The Last Orellen

The Last Orellen

by sieley

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Profanity
  • Traumatising content

According to prophecy, the ninth-born child of Lord Orellen will have the sort of power that changes the world. But in a land ruled by magical families, no one welcomes the possibility of a dangerous new player. Fearful even of their allies, the Orellens come up with an extraordinary and deadly scheme to protect themselves.

If the most powerful people in the world wish to kill the ninth-born, they will have to find him or her first. And that's not going to be easy when the Orellens have called upon dark magic to create hundreds of heirs. The boys and girls are given new bodies, new names, and even new magical talents before they are scattered across the continent. Only one among them is the real ninth, but all of them will have to grow up in a world where they are fugitives.

Kalen, once fated to die, is now an Orellen heir in hiding. And he is determined to survive, even if he has to master his strange new powers to do it.


The Last Orellen is a long, character-focused epic fantasy with progression. It's set in a vast universe, and it's about a boy's journey to become a powerful magical practitioner. Reviews are deeply appreciated. Please do not repost my work elsewhere without my written permission.


What type of reader is this book for? You might enjoy The Last Orellen if you like...

Clever and resourceful protagonists.

Big fantasy worlds. Multiple cultures, lots of characters, many different types of magic--this story is expansive rather than closely focused on a narrow storyline. 

Old-school epic fantasy.

Progression fantasy that takes its time. Our main character will be progressing through magical ranks, but this is going to be a lengthy story. If you're more about the journey than the destination, this might be the book for you.

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caerulex
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Exceptional Storytelling, Characters

Reviewed at: Chapter 21: Allies

The Last Orellen is a fast-paced adventure built on an impressively creative and original premise.

Luck magic is useless--or is it? The Lord of house Orellen has an affinity for luck magic in a family dominated by rare practitioners of spatial magic. When Lord Orellen receives a rare prophecy (the woman who gives them only wakes up for one day every so many years and gives only one prophecy), he realizes immediately that it is too good--so good that the potential fortune it heralds leaves his family in danger of being exterminated by the other magic houses.

But Lord Orellen has one secret up his sleeve--luck magic works, but it's finicky and tricky and can only work in specific ways. To save his family, he's going to need all the luck he can eek out, and he hatches a daring, almost ridiculous plan.

Interesting as Lord Orellen is, he isn't the MC. Our MC is a young Orellen--one pawn of many in Lord Orellen's heist. We follow him as he grows up and begins to learn magic on the outskirts of the world, where magic is inconsistent, ebbing and flowing with the appearance of the aurora borealis. The MC is eminently likeable. He's curious and wholesome in his innocence, and his love for magic is written wonderfully. I can't wait to read how the MC will grow up (there are numerous time skips but all are very logical and make sense).

The prose is excellent. Very well written. Errors are almost nonexistent and the work feels very polished.

I confess a few scenes regarding Lord Orellen's heist were a bit confusing/complicated, but that is just about my only criticism.

Highly recommended!

Nobility
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A Progression Fantasy with Plot

Reviewed at: Chapter 18: Guest

The Last Orellen reads like a professionally published fantasy novel. Sieley has created a world and situation that allows us to explore a more western take on the genre. The starting plot of the story gives everything so much more meaning and showcases a story about more than just the rise to power. Characters act their age and in ways that make sense. 

If the story continues in the quality in the direction it has started with I have no doubt this will be among the top novels of Royal Road. Quality on par with Mother of Learning.

I look forward to how this story will develop, hope you give it a read!

hobbes319
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Overall, really well done. This story has good worldbuilding, complex characters and a fascinating premise that doesn't seem like it will run out of steam. The magic system is wonderfully mysterious; the reader is given enough that we can understand some of the basics, but is left in the dark when it comes to the higher possibilities of magic, something that I think is sorely needed in fantasy stories these days. On top of that, the parts about luck magic make it clear that there is always going to be an avenue for exploration, which is exciting. The Last Orellan is a gem.

xaviermcc
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I dont ever really write reviews, but this is a really promosing start. Has all the elements needed to be up there with the best on this site and is the most promosing new story i have seen in a while. I would highly recommed reading it.

 

Keep it up Mr Author!

 

Edit: Now on chapter 21 and its still really fucking good.

apotheon
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A most promising story!

Reviewed at: Chapter 18: Guest

At first I held off on reading this story when I saw it on Rising Stars, thinking I'd had enough of progression stories. However, once I gave it a go, I have to say this story already comes across as much more than a mere progression story and is instead a very promising addition to the monomyth.

From the very beginning, The Last Orellan grabs you. Stylistically, the author's voice is compelling, avoiding the two extremes of being either dull or florid, and this is aided greatly by (as far as my untrained eye can discern) a complete lack of grammatical errors. The characters are distinct and interesting; within only a few chapters, I'd come to sympathise with Elph and, soon after, the Orellan family. That speaks also to how well written the story itself is, which is where I think the novel truly shines.

While it is yet early days, the overarching narrative has already established clear stakes and asked questions the reader can't help but be hooked by. I have hope the author can carry the narrative through, as they have already done a fine job of paying off minor set-ups within the first few chapters, displaying (to me at least) a fair understanding of how to plot out a well-structured and rewarding story arc.

My one criticism is that while the characters are sympathetic and, more importantly, distinct from one another, it feels like they are lacking a bit in terms of depth beyond their surface-level qualities. Hopefully this can be remedied going forwards as the pace of the plot is not quite so quick as in the establishing chapters so we have more time to engage with each character's wants/needs/etc., but really this is a minor quibble given how early in the story this review is being written.

Overall, rare is it that a story on Rising Stars really grabs hold of my attention as firmly as this one does, and rarer still that it's so good it compels me to write a review! Needless to say, I highly recommend this story to anyone's who reading this review as I genuinely think this is one of RR's up-and-comers (Or at least I hope so, because it definitely deserves it!)

Xenteko
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Reminiscent of classic fantasy novels.

Reviewed at: Chapter 20: Sprout

I gave this a try based on caerulex's review, and it greatly exceeded my expectations.

It really doesn't feel like a webnovel. If I'd picked this up from the fantasy section of a bookstore twenty-odd years ago, it would have felt perfectly at home. It reads like a novel published by a big house in the days of classic post-tolkien fantasy.

The pacing is excellent in a measured way that makes me somewhat confidant that the author has actually planned their story beginning to end. It has none of the erratic, haphazard feel that so many webnovels tend to. If the first "book" doesn't already have a rough draft, I would be quite surprised. Though I know nothing about creative writing, so I could be completely wrong about that.

The prose has a good flow to it that I always appreciate. It's not overambitious or unwieldy, which helps tie everything together nicely.

The charactersation is excellent, with people having distinct personalities even with very little "screen time". It's still quite early in the development of the protagonist and other central characters, but what I've seen so far is very promising.

The grammar is flawless as far as I could tell. I'm not hugely obsessive over it, but I do tend to notice mistakes.

Everything about it is satisfying to read, and I honestly couldn't think of a major criticism if I tried.

 

All I can say is if you're hankering for some classic Hero's journey fantasy, this is absolutely worth your time.

Zarelto
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A novel you need to read.

Reviewed at: Chapter 21: Allies

I really recommend you give it a read since its so good and u know for sure the author wont just randomly drop it since you can see  he  puts his best in this novel.

HERE'S WHY. 

 

Style-a bit confusing in the beginning cuz there are a lot of pov changes(that actually help the reader understand the story better) with a lot of characters and some flashbacks with how thing got to the point where they are.

Story- i can see the author has a plan for the future and knows what he's doing. He actually sets the prologue,doesnt go in blind,we can see what the characters feel like.

Grammar- seen like 3 mistakes and all were corrected very fast

Characters- they feel alive,they have emotions,they feel pain and sadness,they act like humans and they choose the best choices they can. 

Dialogue feels like its real between people.

Sorry for the grammar (english isn't my first language)

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Arensor
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First off this story is compelling as few others are. The way intrigue is mixed in while keeping the story grounded is incredible. The first chapters are used to setup much of the world and establish a base for the story. The world feels intrinsically magical and that there could be something amazing around every corner.  On the topic of magic itself there are many traditional schools of magic like fire and water but there are many more such as luck or mind that aren't quite as standard. The author's style is wonderful in that things are described but leaves out things extraneous to the story. The characters, their actions, and their personalities are all distinct and feel real. I have yet to see any grammatical errors which is quite nice. All in all this story makes me want to gush about why I think it's so great. So many stories with a "chosen one" feel contrived and unrealistic but somehow the author has set up a "chosen one" that feels authentic and interesting. I'm very excited to see the way this story goes and the author has given himself enough room that it feels like it could be "epic" in length but that the story will have an ending. Currently waiting for the author's patreon to start up so I can support him. Big props to the author.

Artherix
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Definitely has the potential to be one of the best no oks on royal road. It's original and has next to no flaws. It's also nice that the child is a child and not some genius. Everyone has emotions and a personality, their not just there for the sake of being there. Great novel, keep it up!!!

vesuvius
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The writing throughout is solid. The first few chapters almost lost me with the time jumps and multiple character POV's but it was well worth it. This is a very enjoyable story to read. The story's pace is just a touch too slow, but I haven't skipped or skimmed any parts of the story. I have been engaged in reading the entire time.