

The story is amazing and unique, one of the best on royalroad ( in my opinion ). The characters feel real and the setting is amazing, I love how it's set off the continent so far. Furthermore there magic system is quite ingenious so far, as it has the different branches of magic. 

 As a reader I believe it would be amazing if you integrated the few side notes (the text in the brackets) into the inner dialogue of the characters, as this would make the plot flow smoother and mabe you could assign the characters who get a pov some special quirks. Disclaimer, this is just some constructive criticism as I have already said the novel is amazing so far. 

One of my favourite characters is Lord Orellen. Since he's currently in the middle of all the action and he's got his luck magic I believe he can be an epic wild card, I'd love to here of his exploits in future chapter if you've got that planned. Keep up the amazing writing I'm looking forward to it. 

 

Raginggod
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Ah, it warms my heart to come across web-fictions such as this. 

As a fan of the all time greats such as Worm, a Practical Guide to Evil, and Mother of Learning, I am convinced that The Last Orellen too can and will stand with the best of them. 

I adore the characters, world-building, and humor in this story and wish the author all the best in continuing to write what is hopefully a very long story. 

Megumi-chan
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This is a wonderful story. The characters are well written and the story is engaging and complex without being overwhelming. I highly recommend this one. My only regret is that there are only 21 chapters so far... thank for this delightful read, Sieley! I am looking forward to a long and winding tale.

uupatrooper2
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If you're looking at reviews, just read it

Reviewed at: Chapter 21: Allies

Seriously. Just do it. I nearly passed this up thinking it would be another fantasy adventure like, frankly, so many others on RR - even highly ranked ones. This is not that. Not by a mile.

If you've gone this far to see if it's worth a shot - just yes. It absolutely is worth it.