The Last Orellen

The Last Orellen

by sieley

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Profanity
  • Traumatising content

According to prophecy, the ninth-born child of Lord Orellen will have the sort of power that changes the world. But in a land ruled by magical families, no one welcomes the possibility of a dangerous new player. Fearful even of their allies, the Orellens come up with an extraordinary and deadly scheme to protect themselves.

If the most powerful people in the world wish to kill the ninth-born, they will have to find him or her first. And that's not going to be easy when the Orellens have called upon dark magic to create hundreds of heirs. The boys and girls are given new bodies, new names, and even new magical talents before they are scattered across the continent. Only one among them is the real ninth, but all of them will have to grow up in a world where they are fugitives.

Kalen, once fated to die, is now an Orellen heir in hiding. And he is determined to survive, even if he has to master his strange new powers to do it.


The Last Orellen is a long, character-focused epic fantasy with progression. It's set in a vast universe, and it's about a boy's journey to become a powerful magical practitioner. Reviews are deeply appreciated. Please do not repost my work elsewhere without my written permission.


What type of reader is this book for? You might enjoy The Last Orellen if you like...

Clever and resourceful protagonists.

Big fantasy worlds. Multiple cultures, lots of characters, many different types of magic--this story is expansive rather than closely focused on a narrow storyline. 

Old-school epic fantasy.

Progression fantasy that takes its time. Our main character will be progressing through magical ranks, but this is going to be a lengthy story. If you're more about the journey than the destination, this might be the book for you.

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shachlo
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So far to 20 chapters this one was very exciting. One thing you might need to know is that it has kind of reincarnation as the tag says, but it is not isekai or chinese styled reincarnation. It is slow paced progression story, so far no fighting scenes happened, kid mc that is not too much either "grown up trapped in child body" or "uwu baba boring child". I like EVERYTHING so far.

Zach or Zach
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Well written, well thought out, believable, fun, entertaining.

Just about everything you could get right with a story Sieley has, and it's fantastic.

Not much else to say other than that, it's just really well done, and hits all the boxes for things I like.

....Could do with a more concrete update schedule roight now though.

Elaiyu
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One of the best novels I've had a pleasure of reading. It's those kinds of stories that you just dream to stumble upon.

If the author keeps up with their current momentum, I have no doubt that this will cement itself among the top dogs of RR. It's really just that good.

Monus
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I don't even know where to start with this one. There is just so much stuff I want to praise.

So I will start with some harsh criticism. How dare you rob me of my sleep? I only wanted to read a single chapter and now I binged the other 18 in a night. Not cool

What is cool though is the story telling. It is amazeballs. I have rarely been drawn into a story so wholeheartedly and this story has the potential to become my all-time favorite on this site in a few hundred chapters. I don't say this lightly and mean it. Quick shootout for the magic system because it is great too.

The characters are just great. The are believable - which is really important to me. They also carry heft. Most of the character have some real depth to them. We get introduced to the MC in chapter 1 but only really get to know them in chapter ~10 and onwards. The backstory is very unique and we truely great interactions between the MC and his family.

I swear btw that you somehow now my mother because some of the stuff... Uncanny.

Grammar and Style with just get a short mention, because while they lay an amazing foundation for what this story is, I am not an authority on either.

Grammar/Spelling is great. I have even tried finding some issues but I really couldn't. But what I can tell you is that both massive intertwine with the storytelling bringing the writing itself to great heights.

This story is definitely already on a publishing level.

TooLucid
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We are thrust into some very interesting and well thought out situations. A mix of fleshed out characters. Such an inticing and thoroughly developed world. Not to mention the magic system, which is slowly revealed and seems so very difficult and real. The first nine chapters are amazingly well crafted and set up the MCs new life and internal predicaments in a very tasteful way.

It's delicious. All of it. The MC is such a pleasant character to read about and I am looking forward to seeing where he goes, what he learns, and if he can escape the dangers that are almost certainly searching for him. 

CuriousKronos
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Cohesive, creative, and compelling

Reviewed at: Chapter 21: Allies

I am really impressed. The world building here really has me hooked. The basic premise takes a few chapters to play out, but the story it sets up is rich and novel. It really doesn't fit into any of the moulds I recognize in most other stories. I particularly enjoy how all of the plot points so far are WELL thought out, their causes clear and logical, and their consequencess considered. It all flows smoothly from the setting and the personality of the characters involved. 

 

Just wish there was were more of it! 

MeowMix
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Grandiose, Ambitious, and Achieving

Reviewed at: Chapter 21: Allies

To the current point the webfiction has been a delight to read. Some complain about the prologue having characters that aren't the protagonist. I find that it's a wonderful and fulfilling introduction to the setting and our protagonist. We learn a great many things that ground character motivation and give us a good measure of where different powers sit.

Style: It's not simple, it's not verbose. While some choice terms could do with some more sense, the style itself is allows for comprehension, depth and fun. It does well in its function as a vehicle for enjoyment.

Story: To the current point, wonderful. There's great depth to prologue and it effects on the protagonist. It gives a grand explanation for the circumstance of the protagonist who is currently a likeable and dedicated child. But very well written as a likeable child. If the efficacy of the childhood arc persists, this story will inevitably rise to the top.

Grammar: Haven't noticed anything off. No use of unusual syntax so far. Good.

Character: Well written adoptive parents, who have character while being set pieces. The village has personality, with customs and all. The protagonist is fleshed out and has many logical reasons for his grand destiny, (not in reference to the prophecy). 

Eagerly awaits for more.

Kenopipuu
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At chapter 10 and already I feel that this competes with the professional fantasy heavy hitters. Even though the beginning is not an action packed storm of usual tropes... or because of it. This one has great potential, story and writer alike.

Good luck sieley ;)

And good luck for the Orellens.

Onehand_Writer
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A well planned and executed prog fantasy epic. Setting feels deep and vast. Characters are distinct. Main character is likable and flawed, but not annoying despite being a kid. Magic system is intriguing and mysterious and revealed at a satisfying pace. And pacing is nice too. Doesn't feel like the story lingers too long on fluff. It's constantly going forward.

Wyver
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The kind of story you come here hoping to find

Reviewed at: Chapter 20: Sprout

Just one of those gems that you always hope you'll come across. Never reviewed on this website before, felt this really deserved one - I'd 5-star it for the story alone, but about the smaller details, the humour, the magic, the dialogue, the time jumps and even the rare POV shifts I have nothing to complain about. 

Style - I don't usually measure the prose of webnovels against all the fiction I've read, because the vast majority don't quite measure up to the best professional works we hold dear. This rating isn't based on those standards, it's excellent execution of ideas and the story by any metric. Dialogue in particular flows really well and overall I haven't come across any areas of awkward sentence or scene structure.

Story - I'm glad we were told at the start that this would be a long, slow book, and I adjusted my expectations accordingly. The first few chapters meander a bit unless looked at this way, where now I was happy to relax and enjoy the worldbuilding and watch the stage be set. The core of the story starts around a 100 pages in, and from then on it's very tightly plotted. If the pace and lack of filler keeps up throughout the promised length I'll be very happy. 

Grammar No mistakes that stick out, nothing else needed. 

Character - Reckon here's where it shines, almost want to give the other areas 4 stars to make it clear. It's this last chapter (20) that truly convinced me, Zevnie's (hopefully part of the main cast going forward) characterization was a great read. Captures the cruelty of genuine thoughtlessness over premeditated malice we see so often in children. In all of her insecurity, spite, subsequent guilt when she realizes actions have *consequences* that she isn't quite prepared to accept responsibiltiy for, and her roundabout methods of attempting reparations to avoid awkardness. It's rather cute and one of the best depictions of teenage behaviour I've seen here. If this is the attention important characters get going forward we're in for a treat.